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Derpy's life has been short on successes. No matter what she tried, something somehow always goes wrong. What was her cutie mark supposed to mean anyway?

But something somehow went right with her most precious muffin of all, and she was determined to keep it that way.

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Nice to see things going well for the sweetest natured pony in all Equestria. :derpytongue2:

...making sure they hadn’t cracked on the way over.

7634802 It's always nice to see things go well for Derpy. There must be a rule about stories about her, they either must be sad or heartwarming or funny. One of those three, or perhaps a combination of two of them.

I woke up too early. It wasn't my alarm, but something had pulled me from the precious sleep I desired. Flicking open my phone I spotted the time, 2 hours before the alarm would go off—I was wide awake.

Sighing and mumbling something about getting older, I tapped chrome and read the comments on my stories from while I had slept, they were all nice ones; I was in a good mood.

Back to the front page and I spot a Derpy story at the top of the New Stories list. "Eighty-five hundred words?" Looks snack-sized enough.

I read it.

Now, I don't often find a major fault with this site, but the fact that this isn't at the top of the featured box is now officially one. Bravo on a wonderful story with solid characterization and a delightful plot. Bonus points for having the most adorable ponies in it.

7634802 Ugh... no matter how many times I check... Fixed.

7635063 It just made the Featured Box, my first story to do so. :pinkiehappy: We'll see how high it climbs. (Ugh... only for a few minutes, but it's still there if mature stories are excluded.)

This was almost as sweet as her muffins. (that's just because nothing can be as sweet as her muffins)

also

...He returned his hoof the the floor once...
...I really should to be going now,...
...She glided in to a landing ... > into
... offering s big smile. ...

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(Ugh... only for a few minutes, but it's still there if mature stories are excluded.)

I still see it featured even with all content shown, and deservedly so!

7635186 Bleah. Maybe I should change my name to Dull Quill. The only consolation was that Fana missed them too.

However, "glided in to a landing" is correct. In and to must remain separate words.

7635218 Must be on the threshold. The recent votes are probably enough to keep it there for a while.

A sweet story you got there.
Your explanation for Derpy's talent is trustworthy and I love that it is weather-magic. Maybe a "sequel" for Fluttershy's stare? It could also be weather-magic but unlike Derpy who, I guess, uses wind-magic to lighten the muffins, she uses thunder-magic to catch the other's look and somehow, hipnotizes him/her. :derpytongue2:

I was afraid that your story would "steal" some ideas I got for my next story about Derpy's muffins. Fortunately, you took a huge different path. I'm reassured it won't be a duplicate entry. :twilightsmile:

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Not a dull quill at all, but these things are nutoriously hard to catch, especially when focused on the story and not the spelling. The abstract in my thesis probably has more mistakes than this story :twilightblush:.
And sorry for that false positive, English is not my first language.

Anyway, awesome story and it totally deserves to be featured :)

7635235 #4 and rising. Deservedly so.

This is a great story and explanation for the connection between Derpy's cutie mark and her ascended fanon bond with muffins. Everypony was perfectly in-character with their canon counterparts, and the story feels like it could be taking place within the show's universe. Well done! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Nicely done! Muffins for you :derpytongue2:

This was really touching.
Have a like and a fave.

--Spade

This is a really great story! I love how it's one of the few Fanfics to give a PERFECT explaination for why Derpy has such AMAZING Muffins AND what her Cutie Mark means! It seems like everyone always skips over what her Cutie Mark could mean, and the way you combined it with her Muffin Baking Abilities was AMAZING! <3

Truly a great Derpy story.

I DO have one complaint: I HAVE NOTHING LEFT TO READ IN THIS STORY!! T___________________T

:pinkiesmile: I read your story and I REALLY :pinkiehappy: liked it. :twilightsmile: This was very well written and very well put together. Hope there will be a sequel to this one. :twilightsmile:

She shrugged. “I just don’t know what went… right?”

:derpytongue2:

Wonderful story! I like your interpretation of Derpy's Cutie Mark and her eye affliction. And now Dinky looks to be as talented as her mother!

*hugs you* That was GREAT! A little slow in spots, but that's the best theory for Derpy's cutie mark I've heard yet! It's great to see a reason why it she'd be so into muffins and yet have a mail job and yet also have bubbles for her cutie mark. I don't think the writers of the show themselves could have put a better explanation behind it! And it's so sweet and fun to see Derpy and Doc interacting again; I loved them in Slice of Life, irregardless of him being a sort of Dr. Who character. (Frankly I love the idea of him just being an eccentric earth pony scientist.) Great job, thanks for sharing!

Wow. And here I thought I was being original when I imagined Equestrian gems being used to store magic for later use. Oh well, I suppose it lends me more credibility.

