Luna, the princess of the Night, decides to cast a spell & use the magical mirror to head to a different universe as a way to discover the humans version of Nigtmare Night. Fortunately, while she still has her magical abilities and can go home, her body has changed to a more human body, complete with clothes, and all of the humans around are about as tall as one of her index fingers.
Meanwhile, six human teenagers are celebrating Halloween, though it's very late. They encounter the princess, and with one accident, Luna begins to hunt them down, filling herself with her newly discovered treats.
Contains safe, non digestive vore, and some mouthplay.
Takes place a bit after the first Equestria Girls, and, though there's humans, they of our world, not the EQG type.
This is good. More soon please.
6506490 sorry, accidentally forgot to update it; This is more or less a single story thing. Unless... you want more with different characters.
6506794 yes one with celly pls :)
THAT.
IS.
MY.
FETISH.
6506815 maybe, but if you want Tia, check out "Celestia's inside story". Besides, I sorta have a plan involving both Cadence and Shining Armor. "Sweeter than Sugar"? Title and draft is in the works.
6506854 same thing here. *hides*
Hmm, very interestingly written, not precisely my thing, which is more unaware micro vore, but still, I did enjoy it, good work.
I'll be honest, I didn't like it.
I'm aware it's a fetish fiction, but even in fetish fics I personally like to have a bit of realism when it comes to my stories.
Luna... to me, she came off as a bit of a deus ex machinma. She had a spell for everything in this fic, and to me, it was a bit unbelievable.
The humans, I can't really relate to them. I don't know them, their characters are too basic/shallow for me to relate to very well, and I feel like the story wouldn't have really changed if you'd just use ponies instead of humans.
Which brings me to my next point, why exactly is Luna human in this fic? I mean, I can believe that she turned into a human because Twilight turned into a human when she passed through the mirror, but it's even stated in the description that this isn't eqg. To me, it seems the anthro Luna wa sused just to give her boobs. I don't know. To me, unless their turning human plays a central role in the plot, it seems that most writers turn them into anthros because boobs/human anatomy if familiar to them. It's lazy writing. Again, that's just my opinion.
There are also many grammar mistakes, spelling errors, and awkward sentences here. Let me give you one example:
That doesn't need to be repeated twice. This could be replaced with something like:
That's only a suggestion, and that's certainly not the only example I can give. Overall, this was 'meh' to me. No downvote, but no upvote either.
6507203 I figured this may not have been my best. I suck at writing this type of stuff down, but at least give me credit for trying. I'm not nearly as bad these shipping stories. (I know this is vore, but shipping is more relevant)
seeing Vore and Anthro in the same fic is like having a science class at Umpqua Community College.
6507377 ... what?
You should regret nothing because badass story. Fully man fully
I saw this, thinking it was a story about Princess Luna visiting the Equestria Girls universe.
Boy was I wrong...
I was just wondering. Seeing how this was published as a Mature fic, adn quickly changed on the front page to teen, what was taken out to make this teen? Or was that just one of those "Mods won't notice me changing rating" moments? ;3
Just something I been wanting to ask since the story got published. Hehe. Not that many seem to be complaining so I guess it's not as Mature as the story was first thought to be when published? :p
Just curious if anything changed between the M to Teen transition.
MOAR!!!!
6508010 I wanted it teen, but they believed Iit to be Mature, so it was sent in as Mature, but was changed to teen rating ASAP.
6508109 Maybe, but not now. I'm currently busy with other fics right now, this was more of a one time thing, and these will be more or less holiday themed. (Sorry, no Christmas, Hanukkah, or Kwanzaa. I consider those more family than anything else. Don't want children eaten, that's my limit. Just like OtterP.)
6507203 Agreed on pretty much all accounts. I'm always on the look out for safe vore, but it's so hard to find something good.
Why does this feel ......... heartwarming
Oooh! I can't wait to see what they are!
While I wasn't really keen on the whole anthro Luna part at the beginning, I do like this ending
Even if it was kinda dark 
I like to think that there probably was some kind of truth to the Nightmare Moon legends and that some of those stars in her mane were more than just stars. While the outcome was a bit more graphic than what I normally imagined, it still works (sort of...)
EDIT:
I'd like to add though that Celestia here seemed a bit too quick on the whole 'tasting' part. I think it would've played out better if Celestia at first was upset with Luna and telling her to take them back, only for Luna to simply say that she will only do after Celestia has tasted one first.
Hestiant at first, Celestia would eventually have a quick taste just to humor her. Luna would then tease her by saying she would take them all back, only for Celestia to suddenly stop her and ask to sample some more.
The rest pretty much writes itself.
Ooh, I can't wait for the day when the Big and Small group notifies me of your sequel!
You what'd make it even better? If you'll allow the readers to create a non-OC chapter and have them PM you the chapters for publishing!
6627540 hm... not a bad idea. Care for one? I'm making the first two chapter/short tales.
first is a 1st person of a lone human exploring in the cold, freezing, but finds rescue by Lyra... who swallows him on accident, but finds out humans are tasty and learns that they may have a special magic that keeps them alive.
Second is a tale of a small girl finding some magical fruit for her mom in the Canterlot gardens.
6627688 Those two aren't bad ideas themselves, but I'm thinking more of someone volunteering to make one or maybe a few chapters for your story. Personally, Mayor Mare, Applejack, Big MacIntosh, and Zecora are my main interests.
6631451 Ah! I guess that'll work as well. I'll give all the credit to the original creator, though I might edit some things.
Plus, I think A.J. would be a vore thing (A small group of humans taking an Apple away.)
Big Mac would be a body exploring tale (Just some humans learning about Big Mac by climbing him and exploring his innards, but for science.)
I have no idea for Zecora or Mayor Mare (Potion testing and Diplomatic talking?)
6631451 Bam! Tiny Tales
Feel free to message me some of your tales.
6648207 Will do. Thanks!
6546126 And gut warming... huh? huh? No? Okay I get.
If they come back for more, they will be met with an army comprising every military force on the planet. Hell, if it gets bad enough terrorists might help stop them. Point is, we may be small to them in this world, but our firepower could wipe out all of Equestria and their wimpy ponies in weeks, months tops. Tread lightly sisters, tread lightly.
I feel like there were simply too many characters. 3 or 4 is THE limit a reader can "learn" at a given time. Throwing 6 at the audience then immediately running off with the story was just too much. I ended up just blank facing the characters and totally forgetting/ignoring who was who. At the end I could only recall that Emily was dressed as Princess Luna and Jessica was the traitor. The others? Didn't even seem to matter. They were just blank faced anons. Bodies that spoke a few times.
7867613 Nice, but she's clothed