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The Princess of Friendship gets Sunset's message that something is up at Canterlot High. She immediately leaves Equestria to help out her friends. Once she got to the other side, though, she meets her friends having a picnic with herself? Uh, oh. The conversation she has with herself gets interesting.
Spoiler: If you watched Friendship Games, this is the ending when Twilight comes to Canterlot High after the events of Midnight Sparkle.
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That was pretty interesting.
I liked it.
Pretty nice.
Princess Twilight and EQ Twilight.
This was a nice try but I don't think that you got human!Twilight's personality right. You could have done a lot more with Princess Twilight's own 'magical scientist' nature and have her identify where her counterpart may have gone wrong.
Overall a good attempt but missing a lot of stuff.
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Also, can you expect someone to just recover when she transformed into a monster? Sunset cried in the first movie and there was... Well there was that one scene where Human Twilight cried because she was being blamed for not being smart as Princess Twilight. Other than that, there is no scene where Human Twilight cried for being manipulated into everything in Crystal Prep.
I can do edits in the meantime if you would like...
Pretty good, but one spelling error
"At least it this one isn't scary." Fluttershy admitted.
you should change it to "At least in this scenario it isn't as scary." Fluttershy admitted
(Abit more grammatically correct.)
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Thanks a lot! 
Noted and fixed!
Nice
chapterstory. (Been reading too many serials)I would recommended changing
to
or at the least
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It's been noted and fixed! 
Thanks for that.
Apparently some moderator/admin forgot about this.
Groan.
I'd complain how contrived it is to ship Flash Sentry with a character he's barely met, and whose only interaction with him is accidentally running into him... but... the movies already did that.
I don't mind this infact Im actuality rooting for them to start as friends first.
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The first sentence I quoted is awkward, and mixes tenses; at the very least it should be "explain" not "explained". The second sentence isn't even a complete sentence. I must say such errors in the first paragraph of a story does not leave a very good first impression...
6539315 Thanks, at least some people are willing to help me out.
It has been fixed, but hey what can you do with an author who is dyslexic? 
Nice. Been looking for dew days for a story with this premise. This is the only one I found. :)
[edit: okay, I found more now, in the "also liked" bar on the right. But that's beside the point]
As for the grammar and such: I noticed a couple of hiccups, but nothing that hindered my enjoyment. I would say kudos for writing stories when you are dyslexic. Takes a measure of guts!
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Thank you!
At least someone is looking at my way of writing.
Besides, I don't care about the bad or hate comments because they really don't get me mad or depressed. 
Just as long as my readers and followers read my stories, I'll feel happy. 
Also, I have a few websites that correct my grammar. 