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Spike's Real Worth - Yosh-E-O



Spike falls into a depression upon realizing how little he is actually needed since Twilight officially became "The Princess of Friendship"

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Spike's Real Worth

Spike sat alone in his room within the Castle of Friendship and sighed.

“Here I am,” he sighed while lowering the comic he was reading. “Just me, my comics, and an entire castle with nobody in it except for me.”

The purple dragon with grass-green spikes tossed his comic aside, put his hands to his bright green cheeks, and closed his eyes.

“You’d think having a castle to yourself with nobody to bother you while you do whatever you want would be great,” he said. “But it’s not.”

Spike opened his eyes to take in all that his room had to offer. There were certainly a number of posters, items, comics, and other materials that made this room Spike’s own. This was a great improvement upon having to share space alongside Twilight’s bed at the Golden Oaks Library where he had no place to openly display those things that made him special.

“But these are just,” he said while looking at a poster of the Power Ponies. “Just things.”

The little dragon’s attention turned to a doll he had hand sewn of Rarity. He had put a lot of effort into gathering the materials and even more effort into the stitching.

“Is this the closest I’ll ever get to you?” he asked while looking the plush Rarity in its button eyes.”

The young dragon thought on how many times he had helped Rarity and how Rarity had asked him for help. However, after opening her boutique in Canterlot he had barely seen her much at all. He had really hoped to have been a part of helping her with the Carousel Boutique and Canterlot Carousel. However, he wasn’t offered a chance to help at all.

“And who’s this Sassy Saddles?” he asked while allowing the plush Rarity to slip from view. “Am I nothing more than just a convenience? A second thought? The one who only is a part of things when nobody else is, or wants, to do something for you?”

Spike gently placed his Rarity plush on a nearby table that had a collection of parchment. Most of which were doodles of him and Rarity together, or of him being involved in an adventure that Twilight and her friends had gone on that he was not asked to be a part of.

“What am I anymore?” he asked while flipping through his doodles. “I don’t even send letters to Princess Celestia anymore.”

Spike thought for a moment, grabbed a scroll and quill, and wrote a letter.

FWOOSH!

The letter vaporized in a cloud of green smoke.

About five minutes later the young dragon felt the urge to burp something up.

BUURRPPFFF!

From the green gas cloud that emerged from his maw came a scroll in which he eagerly caught in his claws.

“Dear Spike,” it read. “I appreciate your offer to help, but I have no need of your services today. Your truly, Princess Celestia.”

Spike took the paper, crumpled it up, and tossed it into a nearby wastebasket.

“Nobody needs me,” he said while making his way back to his bed. “I’m just… here.”

The young dragon felt tears beginning to form in his eyes. He knew Twilight wanted him to clean the castle while he and the others were gone, but he just wasn’t feeling up to it.

“Not like it matters anyway,” he said to himself while looking towards his pillow. “It’ll just get all dirty again.”

Spike sat on his bed and looked at the pictures he had hanging on his wall. The first being one of Twilight smiling beside him as he sat in an eggshell.

“Did you ever see me as a son?” he asked. “I can remember you teaching me how to read and write, but I can’t at all remember a time where you held me, sang me a lullaby, or called me your son.”

The next picture he looked towards was the one where he returned Pee-Wee to his parents.

“And when I finally got a pet,” he said. “You made me take it back. I mean, a baby should be with its parents…”

Spike felt tears now beginning to make their way out of his eyes as he looked back to the picture of Twilight smiling by him in an egg.

“But..,” he sniffled. “What about… What about my parents?”

The sad baby dragon looked to another picture. This one being of Twilight’s birthday party that was moved to Canterlot at the last minute due to Rarity having business there that kept her from being able to come to the one planned in Ponyville.

“And nobody told me…,” he whimpered. “You all just left for Canterlot while I stayed back all by myself in the library.”

Spike got up from his bed, narrowed his eyes, and flicked off the picture of himself he had attached to the birthday picture.

