Chapter 19: Through the Glass
~One Week Later~
Celestia sipped her tea. There was only one bandage remaining on her from the battle she had with Sunset in her own chambers. The bandage was placed on the left front shoulder, right under where her regalia would cover. She had been asked a hundred times or more about how she acquired such injuries. She had to make up stories to explain it to everypony who dared ask. It was the only benefit to having scars. Celestia had no little imagination and ponies were the most gullible species in all the land. Her tales ranged from manticores to dragons, from timberwolves to hydras. Not a single story ever came close to the actual events that a young unicorn damaged her so much.
"What are you looking at?" she playfully asked the phoenix that was perched on her desk.
The bird did not respond verbally, but only with a slight cock of her head. She's been acting so strangely. I hope I haven't done anything to hurt her feelings. The princess raised one confused brow, but only sipped her morning tea once again. The phoenix remained in its complacent state and not at all like her bubbly self.
"I guess I can understand what you're feeling," Celestia told the bird. "It's been odd not having any craziness here. It has already fallen back into the boring state it was before Sunset arrived. Do you miss her?"
There was no response from the bird.
"I see," Celestia nodded. "I miss her as well. However, I understand that if she will ever get help in this world, it shall not be at my hooves. There's one that can save her, I know there is. I can feel it. I feel it so strongly that I know it will never be me."
She put down her tea and stood up from her desk. With a quick stretch of her legs, she walked over to her balcony to gaze out towards the grand city of Canterlot. It was a lovely, peaceful morning. The pegasi had done their rain runs the past two days, so it was now only sunny and clear.
"Come, Philomena," she told the phoenix gently. "Let us enjoy the day as it should be."
The majestic bird swiftly glided from her perch to the railing of the balcony. Celestia smiled at her before returning her gaze to the vast city. From her view atop the Grand Royal Palace, not a single blemish was on the white city. What soul would be troubled in a city of wonders? In a city that has seen so much glory? Celestia knew the answer all too well. She had been wishing to forget the name, but it was always on her mind.
"Philomena, I think it's time to finally reflect on all this," she said quietly. "I have given it a week to come to a conclusion. Never in my life have I been so troubled. Never since Sister Dearest left you and I. I thought I learned a lesson worth a thousand lifetimes. It all seemed so simple. I just needed to care more. I needed to be more loving. They were lessons a child would come up with. Many tried to convince me that it wasn't my fault. None succeeded of course. I wanted to be the sole reason of my own failure. 'I can't fix society, but I can fix myself.' So I did. I fixed myself. Or...at least I believed that I did. A thousand years later and it repeats in startlingly similar fashion. In my age, I have forgot that which is most important to me. I let myself be blinded by my own desire to be the most loving pony that has ever existed. You know very well how many ponies I have helped. I've kept a nation running on the top of the world for a thousand years! My experience, my success, it all should point to me being the greatest, right? Well, perhaps, but I never believed it. I thought I fixed myself and I thought I remained humble. I did neither.
"Perhaps I never understood love. I don't mean romantically, as you know I've never had a relationship. What I mean is that I have never learned to be a sister or a mother. I've taken concepts like politeness, etiquette, and regal authority as being loving or caring. They are good in their own right, but they are not the full power of love. I can teach, but I cannot be motherly. Maybe I've never actually tried to be motherly. Sunset needed a mother, a foundation for her to fall back on. I tried to treat her like a sister. I tried to be that role-model for her even though she never thought me as one. I only tried to convince her that I was the better pony by moral standards and that she could be more like me. I stumbled over my own ideologies trying to be perfect in her eyes while also telling her that I was not perfect. My hooves were never coordinating as one. I was giving and taking at the same time. If I gave only, it would have fared better. If I took only, it would have fared better.
"I must learn from this. I have to learn from this. A thousand years of ruling have taken a toll on my whole body. I am not as strong as I once was, both mentally and physically. It's about time I surround myself with respectable ponies and guide them to be their own rulers of this nation. I have wished so desperately to give up my throne and crown, but none worthy have appeared. Cadance is the only candidate I can think of. However, this could be my fault. A good leader makes leaders and I have only made a few. Philomena, I should not give up on this quest. I have failed with Sunset and her memory is my burden to carry, but I will not fail again in this! I need to step up as a leader once again and guide the ponies to be better than me. There's a pony out there, I know there is, who can rival me without breaking a sweat. There's a pony out there who can be a great leader. There have been many like this pony, but I have left them untouched and thus they never aspired to their greatest potential. Perhaps the pony to be the greatest of all time has come and gone, and I missed my opportunity to recognize them.
