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So here it is, a brand new story! Once again featuring a changeling Infiltrator.
I'm getting to do some new stuff, though. I've got a female protagonist, which is something I've been wanting to do for a while now. It's first-person, which is a bit of a first for me, though it almost wasn't; Without a Hive would have probably been done in first-person if it wasn't leading into a mutual sequel with Fragments. I'm also tweaking my portrayal of changelings in various ways. For example, Whisper is female, and her ability to sense emotions is more specific, among other possible changes.
And of course, the setting, with all the good and ill it brings. Action, adventure, creepy decaying ruins of the old world; Whisper is going to have a difficult time ahead of her.
Though I'd like to note, I don't intend to make this some long chain of suffering and misfortune for her. She will likely have a hard time of things--this is the Wasteland, after all!--but it's not going to be some unrelenting train-wreck of misery. Her situation may look bleak, but I can promise there will be good to go with the bad.
So far, I'm having a lot of fun writing this. The setting, the situation, all of it. It's interesting writing a character that's very good at dealing with stressful and possibly life-and-death situation, without being a good fighter. Hopefully Whisper can put those good wordy Infiltrator skills to good use!
So, welcome to The Chrysalis. I've got a lot planned for this. I hope you enjoy the ride.
I'm all for a FoE fic where there is no never ending train of pain and misfortune. Project: Harmony is driving me up the wall with that insanity... though I'm addicted to it.
I'll fav this and see where you spin this yarn!
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Oooh, a FO:E story from you? Nifty!
[edit] You need better contrast on your title pic, though. You can barely see there is a title, on the thumbnail.
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Oh, I got a pretty mild one, too, if you're interested. Adventure and comedy, heck, bordering on Slice of Life, with a side order of ancient dug up sads.
This is so fucking good...!
6606682 If you want real heartbreak, Hit up Murky #7. I'm waiting to eventually tackle that 50k word chapter.. someday. Horizons never clicked from the author, or the story. I loved FoE, and many of the lighter or darker ones its inspired. But, that one struck me wrong.
6606863 Well, I really do think it is waaaay darker than the orginal FOE. However, I hated how it ended. I'm hoping all the dark crap in Horizons eventually has a happy ending, or I think I shall be displeased with it in the end. I like the story, there are some parts of it I find darker than it needs to be.
6606871 There's a good way to do dark. But it goes Pitch black for the dark. I love murky for being where its situated, especially since its aimed at the fallout 3 expansion of The Pit. And it delivers that kind of bleak, and yet the moments of brightness are glorious too. And it's, well, ive had to set it down and read something nice and fluffy after a few chapters. But murky is like a 1-99 prize fighter thats made it to the champs, it doesn't matter who you are, you keep rooting for him to win. It's just one of those stories you process very very slowly.
Anyhow, this goes into the insta-faves. I know you do well with changelings, and that you are doubling down with foe. Good luck with writing this!
Heck of an ending on this chapter. Bravo. Just bravo.
Man, this is long. May take me a while, busy day.
I was afraid to no get more of your high quality lings, but you are doing it again, and in a perfect fallout story,no less
I am eager to read more :)
Oh shit. Liked and faved.
Well, at this point, it probably wouldn't really matter if she just downright said she had been following them for a while but was unsure how to introduce herself, given their well-armed state and her complete lack of arms.
What'd I say? Lacking an entire world of backstory
Heehee. Sunshine and rainbows, all right
Wait. Maybe it were the Sonic Rainboom shockwaves that actually caused the failures that woke her up?
...well. More likely it was the crashed whatever outside the door, actually
She's a smooooth playah!
Ahh. The Giggle State of Exhaustion. I'm familiar with that.
Heh. Headwear
Sneaky!
Ohey. The quiet one likes her
Offer to share! You know you wanna!
Hah!
No, really? What gave it away?
"'Scuse me, lady? This is a two-person nuzzle."
Littlepip, get yo rear in gear, girl! You got weather to manage
On a related note, a little-realized fact is that the destruction of the cloud cover was most likely accompanied by a rain of cloud-grown crops all falling down to the wasteland. The Day of Cabbage and Carrots Rain!
Romantic! Together in the rain!
I ship it. Dun care she's a love sucking bug. I ship it.
Oh! Well now. That means one of the towers malfunctioned and blew up from the stress of the Sonic Rainboom?
Welp. There goes that ship. Thoroughly sunk.
Oh-kay. This has gone officially tits-up
Hah! Her cattle.
Welcome to the Wasteland! Here's your complimentary t-shirt. It may be made of pony hide. I dunno. I just took it off that dead raider over there.
Well. Yikes
Remarks and corrections:
> I figure having one piece with a bit more range and punch should compliment that nicely, don’t you?
"compl[e]ment".
> I wanted to just lay there for a while
"just [lie] there"
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That awkward moment when the strange new pony starts drooling over your moment of affection with your partner...
Oh dear.
Yeah, I sunk that one deeper than the Titanic. Sorry.
Eeeyup. It's been an all-around wonderful day, hasn't it?
Oh yeah, another thing I love about English. Words that sound the same but mean something different, so I occasionally screw up and write the wrong one. Almost as good as words that are spelled the same, but sound different. Freaking Homage...