“There in spirit,” he said. “My spirit’s broken.”

Depression set deep into the little dragon’s heart. He couldn’t bring himself to feel happy, excited, or inspired by anything. Nothing mattered. So he went to his bed and cried himself to sleep.

***

“Hey, Spike,” said Twilight. “Could you take a letter to the princess for me?”

“Sure!” cheered Spike as he brought out his quill and parchment. “What do you want me to write?”

“Dear Princess Celestia,” stated Twilight. “I am no longer of need of an assistant and would kindly like to ask if you’d approve of me relieving Spike of duty.”

Spike gasped as he finished writing the final words.

“But…,” he whimpered.

“Send it!” ordered Twilight.

Spike did as he was told. Within moments the room he was in vanished and he was now standing outside of the Carousel Boutique.

KNOCK-KNOCK-KNOCK

“Come in!” announced Rarity in a merry tone.

Spike opened the door and went inside.

Upon entering, he saw Rarity with Sassy Saddles.

“Oh,” said Rarity. “It’s… you.”

“Twilight doesn’t need me anymore,” stated Spike. “So I thought I could perhaps help you.”

Rarity and Sassy Saddles laughed in unison.

“You?” asked Sassy. “Why would Rarity ever need you when business is simply booming!”

“Perhaps…,” struggled Spike. “I could help sew?”

Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo, and Apple Bloom came running into the room.

“Already on it!” announced the orange Pegasus.

“Yeah!” squeaked Sweetie Belle. “We’re going to get our Cutie Marks through being interns with my sister and Sassy!”

“We’re entrepreneurs!” added Apple Bloom.

“That’s right!” squealed Rarity. “They’re going to help me open Carousel Manehattan!”

Spike watched as he soon became completely ignored as the Cutie Mark Crusaders, Rarity, and Sassy Saddles talked excitedly about all the possibilities that were to come from their efforts.

“I’ll just let myself out…,” he said while making his way for the door.

“Well, well,” said a teenage red dragon as Spike opened the door. “You still haven’t paid up for humiliating me during the raid.”

Spike stumbled back to find himself now in the crater where he had met the teenage dragons.

“Yeah!” the purple one exclaimed. “Time to pay up!”

A larger, brown dragon took hold of Spike and held him up.

“He’s all yours, Garble!” he bellowed. “Knock the pony out of him!”

Garble snarled as he raised his sharp claw up in preparation to swipe.

“STOP!” cried a powerful voice that appeared vibrantly in the sky.

Garble and company turned to notice Princess Luna making her way down into the crater. They then disappeared and Spike fell on his backside as he was now back in his room.

“Princess Luna?” he asked while rubbing at his sore rump. “This was-”

“-A dream,” she interjected. “One in which I had to bring to an end for fear of what these feelings in inadequacy and loneliness could ultimately do to you.”

Spike sighed.

“Spike,” said Luna. “Allow me to show you something.”

Spike watched as Luna transformed herself into Nightmare Moon.

“…!” gasped the purple dragon.

“Do not fret,” Luna said in her Nightmare Moon voice. “For this is but an illusion.”

Luna returned to her standard form.

“I, too, felt obsolete, uncared for, useless, unloved, and a number of other horrible things,” she said somberly. “However they were all untrue.”

“Untrue?” asked Spike.

“Yes,” said Luna. “It was through my sister’s faith in Twilight Sparkle making friends that the elements I once wielded were able to help me start on a quest towards inner harmony.”

“…,” sighed Spike

Luna wrapped a hoof around Spike and nuzzled him with her muzzle.

“Spike,” she said. “Do not let your perception of the world and those around you make you into something you know you’re not.”

“But…,” said Spike.

“I know,” acknowledged Luna. “And that is why I’m here.”

“So…,” awed Spike. “You know…”

Luna nodded and replied, “I do.”

