She had worked her hooves to the bone making the orders that Sassy had been stockpiling to ensure her boutique success. She had been slaving over a sewing machine and her many fabrics for days on end, and what does she have to show for it? More work.
Snapping in a fit of rage, Rarity turns down the additional hundred orders for the Princess Dress, and declares that she's shutting down production and going into a closing-down sale. But just before she leaves to prepare, Sassy Saddles explains the tough past that she had to bear when working with other fashion ponies.
This is my entry for the Writer's Training Grounds for Canterlot Boutique
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Nice.
This seems a little bare for what l've read from you, but good job nonetheless
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I have to second the "little bare" part- my initial feeling was that this was just a recap of the middle/end of the episode.
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6429256 I know it might just seem like an extended recap, but this is something new that I'm trying out. Some other bronies wrote stories where the portal seals itself off in IAEBB before the Main Six can get back through it. And though I haven't read those stories, I think they would have done the same thing...
Sassy referred to Rarity as her "worker". Rarity isn't her worker, she's her boss.
6430120 Thank you for letting me know. I guess the sweatshop elements in the episode made me forget about that...
But I just swept through the story myself, and I can't seem to find that anywhere...
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It's in the first paragraph of the last part of the story.
I think that's a major thing. Sassy just forgot her place, she started treating Rarity as her worker while Rarity is actually her boss.
I really like the story. It feels like it completely belongs in the episode.
6430389 Thank you again. It's all fixed now.
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Maybe it would be even better if she actually did call Rarity her worker but then corrects herself.
I think Sassy did see Rarity as her worker instead of her boss when she was so drawn into it's success.
"The Princess Dress was fine to begin with, but now it has overstayed its welcome, and is a constant reminder that Canterlot will lose every sense of majesty that it once had with all of the mares wearing the exact same thing,"
Starlight Glimmer, "What's wrong with that?"
Also, selling just one dress? No matter how popular? It'll eventually bubble, them burst, and they'll be left with stock they can't sell!
and tossed them into the trash without qualm or remorse.
Doesn't she realize now that she's no longer producing that dress, they're now COLLECTOR'S ITEMS.
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Beavernator made a comic about that. By selling them for eight times the price afterwards, sne was able to make the boutique out of solid gold.
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Read it already, but thanks dude.
You know, I was actually thinking about writing a story exactly like this with the same plot. But this story is so good that I'm not going to complain at all.
Amazing job!
Really nice and well written.