"Do not think that I am blowing Sunset off as a simple mistake. I have helped stir chaos into her life and that makes my gut ache. However, I do have hope for her. I know what she desires and I shall not stand in her way any longer. She is on her own now and all the choices in front of her rely solely on her shoulders. I could apologize for weeks at her hooves, but it would be a waste of my breath. She does not deserve me and I do not deserve her. I can only hope that she will find happiness in her future endeavors. Maybe she'll find friends and perhaps all this will be a like a Spring shower. Here one day and gone the next. Oh, I hope so. I hope with my whole heart. Sunset is not done yet. She has a life to live and I fully believe that she will find greatness."
A knocking came at the chamber's door. Celestia looked behind her to see Cadance there in the doorway, looking worried. The Princess of Love gestured at the other princess to come forward. Celestia took some gentle steps before Cadance started.
"Sunset is here! She's back!" Cadance gulped.
"Ah," Celestia smiled. "Right on time. Please, no need to worry yourself, Cadance. There is no threat here."
"But...But..."
"I said there's no threat," Celestia laughed. "Please have some tea. This batch is rather delightful."
Celestia walked passed the younger princess and happily walked down the steps. Cadance stayed bewildered by Celestia's relaxed behavior, but said nothing to her. Her worried expression turned to a bemused scowl and she huffed indignantly.
"Well then!" she then looked over at the kettle of tea. "Guess some tea will do good. Hey, Philomena, pour me a cup."
"Why is it opened?" Sunset asked as she stood right in front of the opened vault.
Celestia rounded the corner. "Because I was expecting you."
"Gah!" Sunset screeched and turned around. "I knew it was too easy! This is a trap, isn't it?"
With the young mare's horn lit and readied to fire, Celestia stood in place. "Not at all, my dear. I remembered that you spoke so fondly of the mirror. That piece of glass has a way of captivating ponies who see it. I thought it would be something you'd return for."
"And you're gonna stop me? Have you learned nothing?" Sunset snarled.
"I've learned enough to not oppose you," Celestia smiled. "Please, head on inside. You shall find no resistance in me or the guards. I've ordered them to not approach you."
Sunset raised a brow in complete confusion. "Huh? What is this?"
"Let me show you," Celestia chuckled sweetly.
The Princess of the Sun simply walked passed the young mare and into the vault. Sunset, with nothing else to do, followed her. The vault was fully lit, so unlike most of the time, everything inside could be seen. Celestia passed the odd artifacts that were hidden from the outside world. She did not even give them a glance. The thief was hesitant to follow so closely, but did not want to wander either.
"You were right about the mirror," Celestia said while she walked. "It's a very special mirror. It's mystical in every sense of the word and I have no idea what its purpose was or is for."
"So you just hid it in here?" Sunset asked.
"Well, yes. I used to believe it harmless, but it started to affect the ponies who looked into it. Your story about seeing yourself as an alicorn are not unlike what others or even myself have experienced. Some say it can predict the future, some say it shows one's true desire."
"What did you see?"
"My sister and I enjoying a day at the beach," she playfully rolled her eyes. "It's all quite silly if you ask me."
Sunset and the princess sat right in front of the odd mirror. There was no reflection and neither could see themselves in the glass. This made Sunset uneasy, as it was not behaving as a mirror should. There was nothing on the other side, like the glass was only a stone wall. It appeared like it was a bit coarse in the touch, but from another angle, it looked perfectly smooth as it ought to be. Sunset glanced up to see if Celestia was confused as well.
The princess was instead looking down at her. "Neither of those beliefs are true, my dear. The mirror is a portal. The stone you see in the glass is actually in another world, connected, yet separated from our own. The mirror wants us to go through it. It wants us to go beyond our own understanding. I've never trusted it, that's why I've never walked through it. I've stuck a hoof through it once or twice. It tickles."
"That sounds pretty good," Sunset nodded. "A place where I can start fresh, right?"
Celestia sighed. "I do not advise it, but you will not find resistance in me today. You and I have had enough troubles to be fighting again. I do not know what is beyond the glass, but perhaps it will help you. It may destroy you too. I would love it if you stayed. I can see us...making it passed our differences and finally forming a friendship."
