Sequel to A Mother's Love.
Growing up is difficult. However, growing up among an entirely different species is even harder. For the adopted humans of Queen Chrysalis it'll be even worse. As they will experience xenophobia and discrimination from their own subjects. With the love, wisdom and support of their family they will grow to above it. To hopefully one day be a beacon of hope for Changeling-Human relations.
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i like it
6494428 Thank you sorry I didn't respond when you posted it. I probably had it typed out and got distracted by work. Sorry about that.
6545981 your welcome and that ok and is they going to be a cover art for this story
6546012 I'm trying but every time I start a sketch it doesn't come out the way that I wanted it to or I don't know where to go with it.
6546500 ok
SGZone i have a question when will the next chapter come out for this sequel
6647086 I'm trying hopefully soon. I was out sick for a week in school so have to make all that up thankfully fall break is next week so I'll have nothing but free time. I even have a cover art for it just need time to finish it.
6648331 ok
i like this chapter and i have a problem with the cover art for this sequel it doesn't show Chrysalis and her two adopted human kids together in it
6751855 Yeah I know but these finals recently were torture I couldn't take time to do anything. Though I am finally on Winter Break though with no Photoshop or Illustrator. Right now in terms of the picture I have a hand drawn one with no color and I would prefer to use the current cover image until I can draw one of my own up. With full color rather than a hand drawn one. I will be getting a new laptop for Christmas so hopefully I'll have it up this break though I have been saying that since the first chapter. Or maybe even have someone else with real skill draw it.
I'm glad you liked the chapter though.
6751920 ok and your welcome
Family bonding. Awesome.
Why is it capitalized here?
I thought the transitions here were a bit wonky in the bravery lesson, but otherwise I loved it!
6852446 Thank you I'll try to work on the transitions. Love's Embrace day will be explained in the next chapter.
6852592 oooh! Nice!
Perfect.
Fissure. Run.
7193890 Thanks a lot. Really means a lot to get a comment. Glad to see that you're enjoying the story so far. I should begin regularly updating very soon. I'll be going on Summer Vacation very soon and will have plenty of time to update.
You need an editor to fix ask the punctuation problems and typos, but, other than these, I like it so far.
D'awwww, so cute.
Me likey, it's fun to read about these two, though it seems to be more focused on Ebony.
Still lots of language errors, but the story is good enough for me to overlook them.
D'awwww, now that's a cute holiday.
Chryssie likes to win. A lot.
Welp, I'd say it was nice knowing him, but he was kind of a douchebag.
7236635 Definitely Chrysalis and Alex are the two most competitive people ever. It's why they can never play monopoly.
YOU DUN GOOFD BOY!
D'aaaw Bravo Chryssie. You make a good mom. I am proud of you.
7275850 Thank you for the comments. Glad you like it.
7276660 Yea I have to ask something. The invasion here still happened didn't it? And Now I'm caught up. Really more should be reading this.
7279122 Thank you. No not yet this happens years before the Invasion and to give some insight they will be about 19 when the invasion occurs.
7279368 Oh man that sucks.
7279627 Yeah sorry we will be jumping around with their age so them becoming 19 won't be too much longer but there's still stuff I need to do with their characters and relationships before the Invasion. As that's a major event especially the events that will cause the invasion.
7279686 Oh no I don't mind you jumping times if you have sufficiently built up what happens in between.
This is sad... I'm sad.
I liked it. Is there a sequel ready yet?
7429895 Not yet but it should be ready soon. I have a job now so finding time to write is difficult. I'm glad you liked the last two chapters especially Dreams. I had a lot of trouble nailing down the emotions of Ebony and Ivory. Don't worry though things are going to get better as they discover their talents.
7430660 Focus on the gestures. Don't rush em and listen to appropriate music for inspiration. That should do the trick. Also dw. Just respond her too if it's ready.
Welp, I hope you enjoyed your life up until now, Fissure.
Never fuck with the Queen. She's like batman, only better prepared and with magic.
7987475 Exactly and this mama bear has taught her cubs how to use their own claws and teeth, maybe even better.
I bet the changelings learned how to circumvent the runes a ages ago.
That was cute.
There's a quotation mark missing when Celestia pulls Chryssie aside to try and persuade her to let the princes see the city.
'into smoldering shape' - shame
'Twilight quickly asked. a whole slew of new questions loaded up taking licks of her ice cream between each question' - asked a whole slew of new questions, ending up taking licks of her ice cream between each of them.
'We will see that the hopes you and your friends come true.' - hopes you and your friends hold come
Ouch, talk about crushed dreams.
At least they're still a family.