How do I keep doing this...
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To be fair, I actually had to look up the laid/lain one in the previous chapter. I knew "laid" wasn't correct, but I had no clue what the right one was
Really good story, this is the first fallout equestria side fic i've read and you didn't disappoint. It'll be really interesting to see where this goes.
Holy shit. That got intense quickly. I had been worried that I was setting my expectations too high for a story I hadn't read anything of yet, but this instead exceeded my expectations rather decisively. I'm really looking forward to what comes next!
I suppose she must be related to Frosty Winds.
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Heh, I forgot about her! Although given her history with changelings and general danger to everyone around her, Whisper may want to stay well away!
I haven't read an FO:E story in like, a year and a half. And i believe I'm going to enjoy this one.
...certainly more than Whisper is enjoying her day
6614909 your comment reminds me, I have got be so far behind in Project Hotizons by now.
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I've read about half of it. I'm currently waiting for the Fimfic version to complete uploading so I can read it as an .epub on my phone.
6616681 i believe i was around chapter 45 or so, but couldn't tell you what was going on.
I just startdd reading this one and it's already have me hooked.
Them feels at the end.
Cya
Raziel-chan
The Sole Survivor and laser-muskets, too!
Fallout: Equestria was Fallout 3.
Project Horizons was New Vegas.
Will this draw primarily from Fallout 4?
I hope Starlight isn't conscious of this. She could be a friend as well as an ally.
6606356 Thank you
Damn......
I feel ya.
I read just a few sentences and look back to see its only been a minute, but I could swear I'd been listening to her babbel for ten.
I don't know why, but the idea of leasing that mare just really, really appeals to me.
I get the idea she would start acting like a pet just to embarrassing me during, then joke about it being fun after the fact...
...or she would joke about never wanting to do that again, and possibly killing you the next time you tried.
Oh cmon man, it's fucking soup!
Wow...talk about intense.
that escalated very quickly.
although I was not expecting the entire new crew to just get wiped out from the start...except Starlight.
I already like her. She was the youngest and nicest, with a curious personality and generic antiquity.
But..damn. she just lost all her freinds.
I guess there will be no leash jokes in the future yhen, huh?
That, was one hell of a chapter. FUCKED up, but AWESOME! Xd
I think you're trying to convince everybody way too hard that this character isn't like common changelings that "hate" ponies. I think saving a pony speaks louder for that than whatever words of "hate" of Chrysalis.
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It's kind of a bit more than just that. It's not just establishing what she and her hive was like. It's also establishing that there are changelings that aren't so nice, and setting up some important details for later in the story...
It's been two whole chapters and I haven't yet seen hide nor hint of the adorable-icorn that I was told was here. I want my money back! What? This is free? Well... Um... I want my imaginary not-money back, then!
Ah, The Wasteland. Where Stallions are dicks, Mares are bitches, and Raiders eat them both.*
*I've never actually played any Fallout game, so who knows if I know what I'm talking about.
Ooouch...a rough start. Then again, finding everything possible about everything you knew is bound to be painful...let's hope it's not more fatal than it already is for Whisper.
Wait... how lazy can those wastelanders be! Spoons are like one of the easiest things to whittle, heck even I can do it! I mean you can even form a spoon out of a tincan, so every small piece of scrap metal can be made into a spoon if you lack some wood. Time not spent on some kind of handiwork around the campfire is time wasted, so if you ain't fixing your old gear can you at least make something new... Yea sorry for rant, you will get used to me ranting about the smallest things when I find a story that I approve of, having nothing better to rant about. I have read "Ascendance of a Bookworm" which have given me a whole new view on "spare time"
Some of you, so she is speaking multiple people at once, I would guess a second generation of changelings, her telling the story behind how she saved them all, but time will tell if I am right or wrong.
I really dig the vampire vibes I am getting from this, too many stories have changelings being sweet little love bugs that find a single friend and are warm and fuzzzy and what not, and most changeling plots that I have seen in FoE have ended out in the most tropy trope of "You are not the one I thought you were, you lied to me!". Sure I bet that we will also get some of that here, I mean it is a trope and a cliche after all, but I am still expecting quite a twist to it, I mean there are actually a reason for someone to mistrust a vampire instead of a shapeshifter.
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Heh, no worries there, I like picking over the little details.
As for spoons, it was mainly to highlight the difference. To Whisper, spoons are a normal every-day thing that's always there. To these ponies, it's not really something necessary, since their travelling food was something they could just drink from a bowl (Though they did probably have a serving spoon to portion it out). Because yeah, like you said, if they felt like they needed spoons, they'd make spoons.
Oh, definitely! I mean, shapeshifting is like the coolest super-power. Sure, they both involve keeping something secret, but, well... the secret that was being kept is kiiinda different.
You find out that your companion can change shape? "Holy crap, that's awesome!"
You find out that your companion has been literally feeding on you? "Dude, what the fuck."
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You know, you never actually fixed the lay/lie stuff...
There's another one of those in there, btw.
> I wanted to just lay there for a while
"just [lie] there"
> still laying beside me
still [lying] beside me
She should have taken an improv class before the megaspells