Trust in the rain

Twilight gets a special vistors that didn't have a good relationship. In this story they learn to leave the past behind and to trust eachother.

Chapters (1)

Comments ( 14 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 14
- Newest First
- Oldest First

bigMAREmac

bigMAREmac #1 · Jul 21st, 2012 · · ·

This is my first fabric, so I just want to hear some advice. Anything is great. SOOOO, come at me bros.

bigMAREmac

bigMAREmac #2 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

Sorry this was made a long time ago. I still want feedback though.

thedarkshark24

thedarkshark24 #3 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

don't quit your day job.

bigMAREmac

bigMAREmac #4 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

1522037 This was my first ever story and I had no experience. So I don't think you have the right to say that

Xenonic

Xenonic #5 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

- But I do have the right to say that you need an editor. And you shouldn't try and guilt-trip people into voting and commenting to get you to change it from Cancelled to Incomplete, it never works.

thedarkshark24

thedarkshark24 #6 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

1522098 You could have added at least a back story for why they would troll twilight that's probably why a lot of your stories got thumbed down you need clearer and more detailed plot points. And story for events or at least IMPLIED events for stories its hard to fallow and makes little sense. So if you want to continue writing stories read some first to see what yours needs.

bigMAREmac

bigMAREmac #7 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

Sorry about that. Thanks for the advice. This story wasn't even made to be on this site but I decided to do so anyway.

bigMAREmac

bigMAREmac #8 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

1522130 I will keep that in mind.Twilight getting trolled was a joke they played on her. That is all

thedarkshark24

thedarkshark24 #9 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

1522150 see I couldn't of known that with the resources I had available I shall retract my previous statement but not my down vote

Thorlol

Thorlol #10 · Oct 28th, 2012 · · ·

This is my first fabric, so I just want to hear some advice. Anything is great. SOOOO, come at me bros.

This is my first fabric... egad.

Twilight gets a special vistors visitor that didn't have a good relationship With Twilight?. In this story they learn to leave the past behind and to trust eachother Two words.

Industrial