"I can't," Sunset simply said. "I just can't. You caused a lot of this. I'm friendless and right now hopeless. I don't need Equestria or the ponies in it. I need to start in a place where I can be who I want to be."
Celestia looked away. "I'm truly sorry for how all this fell into place."
"That's what I thought you'd say. Sorry Celestia, but the only one who's gonna help me is myself. You can go on being the perfect ruler and all," she smiled. "Heck, maybe I'll become something great in this world. I'll do whatever it takes to get to the top. I'll be the best I can be. Yeah," she nodded with confidence. "This'll be true freedom for me. Only got my toughness and ambition. My ambitions will give true freedom."
"I hope you mean well with that ideology," Celestia still looked away.
"We'll see. Maybe I'll come back just to show you how well I've done."
Celestia forced a giggle. "Hopefully it doesn't involve magical artifacts."
"Eh, maybe."
Sunset took a step to the mirror and put her hoof on the glass. Like touching the surface of water, a ripple went through the glass in complete silence. She was taken aback by this reaction from the mirror and gulped. Her hoof was still in it and she did not make a move.
"Please make sure you want to do this," Celestia warned her.
"I think I do. No, I know I do. I have nothing here and everything there. I belong there."
She placed her whole leg in the mirror.
Celestia turned around and let her eyes be fixed on the ground. "Make some friends, alright?"
"Pfft, who needs them?" Sunset chuckled with a warm smile before throwing herself through the mirror and leaving Equestria.
"Oh, why?" Celestia sighed as sudden guilt flooded through her conscience. "No, this was her decision, not yours. Maybe we'll see her again, right?" she shook her head. "I hope so. I hope letting her go was the best decision of my life for her sake. Her life in Equestria is done. I shall leave it at this."
It's over. The princess had no strength to look back at the mirror. Sunset was gone and that was not going to change. With a soothing breath, she stood up on all fours and determinedly walked out of the vault. Before she left, she magically snuffed out any lights and left the guarded room in darkness. Without much thought, she locked the vault with the enchantments she had placed on the door. If she does come back, she'll have to knock.
"Is she gone?" Cadance, who was sitting in the hallway, asked with worry.
"Yes, she is gone. She's off on a new adventure. It will do her well," Celestia answered with a smile.
"Auntie, you don't have to keep that mirror in there. I mean, if Sunset does come back, what if she is twice as angry? What if you are the last pony she ever wants to see? I think you should get rid of it," the young princess suggested.
"Oh? Where would I stash such an item?"
"Well, maybe when I get my own place, I'll put it there. I bet I could calm her down or dissuade her from violence before you do."
Celestia put a hoof to her chin. "Perhaps. However, you getting a place of your own?" she giggled loudly. "Like that will ever happen! You are young and should not worry of such things, my dear. Come along, we a new task at hoof."
The princess perked up and boldly strode by the young mare. Cadance was perplexed by Celestia's sudden change of expression. She galloped to the old princess's side, her face still in bewilderment. She had to take twice as many steps to keep up with Celestia, and all the while, her mind tried to propose a question.
"New task? What new task?" Cadance questioned.
"I'm not sure yet myself!" Celestia chuckled. "However, I have this feeling, a strong feeling, that this is only the beginning! Sunset will do her part, we shall do ours! Come along, Cadance!"
Celestia hurried her steps. Cadance blinked for a moment and found herself far behind the other. "Wait!" she shouted.
A sparkle was in Celestia's eyes. "My dear, it is time to act! The nation of Equestria has been dormant for too long. You, Sunset, and future ponies have sparked something in me that has been just as quiet as our homeland. Cadance, I am sick of being a failure. I am sick of my hooves fighting each other. It is time that my hooves coordinate together, that I thrust myself to fulfill a single goal! Luna comes back within the decade and when she arrives, whether she is Nightmare Moon or my beloved sister, we must be ready. If I keep up my inconsistency of teaching, then we shall not be prepared."
Cadance shrugged. "Sorry, Auntie, but I don't understand."
Celestia leaned close to her niece. "We must make leaders. Ponies that can do what I wish to do, but do it better than myself. We need to make a pony into a leader that can help ponies like Sunset and others. Perhaps this pony will be the one to save her from herself. I have hope for Sunset, but that hope does not rely in her alone, but her finding somepony who can guide her out of this mess far better than I ever could."