Also, I liked your perspective on the use of Pegasus weather manipulation magic. Up until now, the only variations I knew of were strictly combat orientated. Clearly, I need to step up my game if I want to start playing with the big kids.

Fun, cute, and delivers some good headcanon. :heart:

7635971 I've seen many fics where the abundant gems / crystals of Equestria were used to store magic. However, remember, the quality of a fic is not dependant on the tropes used. Tropes are not bad. :D

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Now, I don't often find a major fault with this site, but the fact that this isn't at the top of the featured box is now officially one.

Oh, they patched that. Congrats on a #1 feature! :twilightsmile:

This was a lovely story. Very cozy, loved how there was an A plot with Derpy figuring out her muffin magic and a B plot with Dinky's tuition. Great resolution too.

What a delightful story, built around a very clever bit of inspiration. Bravo! :derpytongue2::twilightsmile:

See a Jurist work sitting at #1 in the Feature Box? Instant read. And it was adorable, too. Here's my like, fave, and follow! :raritywink:

“Look, Ms. Hooves,” he began to lecture. “I do make an effort to give my business to local shops, giving back to the community and all that, never mind the minor inconvenience of having the work done in Canterlot, or the somewhat higher cost of doing so, but at least they would do it correctly.”

Sounds like a conflation. He should be giving the business to Ponyville, even though Canterlot's more convenient and does it correctly.

Before she could land, Diamond Tiara separated from her filly

:duck:

I have to agree that this is some nifty headcanon you've got here, and a fun read that had me really wondering how she was going to deal with Rich's designs on her muffins. :scootangel:

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Yeah, "She glided in to a landing" and "She glided into a landing" have slightly different meanings. The first speaks separately of the mode of travel (She glided in) and the destination (to a landing, at a specific place), while the second places emphasis on the transition between the glide and the landing, as more of a continuous action sequence (akin to things like "She launched into a gallop") and suggests that the landing is describing a mode of motion. And the full sentence is about not just a landing, but "a landing in front of the building that handled cargo". That's arrival at a location, and arrival generally suggests stopping (even though it's followed by walking inside, the topic of the sentence is that the glide is ending at a certain location). The first version definitely seems to fit better, because the sentence isn't about what she's doing after the glide, it's about where she went via the glide. Kind of a verb vs noun thing, I think.

It's was always the eyes... Makes sense. Wait what if Dinky doesn't want to go to that school? Maybe a sequel?

This is a very good one-shot.

7636481 Thanks for the explanation, you would make Twilight proud :twilightsmile:. I'll pay more attention to that in the future.

I found this to have far too much telling and not enough showing. There's also a reliance on overused lines like "I don't know what went wrong"; if they're used in novel or creative ways then they can be fresh and engaging, but that is not the case here. Finally, I suggest working on removing the purple prose, which is present in abundance.

I really liked this. Your interpretation of Derpy's special talent was creative and then tying it into her love of muffins was very interesting. Moreover, the heart of this fic-Derpy worrying about money for Dinky to go to Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns-was very real and drew me in.

I'd definitely count this as one of the better Derpy stories on this site, and I'm glad I came across it.

That's one straight out of the CMCs' casebook, IMO - Derpy being able to control the structure of her muffins as they cook using remote pegasus magic!

why Cream Filling ? and not something/anything else as name ? i have read too much adult stuff ....

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So Derpy just needs to watch the weather to change it ?

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So Derpy just needs to watch the weather to change it ?

I'm not sure about that. I'd personally bet that it is only possible to remotely concentrate her air and water magic at fairly close range (a few body-lengths at most).

Now, what's the bet that Dinky will be boasting about her 'most unique pegasus in history' mom before long?

Adorable and touching. A very nice little piece, well worth the reading.

At the top, above the images of the brand-new in-store bakery, were the words, “Barnyard Baggins.”

A rather small bipedal creature suddenly walked in and considered the sign thoughtfully. "I'll take it!" he declared at last, rummaging about in his pockets. "Drat, seems all I have to pay you is the magic gold ring." He dropped it... slowly and reluctantly and accompanied by the melody of somber, brooding background music... onto the table, then took the sign and left.

Derpy blinked one eye slowly, then the other, and picked up the ring... which suddenly changed into the shape of a horseshoe!

One shoe to buck them all... :derpyderp2:

:trollestia:

7636953 As opposed to the Season 6 finale which utilized neither showing NOR telling and just threw a bunch of blunt events at us with zero rationale for anything that took place.

:trollestia:

Thanks for writing this! It was really good!

I loved the way you mingled the actions and dialogue without it getting too hard to follow. The plot was great as well, perfectly mixed with the Dinky side-plot. That really gave Derpy an extra motivation to get the Filthy Rich deal, of course. Good job! :pinkiehappy:

Absolutely adorable!

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