Chapter 3
Sunset reluctantly woke up from her rather peaceful slumber. She desperately wanted to stay asleep, but it was just too bright and her eyelids weren't doing a good enough job of keeping the light out. Groggily, the girl slowly opened her eyes and tried to get up, but found herself being gently pushed back down onto the bed.
"Save your strength, Sunset Shimmer." Principal Celestia soothed. "You're at the school nurse’s. Do you remember what happened?" the older woman asked, her fingers slowly stroking over Sunset's head. Instead of questioning what the principal was doing, the alien girl leaned into the touch, almost automatically.
"I remember... Yes. The sun wasn't rising for some reason, Twilight and I approached your sister and you, and then... I heard a voice. And then-" Sunset breathed in and out a couple of times. "I...I don't recall much. Just that I heard a voice and my vision turned white."
"I see." Celestia replied.
It was then that the girl slowly opened her eyes and gazed directly at the face of the older woman. She looked more than a little worried about her student, but there was also relief.
"What happened?" Sunset asked weakly.
Celestia smiled. "Well, I wasn't here when it happened, but from what the others told me you...raised the sun."
"I did WHAT?!" Sunset sat up before Celestia could react. However the fiery maned girl fell back soon afterwards, too exhausted from her incredible feat. She could barely wrap her head around what she had just heard.
M-M-Me?! Raising the sun?!
"But...how?" Sunset managed to get out.
"Believe me, I have been pondering this for the past hour." Celestia sighed. "But as urgent as this is, the first thing I need to do is teach you how to control your new powers."
The girl tilted her head in confusion. "You? Teach me? But you're....you're..." Sunset's eyes widened in shock as she realized what the "principal" had just said.
"Princess...?" the girl meeped carefully.
The now-identified princess of Equestria's sun, slowly wrapped her arms around her former student and carefully pulled the girl into a hug.
"It's good to finally see you again, my faithful student."
"Princess...I...I..." She was at a loss for words. It was just all so sudden. Here was the one person Sunset Shimmer feared ever meeting again, and the person was hugging her, while whispering soothing words into her ear. Overwhelmed by everything that happened today already, the former unicorn simply pressed her face into Celestia's chest and silently started to cry.
Celestia herself resisted the urge to cry and nuzzled the poor girl's cheek. "It's alright. I'm simply happy that Twilight managed to help you, where I failed you."
Sunset looked up a little confused. "Hmm?"
Celestia wiped a tear away from Sunset's face. Seeing the question that was written on the girl’s face, the princess wiped a tear away and held her like a child.
"I was the one who encouraged you to dedicate your life on your studies. I was the one who kept my distance from you, fearful of getting too attached to anypony. I was too blind to see that you needed my attention more than ever, and I let you fall. When I demanded you to make friends, I didn't realize where I had led you. I thought at the time I could push you to be the Element of Magic for my own selfish reasons."
Sunset wanted to say something, but was interrupted by Celestia putting a finger on her lips. "I know what you want to say, but let's leave the past in the past and start over, shall we?"
Sunset looked at her former mentor and thought about it. If she hadn't felt so exhausted, she would have had a ton of things to say, but at this stage she was just glad that she could feel her limbs again.
So in the end, she just nodded and gave the princess one final hug. Except the princess didn't let her go.
"Uh, princess? You can let go now."
Celestia did as requested, though she looked a little confused. "I don't remember you being so hug shy."
"Must come with being a human for too long. They aren't exactly herd creatures," the girl explained.
"Ah, I see."
There was a knock at the door and it opened slowly. Princess Twilight Sparkle was peeked into the room. Or at least, Sunset guessed it was the princess. Twilight Sparkle on this side of the mirror usually had her hair in a bun, and this was notably absent.
"Sunset! I'm glad you're awake. Uh, I'm sorry Celestia, I know you wanted to be alone with her, but...how do I put this..."
"It's okay Twilight. Just tell me what's going on."
Twilight took in a deep breath, before speaking, "Discord is here."
You could hear a pin drop to the ground.
In one of the currently empty classes, a certain draconequus was laughing his ass off. Quite literally. He was having trouble keeping his tail attached to the rest of his body, as it kept falling off. This just added fuel to the fire, and the gales of laughter redoubled as the Spirit of Chaos floated in mid air. Down on the ground, the Equestria Girls and the school principals looked at the creature with a mixture of curiosity and a little fear. With the exception of Pinkie Pie, who looked excited at the prospect of making a new friend.