"But Aunt Tia, how are we going to find such a pony?" Cadance asked.
The question struck her as odd, but odd because of how much a logical question it was. Where would I find such a pony? Perhaps Fate will decide that. No, must keep focused! She looked towards the floor for a moment and then stared right at her niece. What is going to happen is more important than me. I have a will, I have a determination that will not be extinguished. This is for not only me, but Sunset. Remember. Remember.
Celestia remained calm through her stammering. "I...I don't know. I...I just know that we will. Are you with me in this?"
The Princess of Love nodded slowly. "Absolutely."
Celestia smiled broadly. "That's what I needed to hear. Let us bring this pony up so that he or she can raise Sunset Shimmer from the ashes! To raise her like a phoenix!"
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So... Beautiful...
sigh...
Thank you so much, although I wish that I had cried.
7250599 Still got the epilogue left to make you cry. *pops knuckles*
"Let's do this!"
Hmmm...this felt so...easy for Sunset. I don't know, I don't know what I feel.
I mean, Sunset just got a full do-over despite all the crimes and everything she's done. And the fact that she wants to be evil...yeah...I don't know.
7250639 Well, I rather have had Celestia and Sunset speak before departing for good. Otherwise, Sunset would have had to break in and go through all that without Celestia knowing. Celestia would have won if they fought each other, as Sunset sold the amulet away in disgust and would lack the magical powers to beat the princess. I thought it would be best if they ended their relationship with at least one side being civilized.
7250652 But...Come On! Think about it! Celestia knows Sunset's true nature! She knows that Sunset will make a mess in the other world! It would make more sense that Sunset be punished for her crimes, not just let her go and have her make a ton of people miserable till Twilight comes around!
And so Sunset becomes human. I get a feeling that half the reason Sunset became a bully in Equestria girls was having to deal with Principle Celestia. That would be an interesting story, Sunset after leaving Equestria and starting over and Canterlot High and dealing with all her issues. Now onwards to the epilogues!
7250661 But think about it, if this didn't happen, would Sunset have ever had the opportunity to become redeemed? This whole story builds up to Celestia not being able force things to happen, so when she learns this, she is now in the fault once again, huh? This has never been about Sunset being punished. If that was the case, Celestia would have kept her in the dungeon since day one. Incarcerating the teenage thief was not going to change the thief, so Celestia took it upon herself to change the thief. This worked somewhat, but fell apart. Instead of forcing it some more, she decides to leave the hopeless thief to her own decisions. Punishing her now would be adding insult to injury and not helping in any way.
Sunset is a bad liar, yet if you notice, Celestia never calls her on it during their final conversation. Sunset is hurt and no longer has anyone to be with. Sunset is not the same pony as the beginning of this story. Yes, she's pretty awful, but is too broken to be awful. She wants a fresh start, but still retains some of her former self (which is the reason she goes ballistic in Equestria Girls). Sunset has never ruined a whole bunch of lives, just her sister's. She is a thief, not a manipulating fiend. If you erase all memory of Equestria Girls, Sunset seems like she'll be a loner and at worst, a bloody thief without a purpose. Until she had the Alicorn Amulet, which messes with the mind of its bearer, she only really used her fire magic for self defense. Celestia wasn't releasing a killer in the EQG world, just someone who wanted a new life.
Throughout the story, Sunset has retained a part in her that seeks to do good. She was not a complete jerk. She had to take care of Dayshine and Dayshine was a burden for her, especially since they were so young. When Celestia gave up her bed, Sunset refused to sleep in it. When Philomena stared her down, Sunset felt true guilt and kept the jacket because of that guilt. When she no longer needed the amulet, she threw it away instead of keeping it for power and wealth.
So instead of having Celestia still be a strict princess who would chase down Sunset but not get her (since Sunset DOES escape into the portal, no matter what happens since this is not an alt. universe), I rather have it that it was a part of Celestia's plan. That Celestia took advantage of the situation for Sunset's sake. Dislike it if you will, but this was the best option I could think of. I originally had it that they fought and Sunset leaped into the mirror to escape, but all it did was leave a sour taste and no sign of hope. With such a devastating end, it would be unlikely for Celestia to gain a new pupil so quickly. This ending gave for the hope she needed to continue what she believed was the right thing to do. Celestia is better (in my eyes) as a long-term schemer than a short-term fixer.