Also, never checking all the phrase divisions and punctuation again, takes too long. @.@
'She repeated her words heavy with regret' - repeated, her
'Of course they could they were the princes after all and princes become kings' - Of course they could, they were princes after all, and princes become kings
'leading his people to a bright tomorrow. He knew in the back of his mind' - tomorrow, he knew
'Pleading that he would he wouldn’t have to' - remove he would
'Chrysalis stared at her son seeing the internal battle' - son, seeing
'because he was damned Equestrian' - was a damned
'This was her fault if she had never even told him then this wouldn’t have happened' - fault, if
'Instead she encouraged him raising him up only for her to tear him down at his highest' - up, only
“Yo-You told us th-that we were going to change things that we were going to change their minds about us' - things, that
'Was this there fate?' - their
'Ebony ,sweetie, no come here' - Ebony, sweetie, no, come here
'Ebony eyes' - Ebony's eyes
'Panicking he bolted' - Panicking, he bolted
‘He didn’t even bother to look up as he sprinted down the hall. His heart pounding in his ear from the exhilaration and the shame' - hall, his
'He looked down at his pistoning light brown arm. His face contorted into a silent rage' - arm, his face contorting
'He heard another knock at his door' - knock on his door
'Ebony please open the door' - Ebony, please
'I’m sorry I didn’t mean to hurt you' - sorry, didn't
'She muttered burying her head in her arm' - muttered, burying
'my god what have I done' - god, what
'Her eyes drifted to Ivory who was just as disturbed' - Ivory, who
'
'No of course not but there’s something I’ve been meaning to tell you' - No, of course not, but
'Aunt Alexandrae to train m more' - me
'You see I want to' - see, I want
'and maybe become captain' - he captain
'Well it’s just that you’ve' - Well, it's
'leaders like a governor or councilmen' - leaders, free
'Oh Ivory I wasn’t trying force' - Ivory, I want 3
'you to be like me. I was just teaching' - free me, I was
'leader for anything' - of
'She smiled. Caressing his cheek' - smiled, caressing
'Hey mom I went and got' - mom, I went
'her sister lording over her' - looming
'I don’t know what to do he won’t come out' - to do, he won't
'Hey enough of that' - Hey, enough
'I won’t heart of it.' - I won't hear any of it
'Here let me talk to him' - Here, let me
'Ebony either open the door or' - Ebony, either
'gripped the handle tightly ready to break' - tightly, ready
'handle like a wrist the sound' - wrist, the sound
'had already jumped onto his bed facing away from her' - his bed, facing
'Okay how to approach this' - Okay, how
'Alex wondered walking over to the bed' - wondered, walking
'So tough day, huh' - So, tough day, huh
'she said placing her hand on his leg' - said, placing
'When I lost I was crushed all my dreams and aspirations shattered' - crushed, all
'No you don’t' - No, you don't
'he snapped springing from his curled position with a sharp glare' - snapped, springing
'Alexandrae responded with admonishing raised eyebrow' - with an admonishingly raised
'She asked. Gently scratching his back' - asked, gently
“mom’s been teaching us but it feels like I never will' - teaching us, but it
'It was then Alexandrae noticed' - then that Alexandrite
'grasped the injury but let him continue' - injury, but
'like Sunshine but it feels like I’ll never' - Sunshine, but it
'magic and talent but I feel wasted' - talent, but
'So things will get better you just have to keep' - better, you
'she smiled pulling him into' - smiled, pulling
'She smiled getting off of the bed and over to the board' - smiled, getting
'confronting his mother but knew he had to' - mother, but he
'Meanwhile Chrysalis and Ivory waited for what seemed forever' - Meanwhile, Chrysalis
'Unfortunately yes that is the case, the changelings need a changeling to rule them' - Unfortunately, yes, that is
'Well of course you will if you work hard at it' - Well, of course
'Yes but you said the same thing about king how is this any different' - Yes, but you said te same thing about being the king, how is this
'I mean if I don’t become a leader or something great how can I gain their trust' - I mean, if I don't become a leader or someone great, how can I
'Then if I don’t gain their trust how will I change' - trust, how
'Ivory you will do wondrous things for our hive because you are my son' - Ivory, you
'but before she could say another word the door beside them opened up' - word, the door
'Oh Ebony I’m so so sorry for everything I didn’t mean to hurt you so badly' - Oh Ebony, I'm so sorry, I didn't mean
'he mumbled. As he pulled his mom in closer and nuzzling her neck' - te mumbled as he pulled his mom closer and nuzzled her neck
'I didn’t mean what I said I was just angry, and afraid, and upset, and I’m sorry' - said, I was just angry and upset and I'm sorry
'he whimpered. With his own barrage of kisses' - whimpered with his own
'I know but I should have been honest with' - I know, but I
'Mom I wasn’t angry over that I was, no I am, scared that I may never be a real prince' - that, I was - no, I am scared
'Chrysalis bent over and pulled them in close touching their foreheads with her’s' - close, touching
'Ebony and Ivory listen to me' - Ivory, listen
'Because you two are my sons no matter what they say or how much they protest it' - sons, no matter
'she smiled. With great' - smiled with
'her’s no matter what. Raising the spirits of the two princes as they remembered' - what, raising
'I never faced what you two must endure you will overcome it' - endure, you will
'She asked. Her strong stare penetrating' - asked, her strong
'Chrysalis smiled pulling them close' - smiled, pulling
'and nuzzling them. Which they happily reciprocated' - them, which
'The two princes smiles grew even warmer' - smiles' grew
'As confidence and the strength of youth filled them back up as they took comfort in the security of their family' - remove first As
Nice chapter.
Yep, Ivory is going to grow up to be an alcoholic.
'After chuckling at his awful child drawing skills he tossed into the garbage can' - skills, he tossed it into
"Hey you doing anything' - Hey, you
'hated violence and has no interest' - and had no
'his cup of tea Ebony sprung forward wrapping his arms around Proteus shoulders' - tea, Ebony sprung forward, wrapping his arms around Proteus's shoulders
'sounded more like a grow' - growl
'as she quickly leads the conversation' - lead
'pressed her finger to lip' - pressed a finger to her lip
'demands for governling while' - for a governling
'able to grab what asked you about' - what I asked
'Our mother’s and' - mothers
'about, not that bad' - about, it's not