“So...?” he asked. “…how? How do I not become these dark feelings?”

Luna used her dream magic to make the room blank with the exception of random images of ponies all across Equestria.

“These are all the ponies to whom you have changed their lives for the better,” stated Luna. “All the ponies who, without you, may not have found the happiness, solutions, or opportunities they have now if you hadn’t been a part of their lives.”

Spike noticed Twilight go by in one of the images.

“Yes,” said Luna. “Twilight may not be much of a parent, but she could’ve never unlocked the magic of friendship if you weren’t the first to introduce her to it.”

“That wasn’t me,” Spike sighed. “That was Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Fluttershy, and…. Rarity.”

“But who kept working so hard to keep Twilight’s head out of the books and looking into the value of friends?” asked Luna.

“…,” blinked Spike.

“It was you,” she answered.

The room changed to where it was now where Twilight and Spike first began their independent studies.

“Do you remember how you kept track of all of those who were friends with Twilight?” asked the princess. “How it was you who thought of Moon Dancer, Minuette, Lyra, and the others?”

Spike put a claw to his chin.

“I…, I do,” he said.

Luna returned them to Spike’s room.

“Some ponies can’t see beyond what’s in front of their noses,” said Luna. “Me included.”

Spike didn’t know what to say.

Luna used her magic to bring the Rarity plush back over to Spike.

“Take hold,” she said.

Spike held the plush and felt himself grow happier.

“Rarity may not outwardly show her appreciation for you,” said Luna. “However, she does care and cares a lot.”

Luna created an image of a windowless room with Rarity inside of it. It had a manikin in the shape and size of Spike with a number of fabrics strewn about. The white Unicorn’s face blushing as she thought to herself, sighed, and then levitated the fire ruby Spike had given her onto the manikin.

“Oh, Spike,” she said. “You should’ve been the Element of Generosity. Not me.”

Spike couldn’t believe what he was hearing.

“Even with Coco,” she said. “My so-called ‘generosity’ only got me out of doing work I really didn’t want to do.”

Spike watched tears form in Rarity’s eyes.

“Why can’t I ever do something without having an alterior motive?” she sobbed. “Why can’t I be more like… you.”

Rarity left the room and Luna had the image disappear.

“These are things I wish I had shown to me before forcing my sister’s hoof,” the princess stated. “There is so much you do that is appreciated, but goes without validation.”

Spike smiled towards the princess as he snuggled his plush Rarity close.

“So,” he said. “I am more appreciated than Twilight, Rarity, or others ever say to me?”

“Yes,” agreed Luna with a smile. “One does not need verbally recognized to know she, or he, is an important part of many lives.”

Spike felt his spirits lift.

“Allow me to do but one more thing,” stated Luna.

PHEW-CLICK-TACK

“Now, Spike,” she said. “It’s time to wake up.”

***

Spike arose from his bed. The room was how he left it when he fell asleep.

“Wow,” he said while getting to his feet. “I never realized how important I really am. I may not be told a lot about how important I am, or brought along for adventures, but I do serve a purpose and I’m proud of what I do.”

Spike smiled to himself as he prepared to put on his frilly apron. However, something caught his eye that he did not recall ever having seen before.

“What’s this?” he asked while approaching the new picture that was on his wall.

“Oh, wow…,” he awed while pulling the picture down and looking close at it. It was of Twilight in a rocking chair with Spike bundled up in pink pajamas as she smiled down upon him. Celestia was off to the left side smiling as Cadence and Shining Armoer were on the other. There was also a note attached to the back that read, “Dearest Spike,” along with a series of individually written messages from Celestia, Cadance, Shining Armor, and Twilight. All noting their love for him and how they knew he was something special who would forever change Equestria for the better.

Comments ( 41 )

Definitely a Spike Appreciation Party for him.

