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You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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"So if you meet me, have some courtesy,/Have some sympathy, and some taste./Use all your well-learned politesse,/Or I'll lay your soul to waste." -The Rolling Stones, 'Sympathy For The Devil'

A mysterious store has appeared in Ponyville. The proprietor of this shop is a very sly and crafty stallion who has an odd manner about him. And the items that he is offering seem strange in their own right. What's stranger still, is that there is a 'Help Wanted' sign in the window. One yellow filly with a large pink bow is up to the task.

Written for Halloween 2015.

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 27 )

I cannot wait for more of this.

How does somepony go from being a lawyer to an apparently evil salespony of mystical stuff?

This looks sort of like it's based off an episode of Rick and Morty isn't it? Either way, good read so far. :twilightsmile:

6486110 This goes why beyond just Rick And Morty, as it was used by Stephen King for his novel "Needful Things". But I would be lying if I didn't say that Rick And Morty episode is one of my favorite episodes!

This is proving exceedingly enjoyable. Morning Star is a very charming character!

Comment posted by Blackmouth00 deleted Oct 4th, 2015

I don't even care about all the typos, it's just that funny.

“How do I not? You are the type of pony everypony should know,” Morning Star smirked.

“That is the dumbest thing I’ve ever heard, and I know Palin.”

Ha, and ha.

I really like this story and I can't wait for the next chapter:)

I’m actually trained as a lawyer

I see what you did there.

~T.MC

Applebloom couldn’t be completely sure but she felt that some sort of creature was staring at her

Oh I thought my 4th wall was fixed? Never mind I'll find pinkie in the morning.
Also I loved the top-notch banter.

~T.MC

This-this is just plain unlucky.

~T.MC

This story is the definition of a flawed gem. It's very rough around the edges, and could use some polish—I think it would have been hilarious if, instead of trying to attack Morning Star and Apple Bloom, the "killer doll" was waving and smiling as she read from a book—but still, it's very smart and fun to read. I can't wait to see how this affects the rest of Ponyville! :twilightsmile:

Bit odd, him referring to Jesus as his brother. Maybe... cousin? Nephew?

Eh, whatever. This was a fun, silly little story. Great job, author! :pinkiehappy:

Sad it had to end but it didn't disappoint:pinkiehappy:

6556090 Are we not all just related in the grand scheme of things? Haha. Glad you enjoyed my Halloween fic this year. I certainly enjoyed writing it.

Not finished reading yet..... But this:

“This isn’t my first business! I’ve been around for millennia creating evil and bring down the righteous! I was a general of a legion of unholy warriors, ruled empires with an iron hoof, was ruthless with my dealings, corrupting souls, created a company called Comcast, and ushering in the end times! [...]"

:rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: OH MY BUCKING GOD!
So unexpected and yet so fitting as a joke at the same time! This is genius, top-tier joke here! You had me in a laughing fit for a minute with that!
I would have never expected to get such a laugh out of this story when I saw it! :rainbowlaugh:

Applebloom befriends the Devil himself. Badass filly is badass.
I'm amazed by it how in-character you have written Applebloom. Reminds me on her smart behavior that we have seen in "Bridle Gossip". Except that she now befriended SATAN. :pinkiehappy:
And the story idea is superb. The Mane Six driving the Devil into desperation so that he gives up is one of the most hilarious thing I ever read. :pinkiehappy:
My only two gripes (aside from lots of typos) with the story is that Applebloom acts a bit too passive when she listens to his evil plans. He openly talks about the ponies she knows getting killed by his cursed items and Applebloom is barely batting an eye and just continues to do her job. I would rather expect her to get more upset about it, trying to stop him somehow or at least warning her friends.
And then Fluttershy, she is quite OOC here. When Fluttershy would meet ghosts, she would run for the hills immediately, not becoming their friend.
Aside from this I like it, excellent idea as I said.

6587064 I'm really glad you enjoyed this story. This was one of my favorite things to write, well, ever! There are so many hidden tidbits throughout.

Anyway, I understand it seemed a bit odd to you that Applebloom seems more passive, but Morning Star did say he would not hurt her family or the filly herself as long as she did her job well (of course, we know she went above and beyond, except with the Necronomicon fell on her). The way I wrote it was more for Applebloom to see the 'why' behind Morning Star's methods.

As for Fluttershy, I really, really, REALLY wanted to write out how she reacted, but I felt the reader's imagination would be more fun.

I was laughing so hard throughout the entire story.
"I am the devil incarnate, I cause evil and mayhem throughout the world! I shall bring destruction and chaos to ponyville....wait.....you aren't suppose to be making friends with that.....WAIT THEY WANT A TEA PARTY THEY SHOULD BE WANTING YOUR HEAD! WHAT IS GOING ON?!?!"
Me: Duuuuuh, you're in Ponyville in Equestria! Friendship is maaaaaagiiiiiiiic!!!!

I'm glad I listened to you at BABScon, this was a good reading!

This story was fun to read so far. You ain't kidding about this one. I'm glad you told me about this story. Thank you. :twilightsmile:

I like the twists in this story and it's cute that Leta likes learning and I like that Applebloom is so chill with all the evil going on (relatively). But Twilight sounded sort of British for some reason.

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