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ultronquake


After not writing since high school i'm very grateful for mlp and the brony fandom for inspiring me to be creative again. Currently working full time, I write when I can.

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Soon after the battle of the bands the three sirens, Adagio Dazzle, Sonata Dusk and Aria Blaze are forced into mandatory friendship rehabilitation. A fancy way of saying each Dazzling has some annoying high school student hovering over them every hour of the day.

Aria Blaze being the spiteful opportunist that she is seeks to turn it into an opportunity to gain revenge against the ringleader of those who defeated them. One way or another Flash Sentry will be hers.

I've dabbled into Shipping in the past with some of my stories, but this will be my first full on shipfic. Why is this story marked Equestria Girls as well as human? Because it has elements of both, just read it and find out.

Art I'm using as the cover created by - MixiePie.

Chapters (9)
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I had the pleasure of pre-reading this so I already know it's good.

basaltic foodstuffs.

I didn't realize there was a Rockbiter in the audience, :derpytongue2:

6715570 Aw dang it, I thought I'd fixed that. Thanks for pointing that out to me:twilightsheepish:

The phantom chapter returns!

Also; a story in which the sirens are evidently still evil(ish) and scheming something, but don't seem to be suffering for it (give or take Sonata in most cases) every step of the way? Interest established. :moustache:

Hm... you piqued my interest, good sir.

Nice, very nice.
I'll be looking forward for the next chapter!

6719717 Awesome, I have six chapters done and I'll be releasing them daily.

"My mistake, I just assumed that was the case by the way you had her hand on her a#@ when you came into my office."

:rainbowlaugh:

"Really Flash? I know I was a b*#@$ to you back then but you never touched me like that." All eyes were on bacon hair, "Uh, I mean- What's wrong with you, filthy man animal!"

Pssst, Adagio! ...Hint, hint. :trollestia:

As a reward for being such a brave boy Aria fed him with the chopsticks he was struggling with, all the while playing a little game of footsie under the table.

This sounds adorable. Shame about Aria's true intentions (Or IS it?), but still.

On a side note; you're allowed to type out the swears on a teen-rated fic, though I like to imagine there are bleeping sounds with the current system. :eeyup:

I have the feeling the Sirens haven´t realize yet their immortality is forfeit without magic.

6721975 Oh I know I'm allowed to, I just think it's funner to self censor. Plus I don't want anyone's mommy yelling at me cause I taught little Billy the F word:rainbowlaugh:

This continues to be cute.

My first wild (and likely inaccurate) guess for what the other four were up to is that they went about their plans normally, each group happened across a magic hobo and a time-traveling space-knight respectively, got drafted into a hectic adventure through time and space, unraveled a conspiracy that conjoined their respective encounters, blew up a plasma-spitting mecha-dragon, saved the future of an intergalactic republic, hitched a ride back to earth, stopped for donuts on the way home, then got to the door when they remembered they never actually got to the places they meant to go just hours before and they're collectively annoyed about it. Hence the loudness.

Looking forward to the actual reason, if it's anything beyond 'Teenage girls tend to be noisy.' :twilightsmile:

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My first wild (and likely inaccurate) guess for what the other four were up to is that they went about their plans normally, each group happened across a magic hobo and a time-traveling space-knight respectively, got drafted into a hectic adventure through time and space, unraveled a conspiracy that conjoined their respective encounters, blew up a plasma-spitting mecha-dragon, saved the future of an intergalactic republic, hitched a ride back to earth, stopped for donuts on the way home, then got to the door when they remembered they never actually got to the places they meant to go just hours before and they're collectively annoyed about it. Hence the loudness.

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Spoilers it's not going to be that.

(:trollestia:)

The establishment of two little colonies is great and all, but wasn't Adagio set to be in her own room? Why are they sleeping together now? Was it just to validate building cushy pillow-walls or did I miss something? :rainbowhuh:

Regardless, yes, still enjoying, and not just for the Sundagio fuel you've got cooking here. The family line in particular made me smile. :twilightsmile:

I'm pretty sure Flash's band's name is 'Flashdrive.' :applejackunsure:

Also; very nice to see Celestia and Luna actively doing something about the whole attempted murder thing, seen a few stories where law-breaking levels of abuse are shrugged off and possibly even encouraged by pretty much everyone but the victim. It's gratifying to witness those with the power to do something actually doing something, like they're actually responsible adults as opposed to the utterly useless authority figures they're almost invariably depicted as.

Aria practically goaded the guy into it, but that doesn't change 'Eh, she deserved it' from being a really messed up mindset.

I focus on this bit because I have nothing to say about all the music references. D:

6742772 I didn't know his band had a name. We never actually get to hear them play so it's all up to imagination. Plus I thought naming them 'Flash in the pan' would be funny.

Thank you for the nice comments about Luna and Celestia, I'm going to try and keep writing them as responsible adults as much as I can. Unfortunately this was the last of the pre made chapters so from no on I'll be splitting my attention between this and my Batman fic. Rest assured though I have plenty of ideas as to where the story will go in the future.

