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Outcasted


Society is screwed, so why not be different. Be an Outcast. Overthrow the government.

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Comment posted by DAMN HAMSTER deleted Feb 22nd, 2016

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It might be a while, sorry. I will put it up as soon as I'm able to

Liking how this starts. Can't wait for more :pinkiehappy:

Post another chapter right now!!!

7054712 Ooooh! Demanding and fiesty! I love it!:pinkiecrazy:

I Bucking love this story keep it up.

7068116 No but for some reason I just really like the idea of ripping out someone's throat and holding it!:pinkiecrazy:
DON'T QUESTION ME!!!:flutterrage::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

7069674 I have the weirdest boner right now....:derpyderp2:

Keep up the fuckin' gore man!

Well with the wait!

Is it just me, or does anyone else hear the whistling from the beginning of the song "Twisted Nerve" when Onyx enters the alley?

Comment posted by Outcasted deleted May 15th, 2020

Sunset didn’t believe him. She couldn’t after seeing what he did in the alley, and what he just did at the diner. She backed away until her back met the side of a dumpster, staring at him with wide, cautious eyes. There was no way the monster from the alley was really this nice guy. While Sunset felt something was off about the guy when she first met him, she just brushed it off as her anxiety flaring up at meeting such an imposing person. Thinking back, Fluttershy did say that he helped her when she fell in the hall. Maybe he wasn’t as bad as she thought, but that didn’t excuse the fact that this man just killed people.

"You just murdered five people."

That brought a smile to her face as Sunset began to think of her friends and the memories they shared. If the news that Sunset Shimmer had died reached them, they would be devastated. All the questions and worries she had at the moment had subsided for now. A hopeful smile spread across the girl’s face. She would see her friends again, that she was sure of. And it was all thanks to the monster, the man from the alley.

Sunset? Shut the Hell Up!!!!! I'm getting tired of your naive and bitchy attitude to Onyx???!!!

One: Why you so care for those hitman squad lives? They tried to F****** KILL YOU And your Friends!!!! And they clearly are willing to kill innocent people for "no witnesses". Onyx did the world a flavor to kill evil bastards like them.

Two: STOP calling him the stupid "Monster" cliche BS!!!! Can a "monster" SAVED your dumb ass, and your friends from the Real Villains, Criminals, Assassins/Hitmans, Demons, and Monsters??!!

Although, Onyx seems to have a alternate split personality in his head. (Why do some people/Authors write the Heroic and Anti-Hero Protagonists to have a "Dark/Corrupted/Edgy and Evil" Side or Clone that they have to overcome sooner or later to make the Protagonist somehow more likable??!! No offense.)

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None taken. If its considered to be cliche that means there have been good characters written with the same thing

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Sorry. It's just I seen a lot of OC Human Protagonists in this MLP Fanfiction website in the past. That have a Dark/Edgy/"Evil" And Hatred Alternate Personality in their minds. It's like they all have a Dissociative Identity Disorder/Multiple Personality Disorder? Because of a stupid Cliche "Terrible" Past/Origins of having a horrible parents/family, or friends or something??!! ( I'm not insulting Real People with the D.I.D. Just giving a example.)

It's just about WHY do Authors put their OC Characters to suffer with a "Evil" or Anti-Clone/Personally that screws with their mental minds. And even be pure dicks to the Ponies for No Dang Reason. I won't have a problem if the Ponies act OOC jerks to the Human Protagonists. Then they deserve facing down the wrath of the "Dark-Protagonist" Personality! :pinkiecrazy:

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I totally understand that. I've seen a lot of it as well, and I'm trying to avoid that with this character

I remember when I first read this before he rewrited it they have the shirts off

A really enjoyable fic to read to the point I am angry I only now discovered this gem. Hopefully, the next update won't be for four years considering the fic's current pattern of two chapters every four years.

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