6501981
He most definitely deserves one so I thought I'd give him one. One that would most canon fit as possible, too. :)

Thanks for reading and your comment! :)

6501999 This is a good story, but if spike felt that way about the main six doing stuff. Couldn't he spend the day with Big Mac, the CMC or anyone else in ponyville? Or better yet he could go on adventure himself, so he is not stuck in the castle.(Bracing myself for the storm of dislikes)

Heartfelt conversations. Trying not to cry in joy and sadness. Failing.
Great Story.

Sequel anyone?

My thoughts after reading this:
-- nopony (or dragon) is truly an island
-- It's ABOUT DAMN TIME!!!
-- nice to see that Spike does learn his true worth, and there wasn't anypony ever more qualified than the one pony that did succumb to jealousy and unappreciation, the Princess of the Night herself---and it really did hit home when Luna dons her Nightmare Moon form to tell Spike about this.

One thing though. I understand that Luna speaks to everypony in dreams, so there is the real issue of whether what you see in your dreams are more premonitions or how you think about things from a previous time That's the murkiness. My question though is: when Luna was showing Spike these things, like the Rarity conversation for example, is that her true thoughts, or is just a dream conversation? The last couple of sentences where it showed that Spike had recieved genuine letters of appreciation from pretty much the entire Royal Court points to being true, but I would like a more certain answer.

6502177
No need to brace yourself. Spike is a fictional character in a fictional world. As a fan writer of such a character, I know everyone has different views on how a character may feel, act, etc. :)


The premise I went with is show canon history. There haven't been really any episodes where Spike is hanging out with the CMC, Big Mac, or going on his own adventures (With the exception of "Dragon Quest"). So, from my 'opinion' of Spike's life, he is dedicated to being a "Faithful Assistant".


We did get mention of him talking about sports with Big Mac, but we never saw it happen. I also don't know how much a Baby Dragon / Kid Dragon would get along with a grown stallion who isn't nearly as emotional as he is. It takes a lot to get Big Mac going beyond a "Eeyup!" or a "Nope!". This was shown in "Ponville Confidential" and "Brotherhoof Social".

Spike seems like he'd be perfect to share adventures with the CMC, too. Heck, we even had an episode, or two, where Spike had apparently, off-screen, provided suggestions to Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo. However, the writers have yet to pair him up with them and their club. The closest we got was that he was the one who had to make Nachos for "Twilight Time" and he seemed more depressed over that than excited.

Any thoughts? Is there something I may have missed that could be more believable that he'd be doing more than awaiting Twilight's orders and/or permission?

6502185
I'm very happy you enjoyed the story. It was one inspired by so many different things from the show, my real life, and my efforts as lead of "Coping with Limitations Through Pony".

Thanks so much for your time in reading and commenting on this tale. :)

6502368
I have an idea of a possible sequel. Obviously it would be up to the reader to see where things would go from here. However, I'm not opposed to presenting my own take on the events in which would follow such a realization.

Once more, I thank you for your support, time, and encouragement.

6502374
Luna is most certainly one of the most interesting characters the writers have had the opportunity to develop. We know through her encounters with the CMC that she can manipulate dreams based on memories that are buried deep within the mind of the one she is in contact with. We also know she can take on the form of a fear along with accessing the dreams of others at any time she pleases.

So the Rarity encounter could be seen as Luna recalling a moment she may have seen in one of Rarity's dreams. This moment being one where she questioned being the "Element of Generosity". This dream may have happened to her after Spike gave her his Fire Ruby. It meant a lot to her and inspired her a lot.

In the show, Rarity seldom is seen being generous without some sort of expectation and/or exchange for it. Spike, on the other hand, is more often shown giving his time and effort without so much of a 'Thank You' being given in return. He self-sacrifices a lot for the Mane 6 and there are also times where Rarity has used Spike's "Crush" on her to get something she wanted. However, he just does it even if she doesn't give him anything in return. Not even a kiss, hug, or thank you.

