Sweetie Belle can't fall asleep. Luckily, Rarity always cares about her little sister.
Little sister, however, has a different opinion about that.
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🇺🇦Russian translation🇺🇦 by FoxcubRandy, edited by ColdSky.
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I have no heart and my avatar makes everything sound sexual. Also, It's pronounced "sam-ee".
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Is Sweetie Belle secretly... Suicidal?
Is it possible-the darkness of her room is a metaphor for her secret envy and lack of self-esteem, causing her to think about possible self harm/harm to others...
Stockholm? I feel like the limping indicated abuse but idk. Could've been a CMC accident.
Is it bad that my first line of thought is that Rarity is molesting Sweetie?
6475426
That's possible. My aim was to be ambiguous enough for the readers to come with different interpretations.
6475594
I'd say this is quite likely.
6476665
I like your attention to details
6477570
You're not the only one
6477610 I see. On the one hand, I'm happy I'm not the only one. On the other...I have good reason to not be happy, know what I'm saying?
6477691
Yeah. Poor Sweetie
Well... that was something. I always feel that stories like these should be multi chapter with a real build up and conclusion... but if you do that then you may break my group's rules so... yeah.
Stockholm syndrome?
Sooo...I'm too simple to understand deep shit like this. Anyone mind translating?
6489486
You can take your pick from 6486843, 6475426, 6475594, or 6477570. Alternatively, you can come up with your own interpretation. Like, maybe she's just hitting puberty.
6490010 Mmmhmmm.
Sweetie Belle is growing up with a dependency fetish.
And that's why I can't interpret things.
6492562
That may be a thing too. Though I guess a look into her future relationships would require a higher rating.
6477570
I thought that might be the case, but based on how she thinks of Rarity I doubt it. Seems more like Sweetie has crippling self-esteem issues, which are made worse by Rarity being a successful fashionista that has saved the world on multiple occasions and still manages to find time to be a good sister. I don't think molestation is happening here because Sweetie doesn't seem to dread Rarity's arrival, she just wishes she wasn't so dependent on her sister.
6502711
I guess that's a less dark, but probably more realistic interpretation.
Is Rarity a prostitute? Evidence is here for my conclusion.
If Sweetie Belle falls asleep before Rarity is there, it would seem so as if someone will come and do something to her. As in, Rarity brings a pony home, and there may have been an incident involving a pony one time and Sweetie.
In the story, Sweetie hears her sister coming home, late at night. Rarity does her work downstairs, and the sound of a sewing machine is fairly loud, meaning Rarity would've been out.
The world behind it, in this context I believe, means the nightlife, the *ahem* Sluts on the street, in another phrase. The "She's an adult" line could mean Rarity can do whatever she wants, even if that includes selling sex.
Here's wild speculation.
The Facts- Rarity is isn't home until the end of the story.
Sweetie Belle can't go to sleep without Rarity being there.
According to Belle, bad things will happen if she falls asleep without Rarity's goodnight.
Sweetie Belle thinks Rarity is probably working late.
Logic POWAZ- Let's start with the line "Rarity's not here and I really want to sleep". Sweetie Belle means if Rarity isn't here, she won't sleep.
"I simply can't do that. I want, but, deep down, something tells me the if I did, bad things would happen." Sweetie Belle knows if she's asleep before Rarity's there, she will bring "her work home" is a sense.
"Rarity is probably fine, just working late." Rarity is still on the street, meaning stallions will still pay for rutting her, but Sweetie Belle's denying the fact that Rarity isn't fine.
"-trying not to look at the world behind it" Rarity's second profession, which is not one that you would like to know, much less a filly knowing a lot about it.
"Wait. What am I talking about? Rarity can do anything! She's an adult." Sweetie's trying to defend her sister from this profession, meaning since Rarity can "do anything" Sweetie Belle has to live with her decision.