Twilight and Princess Celestia entered the classroom, drawing everyone's attention. Princess Celestia's eye twitched as she beheld the lord of chaos in all his mismatched glory, seemingly unaffected by the mirrors strange transformative magic.
Discord wiped a tear away from his eye, readjusting the lower part of his body again. "Oh Twilight,"-he teleported next to the princess of friendship, putting both his claw and paw on her shoulders. "Why didn't you tell me earlier that such a wonderful, chaotic place existed?" he waved with his paw in front of her eyes. "These humans are just wonderfully funny."
Twilight took in a deep breath and asked the dreaded question. "What. Are. You. Doing. Here. Discord?" she asked, breathing out with each word.
"Aw Twilight," he pinched her cheek and teleported in front of the group "I thought we were already past this whole “doubt your friends” thing. But I guess I could be responsible for giving Sunny and Twily here the power to the sun and moon," he summoned a tiny moon and a tiny sun in front of him, but got too close to the sun and burnt his beard.
With a snap of his claws, the two balls were gone and his beard restored. "But I didn't." he grinned, summoning popcorn and a pair of 3D glasses. "I have been watching those amusing humans freaking out, because the sun wouldn't rise. In 5D! You don't get such good entertainment back in Equestria." He turned to Fluttershy, who tried to appear as small as possible.
"Popcorn?" he offered, but his paw was smashed away by Rainbow’s fist.
"Leave her alone, buster!" she shouted, glaring him in the eye. The lord of chaos shrugged her off and flew towards the ceiling, reclining just below the strip lights.
"Wait a minute, Discord. What did you say?" Celestia asked.
"Hmm? I said a lot of things, dear ‘Tia." He shrunk himself and appeared next to her ear. "Well no wonder, somepony seriously needs to clean up in here." He could be heard while looking into the sun princess' ear.
"Oooh!" Pinkie Pie looked in behind Discord, but he came out from the other ear.
"Did you really say, Twilight has the power over the moon on this world?" Celestia elaborated.
This caused everyone, especially the two Twilights to freeze up. With all the magic on display, everyone was only half listening to his words.
"Congratulations my dear!"
"AIIIEE!"
The draconequus appeared next to Sci-Twi, causing her to shriek. He also blew into a party flute, throwing confetti into the air.
Twilight ran towards her counterpart and hid behind the purple princess, who scowled at her friend, until his words fully sunk in. "Wait. Not only has Sunset control over the sun, but she" pointing at Twilight with the glasses "has control over the moon? How does that make any sense!?!?" she questioned.
"It doesn't and that's why it is so wonderful!" Discord laughed clapping his paw and claw, only for the claw to fall off and take off on its own.
"Oh dullards. Please excuse me, everyhuman." Thus began the chase of Discord after his claw. Luckily the hallways were empty.
Now that the main distraction was out of the room, everyone turned towards the Equestrians. Who turned towards Twilight. Who looked back at her counterpart. And then fainted.
Sunset watched worriedly as her friends carried Sci-Twi into the nurse’s office. The principals and Princess Celestia had left.
"What happened? Did Discord do something to her?" the fiery haired girl asked.
Twilight shook her head. "No, she fainted, because...urgh." Twilight had a hard time keeping the headache at bay.
"How 'bout ya tell us 'bout those Discord fella first." Applejack suggested. "What is he exactly?"
"He looked like he was made out of all kinds of animals." Rarity said, shuddering.
"He did look a little...odd." Fluttershy suggested
"Weird is what I would go with." Rainbow said.
"Discord is a draconequus." Twilight explained. "And the lord of chaos."
"Evil. Called it." Rainbow Dash crossed her arms.
"Not anymore." Twilight got everyone's attention with that line. "This is kind of a long story and I would rather wait for Twilight to wake up so I only have to explain it once. What I can say, Discord is a friend, but he can be a bit much."
"I like him!" Pinkie Pie proclaimed. "Have you seen what he did? Like, how he snapped his fingers and the popcorn appeared out of nowhere? Or how he shrunk itself and then went through the princess' head?! Or-"
"We get it, Pinkie. We were there, remember?" Rainbow Dash raised her voice, annoyed.
Suddenly they heard a groan. Twilight was waking up, rubbing her forehead. "What happened?" she asked.
"Easy there, Twilight." Fluttershy gently held the hand of the other girl. "You almost hit your head on the ground."
"Oh, hey Fluttershy. I had a weird dream. There was this weird thing, which looked like it was made of multiple animals and said I could raise the moon."
"Wait what?!" Sunset sat up.