I'd imagine there are times Rarity questions how she is "The Element of Generosity" and Luna could've pulled from a collection of Rarity's dreams to make a simple illustration to Spike of what the designer unicorn feels. After all, she can control all visuals while in the Dream State.

As for the picture at the end, I kind of went with a little something from "For Whom the Sweetie Belle Toils". The fact Luna could've very well have teleported in-and-out before Spike fully awoke to put that picture that had been lost up for him to see.

What do you think?

6502610 No, if we are going directly by the show's canon. Sadly, your opinion is 100% right about spike's character. *sigh* Which is unfortunate since he could do a lot more. If twilight or spike took the time to see what he could fully do or if he hung out with the CMC more often. I'm positive he would able to do many more things.

6502876
I agree entirely. I also thought of what it would be like if he attended school, too. Get a real chance to be a "Kid" instead of having adult expectations all the time.

Episodes like "Princess Spike" really show how much Twilight forgets that Spike is a young boy who needs love, care, support, and socialization to grow. Since he is largely around grown mares with little contact with stallions, I wonder if, as he grows, he'd have difficulty in understanding why he feels the way he feels as puberty may kick-in? I'd hope Shining Armor could offer a helping hoof to explain "The Birds and the Bees" to Spike so he can better understand the emotions that come as you grow from being a kid to an adult.

6503372 Spike's Age is confusing, if were going human age. Spike should be 5-6 years difference from twilight. Since, the test to be sunbutt's student, happened when she first started school or it looks like it.Twilight should be 5 or 6 at the time or 7-8, if she was older.The bottom line is spike isn't that much younger than twilight.

Besides most of the stuff in princess spike, Spike did the right thing.In fact every time something blow up in his face, it was something anyone else would be right about.It's not his fault two speakers didn't know how to share a room.The rest can be blame on the plot device trees.

Okay, I may sound bias but come on.What are the odds a plant named Dragon Sneeze was going to be there.

Another Spike appreciation fic. And it always seems to be Luna that helps him through it.

6502876 Considering the writers don't seem to know what to do with him I would appreciate, at the very least, a throw away line about Spike spending a lot of time with the CMC as away to explain away him not being in episodes.
Though I'd much prefer an entire episode devoted to the others, specifically Twilight, realizing how much ignore and use him, but beggars can't be choosers.

6504134 If, only the writers look at fanfics for reference.

6504293 Ya. I've given up on the idea of an episode exploring how the others treat him. But I'm still hopeful for a quick throw away line of Spike spending most of his time out being a kid as a way to explain him not being around.

This oneshot is so cute and great. I loved it. And I think, it is an important one. If we consider, that the show hardly gives Spike any more value, I am so glad that some of the fans are still knowing his worth and not seeing him as trash. I am not very good in writing about Spike, I admit that, but this work was brilliant.
I loved Luna's role as the moral backbone here. The worst case scenarios were so great and one first really did not thought it is a dream. And it is great how Luna draws a comprasion between herself and Spike in this one. I would not have thought, that they had this in common.
This story is really great and I love it for that.

6503645
I go back to "Dragon Quest" when Twilight informed us all that ponies known next-to-nothing about dragons. To name a tree 'Dragon Sneeze' shows some have at least observed a dragon enough to know something relevant to name a tree after one.

You make a good point, too. Twilight couldn't have been much older than the children in Cheerilee's class when she hatched Spike and got her Cutie Mark. So this puts Spike at a point where he'd be close, if not already, at the age of a human teenager. Tough years to be sure.

The other issue is whether-or-not the show wants Spike to age like a human, or a dragon. Dragons can live thousands of years if not forever. So Spike can still be a Baby Dragon even if he is over ten years old since he'd age differently. As Twilight did refer to him as a Baby Dragon in the opening of the series we can 'assume' he will age like those dragons who can live for thousands of years. However, if this is the case, he needs some parenting and guidance to ensure he grows up right. Leaving a child out of things and only giving them chores doesn't tend to make for a happy childhood and can cause issues in adulthood.

