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Brohoof yall. And just so you know i believe in aliens,im patriotic, and i love the f-15e.

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during a war between an alien race with a goal of taking all of earths water and during operation hammer head, a U.S battalion gets transported to equestria during urban fighting, in poor condition.
And somehow, some of the alien soldiers get transported to equestria as well. And this very well means that equestrian peace will come to a halt until its all over. (takes place after the final battle of Los Angeles)

Cancelled until further notice, ill see what i can do to keep this story alive.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 39 )

Okay. This is not an official review but I have a problem with your 'Battalion'.

On the first chapter, it had said "500 Men already Died"... So how many soldiers are in your battalion? It's just a question, because a battalion (According to Dictionary and in my own terms) Considers on 300-800 Soldiers. You just lost 500. So is there 300 left?

TeddTheBear....Ok i see were you saw that and thanks for clearing up the amount thats supposed to be in a battalion....but the number i had was 2000 troops then 500 lost their lives with the other 50 wounded.....but 500 out of 2000 would leave 1,550 with the wounded included....then the other 500 along with the wounded got telleported and left one thousand....hopefully that sums it up but if you want me to fix it ill be happy to....but really i see were you got mixed up and again thanks for the info:twilightsmile:

TeddyTheBear....replied to your comment....accidently spelled your name wrong sorry

Halt. Do not write again, do not pass go, do not collect 200 upvotes. Go directly to the autism corner.

All thanks to a group of Marines, Now a battalion of the United States Army infantry of about two thousand strong, a division of thirty Abrams tanks, twenty aav's borrowed from the Marines, ten supply trucks, and five squadrons of A-10 Warthogs containing ten each, loaded with J-Dam bombs.

You really should learn the organization system. This is way off. A battalion of any branch or military is never at 2,000; maybe 1,000 if you push it and make some circumstances. At the same time, an armored division would have way more than just 30 tanks. It's got over 10,000 men and well over 100 tanks and other vehicles. Straighten these necessities out first.

No but seriously. Stop this, it is painfully bad, you've just shit on a keyboard and posted it. Let me begin to list to you some reasons as to why you should stop. Firstly you're doing a military story without knowing anything about the military or doing any research, that's a big no no. You don't do a story about fucking science without knowing anything about science. Do some fucking research and have just an ounce of common sense here. Secondly, the grammar is horrible make it stop. What is your aversion to question marks? See? They're great, use them. Better yet just stop writing, or if you must continue get an editor, if you want I can try and un-fuck this pile of shit. Thirdly, the story and structure is the blandest most cut and dry copy paste bullshit I've ever fucking seen. "Aliens invade, humans fight aliens, humans sent to equestria, aliens there too, humans save equestria". Stop. Use your brain, I know you've got one. Also a SMAW, five rockets an AT-4 plus his rifle and ammunition? Who the fuck is this engineer? God himself? His spine would snap. That's all for now but there is much more. Un-fuck yourself.

CosmonautPony....I really don't give a fricken crape what you think I should do with my story...you have no controlled over it and if you don't like it f@#k off and don't read my stories...and in your words you should be the one to quote on quote go un-fuck yourself cause you to cut me some slack...I'm just starting out on this website and I want to write my stories however I want to and be able to do it without ricks such as you to tell me to stop my stories and if you don't like the grammer then shut up and find another story to read...plus no one is supposed to be the best at using correct grammer and for Pete sake give the story a chance to develops and see were it goes and don't just sit there and simply judge the story from were the chapter started at. Oh and yes I did research you fraqer...besides you never know what can change and for your information I do know things about the military so don't go assuming like a idiot would....and obviously you probably didn't read the authors note cause it said what type criticism wold be appreciated was basically go easy on it....besides I might not want an editor and if I did I really wouldn't want him/her to fix my story cause it'll give him a head ache. I rather have that editor tell me what they think of the chapter so far and what needs to be fixed and tweeked....

Eagle..some one else pointed that out in the comments and I explained it to him...plus if you read the part talking about the turning point in the war and the discription saying takes place after the battle of low angeles you would have saw what I was trying to do with the setting and placement of the events. Also for the battalion things can change unexpectedly and can have new results...but if you seen the movie battle la, as it turns out they U.S military deployed a pretty good bit of tanks and other armoured vehicles so I got an idea of having a story that has the remaining forces along with remaining vehicles to hit the final enemy position and then win the war....but thx for the info about the battalion and the numbers along with the vehicles...preciate it:twilightsmile:
Oh and the convoy in the third chapter...I spent a good ten to fifteen minutes making up a convoy that had the remaining telleported forces to work out, if your confused by it I can message ya the plan I drawn up..
alright you have a nice day and again thx for the insight.

i truly hope you start your story soon it is getting real interesting, to see. the ponies reaction! almost reminds me of the book team yankee, congrats on this take of of a story line. very interesting!

p61blkwidow...thx man, i aslo didnt realize that. Besides i look at stories to get my ideas from, i dont steal them i gain them from reading, basicaly not a rip off just inspiration from others, plus thx for faving my story. this tells me im doing something right...alright have fun:twilightsmile:

I feel like you took the guns from Battlefield 4

Someone else might want to adopt these stories. You might want to ask about that if you're okay with handing it over to someone else.

Eon333Ms...i might do that, ill give it a week until i delete the story.

Aw man i was really hoping you would continue this story :fluttercry:

Chri330v...im sorry man, i couldnt come up with anything for the next chapter, but thx for the fav.
although i may wright another story, maybe.

6851879 Ok but please dont delete this story it's short but it's a great story.

Nice to see that your up and about and that this story is back on track :twilightsmile:

Chri330v...thx, it's great to be back.

yeah you areback! thank you for continuing the story, like i said befor it so reminds me of team yankee.this is going to be o good!! it is going to be well worth the wait for the next chapter! once again thanks for the story!!

p61blkwidow....thx man. Just a little insight. More military tech will be added throughout the story. I already got some ideas up. Have fun.

Wait 15 A-10 Warthogs, five C-17s, twenty F-22 Raptors and twenty F-15s thats not fiftyfour thats sixty!
PS. Cant wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

Chri330v...woops, counted wrong. Thx man... and ill try to get the next chapter out as soon as possible.

Not to rush you or anything but when is the next chapter coming out?

Chri330v....ill probably start this weekend. And might have it done after a day or two, i dont really know. But ill get there.

7014772 When you want to reply to someone's text you click/tap the >> at the right of the text box. Otherwise we wouldn't know if they had been replied to.

Comment posted by Admiral_Gravleos deleted Mar 16th, 2016

Dude when is the next chapter coming out? No rushing

7038148 right now it's a work in progress. But it will be a slow process sadly. I got things to do. School and stuff. Plus im still thinking about where im throwing my setting direction of the story. But be patient. Oh and thanks for the watch.:twilightsmile:

Im sorry but as someone in the armed forces and a understanding of it I honestly cant read this. I appreciate the attempt at a story but this is just so overwhelmingly inaccurate

6435659 yeah it is vary clear he didnt do any research into this, its impossible for me to read

7336562
I've seen worse honestly. What branch are you in BTW?

7336555 Thank you for your service! Salutations sir!!

I like it so far . It's good , You could use a Spell check thou .,but I give you a thumbs up .
:twilightsmile:

I take it this is based on Battle: LA?

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