7250707 Yes! Onward! That is an interesting thought that Principle Celestia sparked some hatred within Sunset to turn her into the jerk she was in EQG. Maybe she went in with truer intentions, but they faded away.
Haven't read yet, but it's on my read later list for this coming 3 day weekend, and I plan on at least using my first day to plant my as down to actually attend to my read later and favorites folders.
And now my inner Fall Out Boy fan is playing a violin orchestra just reading the title.
7250759 Hope you enjoy it!
Personally, I was hoping that at the very ending there would be a whooshing and cracking sound and Celestia looks towards it to see magic flaring wildly out of a building [Twilight's entrance exam] and she grins, taking off for the tower.
7250798 shush
I'm not comfortable with Celestia just letting her go like that.
7250735 But that's why it would make more sense for Sunset to sneak and go through the mirror rather than let Celestia let her go. I've said in a previous comment, no main character in this story is nice to Celestia. Sunset is the biggest culprit, there hasn't been a single moment where she trusts Celestia. She's tried to manipulate her the entire time. Sunset has never wanted to be civilized about anything! She just wants power, nothing else. That's why I think it would be better and more in character for Sunset to break in and go through the mirror. She realizes she had nothing to lose and goes through it. Instead, Celestia is all like: "Oh! You've done a ton of crimes and haven't been punished and I couldn't reform you? Go thru this portal and get a new life where I, Celestia, who knows your true nature, will let you go and make people miserable for several years till I find a solution (Twilight) to stopping you."
I don't know...that's why I think it would be more logical for Sunset to just break in instead and Celestia just sits there in her mistake. Instead, you make it look like Celestia just said, "Oh Sunset, I know you're a horrible pony that I'll never reform. Go and make things worse for others in another world and I'll just have a bunch of regrets while you cause chaos!"
7250972 THANK YOU!!! I agree 100%!
No Trollestia of the mirror leading into a cell? For shame.
7251359 Sorry, but I won't change it because of you and I see your logic, because you have none, you have only hindsight. You also are exaggerating Sunset's behavior as I have proved you wrong in that, but you only ignore it.
There's only two main characters. That's Sunset and Celestia. I showed you that there are other characters who have been nice to her. You act like that world hates her, but in fact, it's only two. Dayshine doesn't trust her with healing, Wing Beat has a valid grudge, and Sunset is the mean one. Those three, of which two don't like Celestia, come from the same "family." This is about her interaction with that "family" though mostly just Sunset. You act like no one likes her, but think of how many characters are shown in the story. Do a need a hundred more? Cadance, raven, and Shining Armor are there to show Celestia's allies. Yes, they aren't in there for long, but Wing Beat isn't either nor Dayshine. Cause it's NOT about them.
She just wants power, nothing else.
Once again, you are saying things I've disproved. If she wanted power, why did she sell the Alicorn Amulet? Was it so important to her that she instantly got rid of it once her promise was broken? Did you even read this story?
And what kind of ending is that? Once again, you have hindsight, not logic. I'm taking advantage of this scene to express hope, you want it to be hopeless. You'd be here yapping about how the vault was never guarded and how the palace guards suck (which they do). I do not agree with you in the slightest. You want to be predictable. You want to take the easy route. Having that kind of ending would not satisfy my goal.
I'm alright with you not liking it, but I am not alright with you using false evidence for your reasons. All your evidence is founded in Equestria Girls, not this story. You also the heavily disproved logic that prison reforms all criminals. You want to see her be punished, yet she lost all her "family" and she has to live with the guilt of not saving her sister in time. Is that not punishment? And didn't Celestia say and have a strong feeling (remember, Celestia can predict some things in the future or have almost an omnipotent air) that she was not going to be the one to reform her?
With any ending I chose, it was not going to be received by all as good. That's because Sunset leaving through a mysterious portal is not a good ending period, but it must be the ending to follow the canon story line.
7251419 Maybe another time
7251432 But it is in character for Sunset to do that though! She's been bad this entire time and you've shown that if she has an opportunity she can take, she will take it! I never said Celestia was supposed to reform her, I said Celestia is making a bad decision and this story portrays Celestia being very competent.