6503713
Nice follow-up. I most definitely approve. :)

6503729
Luna seemed the obvious choice based on what I have gathered through canon. :)

You'd think Twilight would be that guide, but she is always so absorbed in herself and her responsibilities that we don't often see her doing much more than using Spike as a tool rather than a son, or friend.

Pinkie Pie would go all-out to make Spike happy, but there aren't enough balloons and/or cake to pull someone out of depression for too long.

Fluttershy is naturally scared of dragons. She accepts Spike since he's little, but isn't really the supportive type.

Rarity has more-often-than-not used Spike's crush on her to get something she wants. She also has had episodes where Spike was the one comforting her even at the expense of his own feelings. These include "Simple Ways" and "Inspiration Manifestation".

Applejack showed her ability to help in "Spike at Your Service". That didn't go well...

Rainbow Dash has Scootaloo. Scoots and Dash relate as both are daredevil fliers who like to be extreme. Spike, to me, doesn't seem the sort who'd enjoy doing those sort of things so Dashie wouldn't be a great help.

Celestia could help, but she's mostly ever been seen using Spike as the "Magical Mailbox" than being of guidance. Even in "Lesson Zero" she gave only the simplest of compliments for how Spike looked out for Twilight. Not much past that.

Cadence lost her ability to help during "Princess Spike" when all she did was tell him how to do his job despite the fact she, Celestia, Luna, Shining Armor, and other authority figures failed to ensure Twilight didn't stay up three nights in a row. Twilight would've failed in meeting a lot of obligations if Spike didn't step in. Unfortunately, Cadence saw it more as a "Power Grab". :(

Shining Armor and The Cakes have potential, but Luna still, to this point, has the greatest potential to relate and help Spike.

Any thoughts? Did I miss anything in my analysis?

6504429
Thank you so much for your time and comments. They are most definitely insightful. :)

This story was meant to not only help explain things with Spike, but also provide a moral to all those out there who may feel undervalued. We all need to realize our own value even if others do not.

I have had two job experiences where my management outright told me that I didn't add value to the organization and how my accomplishments meant nothing. I know a lot of authors, writers, musicians, and/or people in general who have either felt, or been told, this sort of thing and, sadly, come to believe it.

The story was to help all of us remember that nobody can take away our accomplishments while also showing how we all have an impact on others that is positive. We may not be told outright we make such differences, but we do. Just like Spike does each day while the Mane 6 are off doing their thing. :)

Once more, thanks for reading and for your comments.

6504785 The CMC did pretty well in this story.

6504785 Well, regardless of the episode list.Spike at your service, had to happened right after dragon quests. After meeting Garble and friends, He was questioning what a noble dragon was.So he made an honor code for himself. That's fine but the part about who ever saves my life, I will be there servant.That was applejack's only problem.Other than that she would be a great role model.

Shinning is fine but he's co ruler of the Crystal empire.So, he is not going to have a lot of free time.So unless he has a reason to be in Ponyville, he's not going to be there much for spike.While the cakes are busy juggling their business and the kids,(Man, I almost never get to talk this show this much)

6505301
Applejack, to me, would be the best role model of the Mane 6. She's just a genuine character who likes what she does and does what she likes. She's competitive, but not to terribly so that it makes her a poor sport. She also will go out of her way to make certain things that need done get done even at the expense of her own well-being.

Unfortunately, in Spike's case, he somehow failed at everything we know him to usually be good at doing while working with Applejack during "Spike at Your Service". We've known he can cook and cook well since "Owl's Well that Ends Well" in Season 1, but he couldn't make an edible pie? Likely the writers forgot how skilled a chef the little dragon is. He's also a super hard worker, like Applejack, but she seemed uncomfortable with having him around. Likely due to the whole "Dragon Code" thing. However, if she found a way to ask Spike to help out around the farm, I know he'd jump all over it. To help make cider, pick and sell apples, and see the fruits of his labors knowing the Apple Family has more free time thanks to him would, from my understanding, give him far more joy than sitting around Twilight's castle.

