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Ledomare


Oh no, not the bees! NOT THE BEES!!! AAAAAAAAA!!!! ARGLUBAH THEY'RE IN MY EYES!! MYY EYEEEES!!!! AAAAAAAA!!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHGURGLERRRR ...in other words, I write stories.

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An old story lost to the ages of time: The story of the legendary Knights of Harmony, six crusaders who went searching for the Elements of Harmony during the War of Mayhem, during the reign of Discord. Along the way, they will face many foes and conquer many challenges, and learn about the dark past and the rise of Discord, from the very ones who witnessed it firsthand.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 5 )

Just a note: the long s in the title is purely cosmetic. I'm not actually going to write this with funky 's'es all over the place.

Another short "chapter", if it can be called that. The first two are sort of background chapters. Don't fret, though, my dearies, next chapter's going to be a good one.

Huzzah! Finally, an actual chapter done.
I'm sort of trying to incorporate a sort of olden-times feel to the story without having to include a 'tis' or 'thine' every five words. I hope I'm doing alright.

Not bad. I'm interested to see where this goes. Tracking! :pinkiesmile::rainbowdetermined2:

668452 I think you did really well with that for the most part, but I'm not too sure about using naught for not...I've never seen naught used as anything but a noun (it literally means nothing and is often used figuratively to mean zero), even though not was derived from it...

In general this seems quite epic. You have a knack for making characters feel immediately real and alive. I particularly enjoyed the description and characterization of Clover, very vivid.

It's really quite interesting to see the story of Hearth's Warming filled out and given a somewhat grittier but no less magical take (exactly how a good Medieval-esque fantasy should be :pinkiehappy:).

I have no idea why this story has so many dislikes, maybe people making snap judgments based on the length...I've seen stupider reasons, sadly. Anyway, I will definitely fav this to see where it goes.

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