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It is funny, in that a flash in a pan sounds like a great way of hinting that their band would be a one-hit wonder. :rainbowwild:
I'd have said they must have at least sounded half-decent if they got to the semifinals of the BotB, but with the sirens pulling the strings every step of the way, Snips and Snails could have been the 'legitimate' winners for all we know.

No rush for the next chapter, I do more writing than reading these days anyway, which is one reason I am one of the last people on this site who should throw stones about someone not getting any particular story done quickly. :twilightsheepish:

Aria: "Hey princess! Guess what? I have Flash Sentry on my pocket " :ajsmug:
Twilight: "Really? What a coincidence! Me and the Flash from the Crystal Empire are also an ítem. Maybe we should go out all together someday." :twilightsmile:
Aria: :applejackconfused: :twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

6744218 Yeah It'll be something along those lines.

While I understand Sunset´s resent, she should blame Celestia, not Twilight. Part of her previous character development was about Sunset growing up over her jealousy on Twilight for becoming a princess instead of her; no need of coming back on that.

Also, how exactly are Twilight and Flash "dating"? Besides the fact calling their relationship is "long distance" is an understandment, they have barely spent time together, as Aria herself pointed.

6769678 Yeah it's more like a super long distance relationship.

As far as her resenting Twilight, it's not that she hates her. Sunset still has some tough emotions to work out with the help of her friends.

She had to study for years to get into the school for gifted unicorns, not to have her cutie mark conveniently appear just when she needed it most.

Hm. That's our heroes in a nutshell, isn't it? Not a lot of skill or hard work go into their victories, they usually just click their heels together (so to speak) and catch the Deus Ex Machina as it falls into their laps. Magic typically just does whatever they need it to whenever they need it to, no questions asked, but I'm not here to rant. :twilightsheepish:

I liked this chapter! It's always nice to see Sunset aware that Celestia did what she always does instead of-[Rant Redacted]
...I enjoy Sunset not just gratefully eating up whatever she's given, no matter how messed up it might be. Last year's Xmas comic was kinda fucked.

Also hoping Adagio's summary doesn't turn out to be prophetic. :twilightoops:

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Also hoping Adagio's summary doesn't turn out to be prophetic. :twilightoops:

Dramatic tension!!!

Glad you enjoyed the chapter, unfortunately I haven't had a chance to read many of the comics so I don't really know much about the cannon they've established in there.

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Within the last several months, neither have I! :pinkiehappy:
Last I checked, you're not missing much. :applejackunsure:

Oh, ho! Flash has learned a thing or two! Clever boy. :trollestia:
...Watching him be the one to screw with Aria, even just for a second, was maybe more entertaining than it should have been. :twilightoops:

I hope nobody takes this chapter as me trash talking Rainbow Dash or Applejack. I'm a big fan of them both, but I feel their human counterparts are really dumbed down. Especialy in the third film.

I was going to comment on Rainbow being kind of a jerk here, but I can't disagree with the sentiment regarding their movie counterparts. :twilightsheepish:
Their Rainbow hasn't had the character development the pony-Dash has, I get that, so it makes sense that she'd be kind of a selfish, teenage dolt. Still, Rainbow seems to get pushed into that role with all due haste, really making me wish Sunset's change of heart had been slower so she could be the snarky jerk more often.

"Yeah, you're right. I should get back together with Sunset Shimmer! That'll really show her!" Flash said with glee.

I :rainbowlaugh:'d; and I'm pretty sure I heard Aria's mental facepalm all the way out here in the real world.

6871521 I had a ton of fun writing the humor in this chapter, it might be my favorite thing about writing.

6871485 Yeah I felt it was necessary to switch things up a bit, if it's just Aria messing with Flash the whole time then things would get stale pretty quickly.

Nice to see this update! :pinkiehappy:

Sonata is kind of a bitch and Pinkie comes off as genuinely disturbed here, even if only in small ways for each. Not a bad thing, mind, and not just because Sonata is at supposed to be a questionably-former villain anyway.

It's refreshing to see something other than "Pinkie and Sonata together, watch out for Kuh-raaazy shenanigans for which they will recur no consequences whatsoever!" for once. If anything, Sonata's hypocrisy on the secret-keeping thing, demanding Pinkie tell no one while apparently not keeping the secret herself for even a day, feels... human, I guess? The last paragraph is what really sells the chapter, that while both are knowingly doing something reprehensible and very difficult for them, at least they have someone to confide in.

And heck, if the secret got out at all, it would be Aria's own fault for not keeping it to herself in the first place.

Finally, I'll be surprised if Sunset and Adagio aren't in their own secret relationship by this point. Just wondering which reveal (if more than one happens) is going to get the most attention at the big party.

The irony would be Sonata being right and Twilight not giving a fuck about the Ariaflash pairing.

I hope to see this continue. I keep waiting for the moment when they realize they aren't immortal anymore and have a mental breakdown.

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