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Noble Thought


Spaaaaaace! I'm in space.


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Marian, a recent graduate from the prestigious Manehattan School of Library Sciences, returns home to Dodge Junction to found a library. To do so, she must face the sister she ran away from after making a terrible mistake.

Her sister, Cherish, who holds the keys to her dream.



*Cover art cobbled together from the comics in PhotoShop by yours truly.
Editing by Minds Eye

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 23 )

You just love to pull me in with this interesting premises.

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The key to writing a story with draw is precisely that :twilightsmile:. I hope you enjoy!

Really enjoyable if a little rushed. I'm still unsure as to what the characters are like, it seems like there's bits that either I'm lacking context for or just plain misunderstood the hints in the story.

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It was, unfortunately, rushed. I would have loved to give more depth to all of it. It's a story I've been sitting on for some time, for a character that I wanted to flesh out. A lot of the background stuff was merely hinted at instead of fully explored. I intend to spend some more time on a deconstruction on the lore and history that went into the story.

Also, in a lot of ways, this story is a sort of narrative experiment for me. Trying out a more narrative heavy style than is my norm and leaving hints to deeper things... Hopefully for people to think about. This was also, sort of, a companion piece to Three Words in tone and genre, where the ending is happier.

Da FEELZ! But seriously, I love how you pack so much subtle emotion into such relatively few words. Favorited.

6477631 ah I see. Just on the hints, they definitely worked for me and I was engaged enough to ponder some things its just that I had nothing to build those thoughts around. Does that make sense?

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It does, and thank you for the feedback, too! I'm pretty sure I know which parts you're talking about, so I know for the future where I need to shore things up. Namely the bits about Silvertongue, I would think, and the event that broke them apart.

Part of my weakness is deciding which parts to include and which to only hint at. Similarly, it was a little hard to work in more about Cherish and only hint at what she was like in the short span of time I had to write this. Marian, I hope, came across more strongly.

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I like to think subtlety is one of my stronger skills as a writer, at least in the emotional arena. I find it harder to be subtle about plot, because too little hinting at what comes feels like I'm cheating my audience when it springs out. And, so, I find it hard to write mystery stories. But emotional stories... like this one and Three Words... those, I consider myself better at conveying.

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Ooh! And I just noticed you added it to a few groups, too! Thank you, Winter. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I liked the focus this story had. The bits about Silvertongue answered the questions they needed to answer--what happened, why it happened--and they kept the rest of the story free to explore Marian's character, and eventually settle the conflict between the characters that needed it settled.

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I'm glad you enjoyed it! I enjoyed writing it, to be sure, and I thank you, too, for helping me get this polished up. I love the potential of underused characters and settings. So much room to explore.

I haven't read it, but I expect some 'Outbreak Company' action.

This was lovely and borderline dreamy to me.
Love the tie into the comic. That wasnt a bad issue either.

I had Bruce Springsteen's 'Glory Days' going through my head at certain points. Since I am a huge fan of the Boss, this is a good thing. :)

Anyway, yeah. Time passes, things must be set right, lest the chance to do so passes away. Also, *Kicks the crap out of the FlimFlam Brothers* :p

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Time passes, things must be set right, lest the chance to do so passes away.

You could even consider this a companion story to Three Words. One where things were set right, one where things were not.

Holy shmeck, this was awesome. I am going to have to re-read the Flim Flam comic to see how this fits into that story now, as I don't remember much of that one.

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I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm actually thinking about actually writing a story about what the brothers only hinted at in the comic, and showing it from Marian's perspective, instead. I think it might be interesting to give the other side of the story.

But no promises...

I have a question; how do you get featured on Equestria Daily? Do you submit it......or does it just happen?

6484992 Coincidence? I'm seriously thinking about and started writing a story about what happens *after* Flim/Flam/Marian have their little romantic disagreement. Not sure if the two stories would mesh, though. I have Marian as a descendant of the Orange branch of the Apple family, which makes the result of the romance an Apple family relative. Quote from the end of Chap. 1:
“Your cousin’s name is Apple Sprout,” said Flim, holding the unicorn foal up to his chest. “And she’s my daughter.”

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You submit stories. There's a link on the EQD page under Submit. Here's a link for the guidelines: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2014/11/story-submission-guidelines.html

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thank you so much!:twilightsmile:

8 years is nothing compared to twenty. Poor Odysseus...

I liked this story, you did a good job on it! :pinkiesmile:

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