Before anyone could say anything else, the door was slammed open and Discord's claw ran into the room, freaking human Twi and Flutters out. They freaked even more out, when Discord ran inside, chasing his loose limb and making one gigantic mess of the room.
Princess Twilight had enough of the chaos and kicked the claw against Discord's face. The lord of chaos blinked two times, before grabbing it with his paw and putting it back on his arm.
"Keep it down, would you? Or I'll put a want-it-need-it spell on your horns!" she threatened him.
Sunset hit her pillow again with her head. "This is too much." she moaned. "First I raise the sun, then Celestia appears and now my best friend turns out to be friends with the lord of chaos himself. Please end my life."
"Oh." Discord scratched his face. "Looks like somepony is suffering from a little chaos overdose. Nurse!" He snapped his claws, causing Pinkie Pie's clothes to change into a nurse outfit, while he himself wore a doctors outfit, complete with name tag and a picture of himself.
"This is an emergency. Get me three chocolate cupcakes, two of those with vanilla frosting," he said and put a thermometer in Sunset's mouth "four strawberry milkshakes and a dozen donuts. And quickly, this is a life and death situation!"
"Okie, dokie, lokie!" Pinkie saluted and ran out of the room.
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I better stop now, before things REALLY get out of hand.
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Evidently you're a biiiit inexperienced in the Matters of Discord.
He always gets out of hand, whether you want it or not.
Love what you've done with the chapter.
6482077 Yeah, first time using him.
i do approve of pinkie's reactions though.
6482083 Hehe,thanks.
Wait... Sister?
I liked it, Discord was true to form.
6482112 It's what the docs call nurses in Germany. Sick sister to translate it word for word.
That was chaotic. Discord in a nutshell.
Pinkie is Discords sister?
Headcanon accepted.
Chapter needs another once-through for proofreading, several spelling errors and some formatting oversights.
Content... eh. While it was great to see Celestia in the other world and talking to Sunset, Discord stole the show, and not in a good way. He seemed to distract from the main plot that has my interest, that being Sunny and Sci Twi controlling the sun and moon now. I think you used him as a way to exposit that information quickly, but I think Celestia and perhaps Luna could have done that just as well while allowing for a more focused development of the information and more character depth between the heroines for it.
6482064 Hun... don't you mean "hoof"
Sooo ... Sunset is a foal again?
Oh gods it hurts to breathe. Discord is one of the few characters that can make anyone go sane or insane.
6482064 especially in Discord's case this chapter.
Nice chapter, just saw a couple little things for an editing pass. Depending on where it goes from here I think it works okay having Discord show up here instead of earlier. Overall I think the story is progressing good so far.
Edit: I can easily see Princesses Celestia and Luna coming in to help Sunny and Twi more, but I think Discord works well for getting the ball rolling in his usual crazy no holds barred way.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmilkshakemmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Not chaotic enough.
...How is this chaotic? This might as well be an average day for CHS. Amirite?
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Discord must have an inconceivable mind if he can actually see things in true 5D.
Humans have illusion that we see things in 3D. We don't. We see two 2D-images that are overlayed in our brain, which gives us illusion of a 3D due to depth perception. We humans see the world in true 2D.
4D beings can truly see in 3D. This is where it gets tricky. For this to make sense we need to use flatland. If one of us would find flatland, a dimension or a world where there are only 2 spatial dimensions, we would appear as omniscient and omnipotent gods to them. If a flatland is piece of paper and we are observing the paper from above, we can see absolutely everything in one glance due to the properties of a 2-dimensional plane. For an illustration I will use this picture:
blogs.discovermagazine.com/cosmicvariance/files/uploads/flatlandthefilm.jpg
These are flatlanders. Note how we can see their entire body and everything in it by simply looking at it. This also includes internal organs. A flatlander would only see skin and the surface of the of another flatlander. In their world, there is no up or down, and they only see a single, incredibly thin (absolutely no depth) strip of the world. Thats all there is. But we can see their world as whole. We are able to see everything. Inside buildings, living beings, closed spaces, incredibly far and from all angles at the same time.
Now, a 4-dimensional being sees our 3D world like we see this flatland. To them our entire universe is a flat as a piece of paper. They see things in truly 3D. If they were to look upon our realm, they would see absolutely everything in a single glance. They see your body from every single possible angle at the same time and see inside everything, just as we can see inside the flatlander. They could also simply touch your body from the inside without making any sort of opening.
Which would make a good horror movie. You can't stop these things. They are completely invulnerable while in their own dimension and they can simply rip your heart out of your chest and them throw it on the floor without breaking anything else. An understanding of their true forms would make people without extreme knowledge of mathematics and geometry go mad.