Applejack is also often involved with other ponies more than Twilight. So Spike would gain more social skills through his time with her. He'd also be able to attend school with Apple Bloom, which could result in him making friends more his age and/or who share common interests.

An idle Spike is a very unhappy Spike. He wants to work, he wants to feel a part of things, he wants to socialize, but Twilight Sparkle is, from what I know, too much of an introvert who prefers her own time to herself for studies over playtime and experiencing the world with her son to whom she has never called "A Son", but has always noted him as an "Assistant".

6504764 Scare Master that was released early had some nice moments where Spike & Rarity said little to nothing but their actions spoke volumes. . .

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the Animators and writers proxy the ship even when nothing is done 'on script'

Still waiting on a Spikey plush. . .:raritystarry:

6505498
I wasn't able to find a site that works with my computer to watch "Scaremaster". :( I am looking forward to it being uploaded to YouTube so I can see it. :)

I'd like to think that, one day, Spike goes off to be Rarity's Assistant. They don't necessarily raise a family, but they would live together and exchange hugs and kisses while they go about making the Carousel franchise the best it can be.

What do you think?

6507867
I really, Really, REALLY wanted to get this poster when it came out at SDCC. Unfortunately, I live on the East Coast and not the West. :( One day, though, I'd like to have one framed and hung where I do all my writing and other works. It's a wonderful reminder of how we should never stop trying to be our best. :)

6508015 I know you feel it too.

It was of Twilight in a rocking chair with Spike bundled up in pink pajamas as she smiled down upon him.

I actually would love to see this picture. It sounds like it'd be adorable.

6505498

Still waiting on a Spikey plush. . .:raritystarry:

If this image is anything to go by, I'm sure Sweetie Belle would love one too.

6508528
I think I saw a comic like that on Deviant Art where Twilight tried to tell Spike how Rarity and he couldn't even have kids. Then he watched Shrek 2, and came running back to Twilight with the DVD proving to her that it could work. :)

If they were to become an official couple, I believe one would ultimately end using magic, or a morphing potion, to become the other. It would illustrate "Sacrifice" in which is often one of the more difficult parts of Generosity. To give up something for someone else is definitely a very generous action indeed.

6510870
Perhaps I could get it commissioned? If so, I'll try to pass the word on to you here. :)

Thanks for reading and for your comments.

This story is so sweet!

6868529
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Thanks for reading and for the comment.

Here come the water works :raritydespair: :raritycry: :applecry: :fluttercry:

It's easy to start feeling under-appreciated, especially if there is a lot of change going on and you're not sure how you're going to fit into things. It's overwhelming, especially to someone who's never experienced it or grew up with identity of being the helper to his friends.

I love all the small references being used to substantiate this idea and that, yes, sometimes Spike is forgotten about like an afterthought... though it's probably because his part was cut in various stories, like Sweet and the Elite. Thinking about this awkward situation this could create when everypony got back, at least for Spike, it makes me wonder if the writers could create an episode like this.

I think writing here is a little bit hit-n-miss, but still pretty spot. I feel the pacing speeds up a tiny bit where Luna's introduced and in a few places it might lacks description of actions to give the pauses in dialogue meaning, opting instead for, for example things like "Luna said". There are other small nit-picks, but it's more stylistic and the direction you've taken in expressing those ideas is still greatly appreciated. I also caught a couple typos, for example an end quote at a line that doesn't require it, but it's all very minor and doesn't detract from the overall story.

All in all very thoughtful and fun.

“So,” he said. “I am more appreciated than Twilight, Rarity, or others ever say to me?”

"No offense, but I am deftly sure this never happens. Due thanks for the sweet lies though, once they keep 'im from killing himself all's well."

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