Pinkie Pie wakes up in a mental institution to find that here entire life in Equestria has all been a delusion, now she's cured of her "illness" but still has no idea who she is or what her real name even is. All she has now is a empty bottle of sarsaparilla, with a crumpled up birthday card inside, and an address..........
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And then Pinkie turned into Weapon X?
I like the territory you're in. Despite a few hiccups, it has gone pretty well so far too. It has enough of a sense of mystery that it has a nice gentle sort of tension to it. I think it might be pulling a bit too far from the source material at times, but for the most part Pinkie's kept it tied somewhat to canon.
Needs some editing and expansion in places, but otherwise it's pretty good so far.
I think pinkie was the reasult of a superweapon expirement
I'm liking the story so far, that plot has lots of potential. You know, pinkie waking up on a mental institution and a doctor that fears her really draws people.
The real problem is how this is written. It's not bad, but it would be a lot better if you were to improve:
-Sometimes I don't know who's narrating the story, at times it's in 2nd person and at other times it's in 1st person, that's kinda confusing.
-Your narration style is very original, (kinda like mine actually) but sometimes you take it a little too far by drifting off topic and describing people's thoughts, switching the perspective drastically.
-The paragraphs are not very well structured at times, I tried finding THE example i had in mind in your text, but... I gave up doing it.
The problem is this: "Dialogue text..." "Dialogue text..." ---- That cannot be, dialogues must be separated either by text in the middle or be in different paragraphs, depending on the situation.
-And last but not least, a punctuation note. Every dialog sentence that does not ends on "?" or "!", must end with either a pause or period. Like this.
"Dialogue text," description text, "Dialogue text continues."
I'm not a grammar genious, I hope this tips work out for you.
Thanks for your time, I look forward to the next chapter
Please continue! Very well written and entertaining!
1060 Oh sorry I won't be updating on this website anymore just go to this thread http://www.ponychan.net/chan/fic/res/14864.html
For those of you interested in the rest of the story without having to scourge for it, here are the rest of the chapters.
Part 7
Part 8
Part 9
Part 10
Part 11
Part 12
Part 13
The author said there supposedly will be further updates on PonyChan, as well as edits and corrections so that this story could end up on Equestria Daily.
all i can say is.....fuck you, this story made me sad, i mean yeah it's well writtin but now.......i'm sad as fuck, si fuck you couse now i'm sad
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
I like it! Please write more
I'm hooked on this story now. I really wanna know how it ends!
1428
Thanks!^_^
Here.
14 - - https://docs.google.com/document/d/12f-UkPDoxv7d8LRCzSwMnqwnsxGLF3JmScGL_yNaOkI/edit?hl=en_US
15 - - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Hcql124PVBc1v35PPQtMO0X4UpJwfBP3CPc-3Ljq4Vc/edit?hl=en_US
16 - - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1g82l_BmxyIQfcsh0gxIEFo2zppEsK7gPvMFkE0Y4T7w/edit
Hey is there something wrong with google docs? Cause 16 on there cuts off for me.
why the rest of the chapters on google docs and not here?
Why were the rest not uploaded onto here? hmmm...?
Otherwise great story and currently reading into the google doc version. I'm enjoying this and although Futtershy is my favorite, Pinky is second
Where's part 18?
ending in a cliff hanger?!?!
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Marvin! Was that a Hitchiker's Guide reference? If it was, then you sir/madam rock!
Why, it seems this lacks comments. No matter!
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I went to the thread he posted but the screen just says 404 this is a test please explain any pony.
Oh my gosh this is interesting. I have to read on...after I check on RPs on facebook and stuff...maybe I should favorite this.
I wanna know her real name too now.
Wow. I laughed at first cause this was so odd but this chapter was sad. Really sad.
Still loving the story though. 
Oh now it's getting even more interesting.
Oh I must read on. This is amazing.
This needs to continue ln here so I don't have to go to different sites to read more.
3850715 I know I went to his link and it brings me to a white page that says 404 this is a test and I can't find any new chapters on google docs either? I need help.
please author post on this site again or at least post a new link.
3857306 Completely agree with you. This story is so great and we have only 6 chapters and I'm actually wondering if something happened to the writer. I'm probably worrying for no reason but I am worrying.
3857608 I wanna read more all I can do till he posts more and tells us were to look I'm looking at dead space death scenes
3857619 I"m reading other stories like I always do after reading stuff like this. Hoping eventually there'll be more.
3857632 me still sad though.
3857640 Same here. Despite currently reading a story that managed to make me laugh so far.
3857796 I don't know why he left his fic was doing so well.
3858101 I know. My fic wasn't doing any good but I'm still thinking of doing another....more disturbing....fic involving Lyra and a male pony that calls himself The Cupcakes Killer.
And no it won't be an exact copy of Cupcakes. 
The original Cupcakes kinda sickened me when I read. And my story will actually explain why the killer does what he does. Now I just have to very carefully think it out.
3858145 I listened to and read cupcakes I nearly got sick twice (ps I've got a weak stomach)
3858156 I don't normally get sick easily but Cupcakes was just wrong.
And it never said why Pinkie was suddenly a cannibal. I liked Rocket To Insanity though cause Cupcakes was the nightmare that drove Dashie to insanit. 
3858195 if you think about it she could of just gone insane it happens a lot and we all know how unstable she is.
3858203 When it comes to Pinkie maybe but Cupcakes was before Party Of One which means before we knew how insane Pinkie really was. However I think they needed Dashies nightmares to get to her cause Dashies not the type to kill normally.
3858244 I is confused
3858248 By having Dashies nightmares cause her mind to snap in Rocket To Insanity we got Killer Dashie as an easy to picture thing but Cupcakes takes place before the Party Of One episode so it was when Pinkie still had the same personality as her G 2 and G 3 self. How would anyone guess Pinkie always was like....that. I would've been creeped out more if she had a G2 or G 3 pony amongst her victims though cause it would mean it went back even further than anyone could imagine.
How do we know it doesn't?
3858311 idk
3859558 They only mention Gilda as a past victim and the rest are just a group of random ponies and when they show her dress....there had to be alot of victims there besides just ponies from FIM.
Now the story does seem worst then it did originally.
Is it me or does everything fading in pinkies delusion seem kinda like in Drawn To Life 2?
Aren't you gonna continue this?
551702 i want to know as well have you fond it yet?
NO I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS WHYYYYYYU
Yay! Suffering and heartbreak!
NO
, I NEED MORE OF HER SUFFERING AND ANGUISH!!!
Please... what needs to be done for more? I beggeth of thee, giveth me more of thy enchanting tale!
1428 You have more chapters?
THANK YOU!!!! I KISS YOUR FEET!!!!