"Sometimes I wish she didn’t." This is my ace-in-the-hole for this theory. Sweetie doesn't want to hear Rarity entering late at night. So if Rarity didn't enter late, she would have made her little sister feel safe, despite not saying goodnight. If Sweetie Belle wished her sister didn't say goodnight, that would mean Rarity would have never existed, or stayed home when she would like to have.
Boom. Drop the mic.
7254889
It works perfectly.
Well, I didn't think of such an interpretation, but I really like it
You know how you can tell how perverted an author is by the kinds of porn they write? When applicable, that is. On a similar note, you can tell how angsty and angry someone is by the kinds of "sad" fics they write.
You seem like a victim of bullying to me. The kind that deserved it.
Reading this fic was an exercise in not falling into a coma for how DULL this was written. I would call this your writing style, but that would offend anyone with some semblance of style. The way you write is more immature ramblings than anything, which made an already uninteresting premise worse.
Yes, your premise, no matter how much you like it(Based off a true story, I'll assume), was boring. Another "sibling A is suffering and sibling B can't tell in any way" story, how totally not overdone and overly dreadful to read! I was half expecting the writing to suddenly shift into a rant about how unfair the world is, with the droning and endless brooding you call "narration." Be honest, you have some unresolved feelings about bullies. I can tell with the magic of "having to deal with this shit on a weekly basis."
One thing I will expand on, I didn't mean that it's not a completely unrealistic story, having sibling B unable to tell that sibling A is depressed/suicidal/what have you. The problem is, you take this situation too black and white. In a real life scenario similar to this, you can expect sibling A to be at least a bit hostile to sibling B, who notices a few red flags, but doesn't take action for whatever reason, including "well my sibling's being a dick, this is probably just a rebellious phase" and "it's not that big a deal, they'll grow out of it." Maybe you'll take this advice, or maybe you'll prove to me that you're an annoying brat whose "bullies" were kids that, bless their hearts, just wanted to get you off their backs. I'm hoping for the former, but I'm an asshole so I hope for the latter at the same time. It's your choice.
In the meantime, here's a shorter version of this review.
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7874504
The very first assumption about me and already a wrong one.
Interesting enough for you to write a comment that is almost longer than all the other ones here combined.
Another assumption and wrong again. You know that people don't have to write from experience? in context of my other fics, it'd be pretty worrying if I wrote them from experience... But I'm just a comfortable, privileged guy with too much time and somewhat skewed imagination. I could go on, but I have more interesting things to do. Thanks for the opinion anyway.
7874504
Wow, you're a cranial rectum with a sphincter in need of a Midol.
Rather than trying to personally attack someone over something you don't like, how about some constructive criticism? Spelling errors, missing words, and those kinds of things. This thing you're calling a review looks a lot more like the ramblings of someone out to share his misinformed opinions with anyone he can force into reading; not unlike unconsensual anal probing.
7875612
Anywho, cheers to the Author for writing this! I enjoyed it. Gave me a touch of nostalgia from my childhood!
I see that this was written many years ago, and probably an inactive account (too lazy to find out rn) but I really liked this fic, along with reading all the theories/interpretations in the comments. Also can weirdly relate to this story, or, some interpretations of the story. (My mum comes into my room briefly every night, almost without exception, and I usually feel tense if I'm not awake when she does, even though she thinks I'm alseep, yada yada, enough about me). It's clear, from my interpretation at least, Sweetie has severe Dependency and self-esteem issues, that are causing her to slowly cut off the would that's outside the boutique and possibly leasing towards some kind of suicidal ideation, or, more, aliven't, "oh to not be born" or eternal sleep rather than actually wanting to die. Which I can also relate to.
My mind orginally went to molesting, but then she doesn't seem to fear the "good nights", although there's a possibility that through manipulation it's come to seem like a normal thing.
Although I'd enjoy a certain climax to the story, I quite like the open ended way and it really let's the imagination run wild
10810004
Also, it was my idea behind it, to leave it open to interpretation.
Hey, I'm still here