And Sunset breaking and entering to go into the mirror is in character for this story. Remember, she's a bad character in this and she would do something like that. When you had them have their meeting in this latest chapter, you made it look like Sunset would be paranoid about going in the mirror. The entire story has been Sunset rejecting Celestia, both in talking with her and her actions.
7251432 No it doesn't she could have broken in and went through it. Celestia could have pleaded her not to go but Sunset is too fast and to determined.
it doesn't work very well especially in canon Celestia kept hoping that Sunset would return and asked Twilight about her.
Wait wait Epilogs as in plural... Ooh yay
Second what about her jacket , does the jacket not go through the portal as well. And a proper hinting at twilight would have been nice but I also kinda like the Xavier school for gifted youngster feel that you left it with . By the way was that a nod in there or am I just reading from my background in comic books?
All in all 5 spikes out of 5 spikes
Great ending.
7251952 Well, Celestia school is very Xavier like itself. So, yes, it's a tad of a reference, but I would give that reference more to the show than myself.
Yes, epilogues, but they shall be in the same chapter divided by a horizontal rule. Why? Because I cannot count more than 20.
I don't want to be rude, but in the movie, it felt like Celestia tried to stop Sunset, and that she went through the mirror while emotionally distraught. Still I look forward to the epilogue. Do you think Sunset became an alicorn at the end of the fourth movie?
7252739 No, I do not. If she did, then she did, but until I'm shown absolute evidence, I'll say she didn't.
Don't worry, I know about that bit. I'll try my best to tie things together.
Wow, why am I getting a happy vibe in that ending and why do I feel like there is going to to be a short scene like after the credits in movies where sunset appear and it will show her what is she doing and there is a scene that will end in her smiling and holding something of importance.
7253184 Well, it is supposed to be a more hopeful ending. So that happy feeling is good.
Well, the epilogues will focus on Celestia a bit more rhan Sunset. So the scene you are describing is not really gonna happen. Since we all know what happens in EQG, I'm leaving it alone. So don't expect any human scenes.
7253242 Well a scene of Celestia discovering Twily will replace sunset in that smiling part while holding a book of starswirl might be expected.
Anyway... are you planning on adding more chapters on Equestria girls: Racer ?
7253261 Well, you'll see.
Yes. When this is done, Harmony's Creed Brotherhood and Racer will be on the main priority list.
7250661 Oh yes, Sunset is guilty of multiple crimes in Equestria and will go on to make a whole bunch of people miserable on the other side of the mirror ... but what is Celestia to do? She thinks Sunny is a bad liar, so she'll believe Sunset's claim that she wants a fresh start. As for punishing Sunset, if the Equestrian legal system works anything like the U.S., the whole "all evidence of the crimes is concealed by the government" and "illegal incarceration for weeks" things would mean that no charges could be levied against Sunset unless Celestia played the "I'm the Princess" card. And while that would get Sunset punished, it would not reform her, since it would only show Sunset that power is all that counts.
So in the end, Celestia just uses her absolute authority to grant Sunset a pardon, just like she used the same authority to ignore and violate the laws of Equestria when she imprisoned Sunset as her "student". Is it right? Well obviously that is subject to debate (and I'm not 100% sold on it myself), but it does allow for the spark of hope that Gapeagle was trying for ...
7250745 Heh, Sunset finally escapes from under Princess Celestia's hoof ... only to find herself under Principal Celestia's thumb. That had to rankle some ...
Now that I think about it, the Sunset in her first "crowning" picture looks a lot more open and friendly than in any of the others (pretty much like post-Friendship cannon Sunset, actually) ... so was she just that good at manipulation and deceit and latter she stopped bothering, or did she really attempt a fresh start and it all went wrong?
7253942 Thank you, mate. Glad ya not wielding pitchforks for Sunset's punishment.
In the Equestria Girls comic, Sunset was a spoiled brat from the beginning to the end. It makes you wonder why Celestia picked her as a student when they shared no chemistry. I tried to go a different route. The comic Sunset had power as her goal before she even crossed over. I, at least, am trying to show that power was not her sole reason, but grew to be that when she started to manipulate the school.
Every use of the "passed" word in this chapter is incorrect. You should have used "past".
You don't walk passed people, you walk past them.
But apart from that, a lovely chapter. Finally some good introspection for Celestia.
Also, that ending sentence. Title drop!
Why does this story has gone so downhill for me. I don't know why it just does. I mean no insult to you as a writer of course. But ever since the climax. I've been invested less and less.