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in the wake of the biggest tragedy of her life, Diamond Tiara must make the biggest choice of her young life: move on from the loss of her only friend and family, or end it all. luckily, three unlikely allies are there to help her make the right choice......
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Yo everypony. I'm happy you all favorited this. After reading a few other diamond tiara fan fics I decided to do one of my own. To be honest, I don't think she deserves all the hate she gets. Yeah, she's a bully, but that doesn't mean she should be treated like shit. It's much better when you guys have her get reformed or overcome some kind of trial and become better for it. Good examples include Waking To Reality and Cubic Zirconia. I feel that blueblood and trixy get the same unjustified treatment most of the time. To make sure I can make Ultimate Selfishness as good as possible I would really like to get some imput from you guys and make sure you check out my other work Timeless Rulers when you get the chance. Ciou!
Why doesn't this story have a dark tag?
6546993 it's got gore, sad, and tragic. I would think that would make it dark by default.
This story needs more views..... Very sad, but extremely compelling.
Agreed and thanks
This chapter was so sweet, really diabetes inducing.
Also Sweetie is wrong, horns and magic are OP.
Sorry its taking me a while to add to this, but you know how fucked up life can be. to those who like this kind of fan fic I resently got started on another dark fic called A Bitter Poison and as i'm a bit burned out at the moment I would love to get your feed back on it. I might add more chapters to Ultimate Selfishness soon now that I got ABP started. also, I'm curious anypony can figure out the meanings behind the chapter names in US. If you win you'll get one year of good luck for each right guess while wrong answers.....well, you get the idea(just kidding
) ciou!
Forced feels. 2/8 for this b8. Okay try m8.
7013849 meh, it is a bit forced, but this was just the opening act. Now the fix is really gonna get interesting.
7014040 Edgy and interesting aren't synonymous in writing.
7014175 I ment to type act not fix. And is edge supposed to be a complement or a criticism?
Woah, that’s some heavy stuff. I feel the need to point out a pet peeve. Acronyms are okay to use in writing, especially if they are part of a specific jargon. I hate referring to the Cutie Mark Crusaders as CMC, and Twilight and her friends as Mane Six within fictions. It breaks me out of the story.
Minor error, you used “hallow” when you meant “hollow”. Hallow is to make holy or sanctify for righteousness. Hollow means empty. FYI
Seriously though, I’m just being picky. Interesting beginning that shows promise for what lies ahead. Heavy and sad, but handled well.
Corpse has an e on the end.
Corps (pronounced core) means something else.
Interesting chapter that continues the promise of the first. I think this is a really strong beginning, and I’m curious to see where it goes.
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Thanks. I do tend to get them mixed up from time to time. Same goes for hallow/hollow as you've noticed.
You just punched me in the feels. Nicely done! The way this chapter went, it makes me sad that I left Granny Smith out of my own story... she has a great deal of wisdom to offer.
You used “know” instead of “now” somewhere near the beginning. I only mention it because spell check can’t catch errors of that sort.
Good chapter. I’m still enjoying the suffering.
I love Diamond Tiara opening up to Granny Smith... but it felt too soon. But then... I tend to write longer things, so... take that or leave it.
Also, WHAT THE HECK WITH CREEPY GRAY SCARY DUDE AT THE PLAYGROUND!!?!??!?!
I was all in the sad feels and then I was suddenly afraid! I have no idea where that’s going, but now I’m scared to know! (Scared in a good way)
Good work.
You’ve got some subject verb agreement issues in this chapter, and at the beginning there were some odd shifts in verb tense between past and present. The rest of the narrative has been past. Also I saw a “fallowed” used where you meant “followed”.
Another good chapter. Grief is hard to tackle as a subject, but you’re pulling it off. I especially liked the lash out. It fit really well.
I’m still not sure if I can trust you! Something sinister is lurking just out of sight, I know it!
I found a few more typos. Several times you used “stares” (as in, to stare) when you meant “stairs” (steps). Someone “chucked” instead of “chuckled” (I've made that error myself a time or two). At the very beginning, “aw” should be “awe”. And the first time you said “castles” as a possessive, you meant “castle’s”.
Okay, now on to the fun stuff. Interesting change in her dreams. I feel like things maybe progressing a little fast as far as her recovery is concerned. That sort of trauma takes years to overcome, and you never are really okay again. You touched on that, which was great that she didn’t claim her tiara. She has to establish a new normal. Your symbolism of rebirth is on target.
The only other thing that gives me pause is the sinister stallion from three chapters ago that hasn’t come back yet... I’m still nervous about it.
I’m still enjoying this, the few rough spots aside.
Stop the presses! Is that all?!?
No ending???
I forgot to mention that I liked the mineral names for chapter titles.
So, is this an abandoned work that will never be completeled, or have you been busy? No worries either way, but I think it’s a great start.
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I stopped working on this a while back when it looked like it it's popularity couldn't get very high and I got swamped with work. I may decide to come back to this but I need to finish Seven Saviors first.
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I understand. Writing is serious work! I’ll have to check out that other one next maybe.
Will this ever get continued?