Anyways, if Discord sees things in true 5D he can see these 4D creatures as they can see us and we can see the flatlanders. That would make him a 6th dimensional being. If that is the case, to him, the inconceivable 5-dimensional space, which is millions of times as maddening as the 4-dimensional space, is as flat and simple as a piece of paper. Our laws of physics and reality are absolutely nothing to him. A single letter of his 5D alphabet would drive people so incredibly mad that the entirety of Cthulhu mythos would weep in shame and then afterwards go mad.
Now that's scary.
Man, you should let your imagination run wild more often.
Looks like things got out of hand with discord, but now, how is the world going to function everyday, when the two people controlling. The sun and moon both sleep during those times and wake up WHEN the sun comes up?
6482669
Well... shit.
Who needs sleep?
Ah, Discord. To me, he's deadpool with power over reality. I would rather Deadpool with Discord's power than Pinkie Pie being Pinkiepool. That would just destroy the universe.
6482184 Translation error on my side.
6482344 This too.
Must say this is a great story so far. Keep it up.
6483109 Incorrect. The fourth dimension is not time, it's another spatial dimension just like the rest. People just like to think or treat time like a dimension to make it easier to understand. It might as well be 1st, 3rd or 38th dimension.
6482112
Who know?
Actually, I found Discord in-character here and maybe even slightly understated.
6484028 Fourth dimension is a spatial dimension just like the first three.
6482669 dammmm
I found that to incredibly interesting
A few grammar issues jump out at me. Overdose, rather then over-doze stands out the most. Unless that was intentional?
6482005 Thank you for your praise.
Nice. VERY nice.
6484528 Why dump? According to season 4 start, a year passed since Luna returned. Maybe my math was a little off, while writing the story, but in my opinion? It's canon. I have proof. What's yours?
6484549 because the concept is stupid. if all of that happened in a year then the sisters need to step down. Tanks for the memories is a flashback as far as I'm concerned.
Also note that Pinkie's birthday was Party of one yet the next season she says her birthday is 90 some days away.
6484714 I don't think Tanks for the memories is a Flashback. You have no proof for that. As for the other one, you get a point there, but those writers are known to leave some minor plotholes or should I say timeholes? Anyways, they leave those there every now and then. It's debatable which timeline is correct, but I go with this one. Which assumes that a lot of these adventures happen in a short time span. Dang, my universe is messed up.
6484743 well Tanks should be in season three and Twilight didn't need wings for the episode. So like MDW we the fans correct the writers mistakes.
6484749 Hmm, yeah I see what you mean, but I still leave things as they are. I am more comfortable with that timeline.
6484756
one mark against this. Note that isn't a downvote and still reading.
6484783 You know, sometimes you should keep comments like this to yourself. They can (and already have) been taken the wrong way.
6485047 Instead of laying to the side by a few degrees, the north pole is actually on top, like straight up. Damn, it's hard to explain in English.
6485564
An easier way to explain is that our Earth has an axial tilt, that means that at winter the north pole gets nights that lasts for a couple months at a time and at summer it gets days that last for a similar length of time. Equuis (the pony world) apparently doesn't have that tilt.
The story is here, but the grammar makes it painful to read... D:
Perhaps find some help to get it edited up before publishing chapters rather than after? >.> I know a few friends who write like this in their drafts, but with a little help get it all nice and polished and looking good by release time, so don't feel like it's not doable.
And you should probably delete the author's note and the (warning chaotic) at the start of this chapter. If you think this is "too much chaos", think again.
This is like, kiddie pool levels of shenanigans. Besides, self-berating author's notes don't belong in story chapters. To ze blogs with that. ^^; (or better yet, don't kick yourself at all! 
) Even when you do feel the need to add an A/N, it's generally better to put it at the end than the beginning.
6486946 I'm too lazy to have it read over by my editor before publishing^^ Anyways, first chapter is now edited. And my editor gave me two more to look through for my other stories.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
LOL!
Yeah, maybe you overdid the Lord or Chaos there... but to quote one of my favorite fictional characters, "Everything in excess! Moderation is for monks!" (Lazarus Long).
Loving it!
6483109 Actually, I think thats the point.
6495289 What? Someone hacked my account.
6495463 Aww man you are screwed now
BTW loved this chapter can't wait for the next one to come out
6495289
6499773 I need an English translation for this. Why? For the story of course: duden.de/_media_/full/T/Trichter-201020510661.jpg