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Twilight floated a second fritter up to her mouth when she realized the first was gone. “What is in these things?” “Mostly love. Love ‘n about three sticks of butter.”

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Co-written with Merc The Jerk

Applejack's friend Dash took off for the fast life of the big city years ago, but now she's shown up back on the farm with some big city problems. She knows Applejack will always help her out, and Applejack knows it too; she's always been fond of Dash... maybe a little too fond.

Luckily, the Pomme family has a solution to Dash's problem right in their basement. It ain't exactly legal, and ain't exactly safe, but for a friend like Dash, Applejack is willing to risk her reputation, her neck, and, if the cards fall right, her heart.

Warning for strong language.

Cover art by Eve Ashgrove

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 58 )

I see that picture and all I thought was: "That poor car." Applejack looks to be leaning on the weakest part of the door!

23 Skiddoo, that sure was the bee's knees. Err... Flappers...? Clearly you're much better at writing 20's lingo than me. Anyway, I love how you brought the characters we love into this era. Can't wait for the rest.

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Those old cars were pretty damn sturdy. None of this plastic bullshit we have today. I think it'll be just fine, even if AJ's a big girl. :twilightsmile:

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You should have seen our first draft. We originally went a little overboard with the slang, and had to dial it back.

Glad you like it so far!

I approve of this fiction and the sorta pony words contained within.

As a British person, 1920s American slang? Totally superior to any Britishisms. There's something about the setting that's inherently comfy.

he’s one of Will Taurino’s boys

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Every time, Merc.

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Every time, Merc.

Actually... that one was me. :rainbowlaugh:

For good or for ill, any mention of hobos makes me think of John Hodgman's The Areas of My Expertise. "Rainbow Dash" probably would fit in fairly well with the other seven hundred hobo names.

In any case, I'm definitely intrigued. I love a well-researched period piece, and you clearly did your homework here. I look forward to more.

A very intriguing beginning, and the characters both feel at home and well worn in the setting, but also like themselves. It's an odd thought at first blush, but 1920s America is pretty close to ol' anachronistic Equestria. I'm definitely getting some good The Wind in the Willows vibes from this, which is amusing considering the whole talking animals/humanized nature of it. I'm eagerly awaiting more.

why do a bunch of self-righteous
prudes get ta decide if what we make ain’t fit fer drinkin’?

I cannot think of a single reason why this indent is here.

Other than that, you've grabbed me.

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Because importing from gdocs is never allowed to actually work all the way. It's fixed now, thank for pointing it out! :ajsmug:

6455323 This is why I write fimfic on Fimfiction, to avoid porting troubles.

Hooch runners. Hoo boy. :rainbowdetermined2::applejackconfused:
Why do I get the feeling Filthy's car won't be in one piece?

Also:

laid out the complements

Compliments!

If I am not actively speaking only in '20s slang by the end of this story I will consider the venture a failure.
You've both managed to make something simultaneously ridiculous and just sane enough for me to buy it. Why was I nodding enthusiastically when Pinkie was the owner of a speakeasy? Maybe I spoke too soon. Not sane enough for me to buy it, but crazy enough for me to adore it.

20's dialog. Gotta love it. Good story. You have my interest. Have a like!

if the style gets any any shorter

Just one any for me, thanks.

If you’d just turn the barn into a hanger,

They call it a hangar. Hangers are for clothings.

Also, glad you didn't send the cop over the cliff.

The cop insisting on looking for hooch heavily suspected that it was there. That's a vibe I got.

Trivia: FBI is suspected of poisoning stills during prohibition to give alcohol a bad reputation. Still, badly made hooch didn't really need their help. You'd think most who cooked it would want their customers coming back with more money.

Well, we're off to a good start. This is enough of an AU that I was worried the characters wouldn't feel like themselves but you manage to tread the line, keeping the careful balance of adapting them naturally to the situation while keeping them recognizably themselves.

Evelyn "Dash" Hammett. That just sank in. Cute reference. Very era-appropriate.

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You'd think, but it's worth remembering that a lot of people running illegal operations either don't know what they're doing or don't think long-term or both.

Maybe we have a bit of a makeshift desert ta wash down the main course.

When it's foody stuff, it's dessert. Desert is sandy.

Saying it outloud settled that in Applejack’s mind.

Pretty sure out loud is two words.

Also, good scene, the sort to make someone feel really lonely in a good way.

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Fixed, thanks! And I'm glad you liked it.

If I didn't know that there was only one chapter left, I'd think this was going to go horribly awry. As is, I'm just looking forward to the denoument. That's not to say that I'm eager to see the end of this story, just that I'm looking forward to more and know that the next part is the last part.

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There's a bit of surprise still in store. Not quite horribly awry, but let's just say that the last chapter is a long one, and hangovers aren't the best start to a relationship.

That being said, the denouement is a lot of fun, too. :pinkiehappy:

I really like this one. Surprised it keeps catching random downvotes (with no comments to explain them), but eh, that's fimfiction.

Great concept executed well!

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Surprised it keeps catching random downvotes

Welcome to the world of non self-insert humanized stories. Enjoy your stay.

But... but.... my GilDash.

6465939 Barkin' up the wrong tree, hoss.

6466377 Jeez can anyone take a joke?

I liked it but the third chapter seemed the weakest and I can't quite put my finger on why yet....

She crained her tall body, looking

craned

Also, that exchange with the cop was hilarious.

AJ smiled at the woman—she seemed like the cat that caught the canary. AJ offered a smile to the woman.

A bit repetitive, verging on confusing.

It’s where I need ta be, ya know? no matter how much I like the road sometimes too.

You forgot to capitalize no.

But anyway, good story.

This was a fun story to read. I took me a bit to get into the bootlegger era banter. But after that I really enjoyed the setting.

A great slice of Appledash and a crazy fun story.

:rainbowdetermined2::ajsmug:

I waited until the whole thing was finished until I read it. I'm glad I did because once I started I couldn't put it down. It was a very lovely period piece about my favorite ship. It had a realistic ending and left me craving more of this Universe. I hope we get some more sooner rather then later. :ajsmug::heart::rainbowkiss:

Well, that was a delight. And there's more? I eagerly look forward to more bootlegging, period lingo, and creative character placement. (I can't help but wonder where Fluttershy and Twilight fit in in this setting...)

Lackadaisy Ponies?
Good stuff :)

So much slang. So much slang...
I was surprised how steamy this got back in chapter 3! And also surprised at what the scope of it turned out to be. That always seems to happen to me with fics of this length. They're over before I expect it. And I certainly want more of this! There's still so much to explore here in this world. It's so interestingly put together!

This was a really fun bit. Short, sweet, with just the right bitter hints to leave you wanting more of the whole thing. Can't wait to see what comes next, whenever that happens.

Being Jackie, her "rebellious phase" consists of sticking by Dashie, and her own family, no matter what anyone else thinks. Which is wholly in character.

This was so much fun to read! I'm a big fan of period pieces, so when you add ponies to the mix (or at least their personalities to their human counterparts), the fun has surely been doubled!

but had backed down on Dash mentioning that having someone with her might be a sign of weakness to her debtors

I think you want "creditors".

Not even done with this chapter and I love it. The time period, the jargon, the everything!

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Secret family recipe that one of them Coca boys decided ta share with the world

This is like... a backronym, but for ponification, isn't it?

I'm so all about this story.

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Did they have blinkers in the 20's? O.o I'm not honestly sure...

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I am so in love with this for so many reasons.

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Wait did more ever happen? @_@ Because all this is missing is a tommygun-fueled shootout with the Taurino boys...

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