• Member Since 7th May, 2012
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ChaoticHarmony


Hey guys! I write sadfics and sadfic accessories! Oh, and I also do comedy things. Yeah. Feel free to check out my stuff! And I hope you enjoy whichever story of mine you happen to be on! ^^

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Cloud and Sky Slicer were something of a novelty among pegasi, being twins was something very uncommon in the race of the winged ponies. They ate, slept, and worked together. When one wanted to be a soldier, the other one did as well. So, when the dream was forged to become a part of the legendary War Wings, the Ruler's personal force of elite pegasi soldiers, they both pursued their dream with a passion.

When tragedy strikes during the Flashing Metal show, a place where young pegasi can go and show off their skills as fighters, Cloud is forced to go on a journey to exact his revenge.

Special thanks to F4celess for the AMAZING cover art! You rock man!
http://f4celessshopps.deviantart.com/ <---Link to his DA

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 10 )

I may want to do some cover art for this...

Very well done. I especially like that you show, not tell, when Sky asks if the blades are dulled.

cant wait for the next chapter when is it?

680777 Tomorrow. I update daily, alternating between my other story "Dashed Hopes" each day. This chapter will be tomorrow though. If I get motivated, I'll write it tonight

Sorry about the constant publish/unpublish.... just couldn't decide if I wanted this chapter out yet.. but I figured, "eh what the hay, let's see how well it does first"

wow thats sad :fluttershbad: cant wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

I very much like this. I especially like the warriors farewell that the war wings and Cloud gave Sky.

This was very well written, but I did notice a few spots that bothered me. For example, you said that he all owed the grief to pour out of himself. "of himself" is redundant, because you just staed that he was crying. As you can see, I only noticed tiny problems.

However, unlike the analogy, this story will not die, but be reborn from the ashes.
Like a phoenix?\
Also, just take a break man, who've been stressing yourself too much. You've been writing like some sadistic madman since day one! You-need-a-break!

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