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I am an aspiring writer, romance enthusiast, and a horrible over emotional mess. If you're here I hope you like homosexual stallions. If you enjoy my work and want to support me I have a Ko-Fi!



After reluctantly agreeing to come to Twilight's second official slumber party, Rainbow Dash finds herself trotting off just managing to keep her lunch down as all of her friends begin to discuss beauty tips and overly mushy-gushy feelings on colts. There she finds sompony (Or more correctly, some dragon) who shares more in common with her than thought.

Shippy-ish, only romance if you want there to be.

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Comments ( 76 )

imma read it now, expect another comment in about 5 minutes


Don't expect romance, yet there is a romance tag. :derpytongue2:

EDIT: I read the notes at the beginning of the chapter, I see naow.

Awesome story! Me gives a thumbs up!

i have to say i never thought of spike and rainbow dash but id like to see more

RDxSpike ShipFic?



I havent finish yet , but , woooow this its really good :D !! i didnt expect somethin like da !! great chap !! :twilightsmile:

I wish there was romance.
Please... my friend. Continue! RainbowSpike!

Make a new chapter, even though it says complete. And I will be happy. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Spike_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png

Posting at 5:34 A.M. You must be a nerd, welcome to the club. Computer are to your left, right, and center. They are Mac, PC, and Linux respectively. Upstairs there is a lounge if you would like to use your own labtop, down the hall there is the men's bathroom. Opposite that there is a store for all your gaming needs, thing such as: headphones, mice, and microphones are all for sale.

Full of cuteness and win. :heart:

658669 I'm going to just assume this is spam.

658804 Well, I posted it around one, it just took several hours to get approved.

Awww. This is so delightfully adorable. Really it's almost just too cute, although I have to admit that I never even considered Spike and Rainbow even as good friends so this was new and entertaining.

All in all, I greatly enjoyed reading this. Kudos. :moustache:

I've always loved Spike and Rainbow Dash interaction — be it friendshipping, romantic shipping, or just simple interaction. I don't know why I find it so appealing, though it probably stems from the fact that Spike is the guy of the group and Rainbow is quite tomboyish.

Great job here. It was short and simple, but sweet and entertaining. Keep up the good work :ajsmug:

D'aww. Dashie fangirling is always adorable.

The entire fic just... works. Spike being a wonderbolts fan kinda makes sense if ya think about it and one gathers that Dashie wouldn't be able to talk about them to anyone. Or at least anyone who cares, so it also makes sense she'd be excited about meeting a fellow fan.

Ya wouldn't happen to be continuing this would ya mate?

There were a couple spelling mistakes, and you seem to confuse "their" and "they're" a lot. It was a cute story, with a good plot, and you earned my upvote, but you may want to proofread more in the future.

659351 (Written at one A.M in the morning)

Very nice! They got a bit cuddly near the end, but' eh. Still the first Dash & Spike piece I've ever seen. Good stuff!


I like it some people try to do storys with friendshipping and end up making a romance but you did a good job with friendshipping.


You are really a genius. You really should write a proper full length novel. I mean normal, original story and characters. And publish it for money in proper way, through the publishing company. You should go professional in my opinion.

659636 That's my plan, fanfiction is just practice for me. :pinkiehappy:

Awersome. Just let us know when your first book will be released. I would buy it right away. Only problem would be shipping(that sounds bad...), 'cause I live outside US. Wait... That is why Amazon exist. I know that it wouldn't be soon, but I'm already waiting.

Not sure if want...

659898 Just read it and get it over with.


"And you don't like to talk about colts?" Spike inquired, cocking up his brow as he looked at the pegasus sitting next to him. "Is it because you're a..."
"Don't say it..." Rainbow Dash grumbled, rolling her eyes "The jokes getting old."

This along with a lot of other lines made me laugh, kept me smiling throughout the story, and also earned a strange look at me from my parents, haha. Cute story, I'll definitely be seeing this relationship in a new light. Nice job.

This is very nicely done. It kind of reminds me of the fic Eros Dreaming--where you get a pairing (even though this isn't necessarily a ship) that you wouldn't normally think of working, but in the end, it turns out great. Keep up the good work. :twilightsmile:

MORE RAINBOWSPIKE FAVED :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:


WOAH! Back the fuck up!

But seriously, this was an okay fic, just not great.

661503 I put much less effort into OneShots than Full Length fics. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Spike_lolface.png

Straight dash noooo impossibru

Thank you for writing this. I like how people can read this two ways. There are not enough fics. with Spike interacting with the other that are not Twilight and Rarity.

Pretty good story. At first I thought it was going to be romantic, and I'm not fond of Spike ships due to his age, but I then realized it was a friendshipping story, and not a bad one at all. Good job with this. I always thought the two would make pretty good friends.

I'm sorry for not commenting when I clicked on the favorite button at first; it was rude. Now, back to the review.

First off, I have to say as a standard format, this is a well done piece of work. Proves to people that you don't need epic adventures and the reinforcement of memes and cheap humor to get off on the start. The portrayal of Rainbow Dash as a previous loner as well as Spike's was simple enough to focus on without any distractions. While "simple" might come off as a derogatory term to some writers, in this context, it's praise. A lot of writers right convoluted mini-stories in paragraphs to expose tidbits of a character's past without any prior notice or indication. I'm happy that you did not veer from the emotional point of view of Rainbow Dash and jump into a 300-word construction block of "She was a loner because back in high school... etc" as is evident on so many writer's tales, and what I feel, is executed very poorly.

The length is just nice for a slice-of-life piece. Not too long and not too short, and I praise you for indented paragraphs (Although the spacing I could really have done without, but that's a personal preference). The shipping hints aren't fully there, but this is slice-of-life, so we can let that slide. I'd focus on you writing multi-chapter (No more than 10-15, though) stories to improve on your skills, or rather, increase your repertoire, because from what I see here, although not perfect, you have a solid base on all accounts on story-telling. If you'd like to improve, I'd attempt a story of considerable length to see just where your weaknesses lie, or if not there at all, could be used to springboard yourself as a great writer.

Once again, good job and good luck.

thank you for making this story:scootangel: i finaly got rid of my writing block:rainbowkiss:
(by the way:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: imma make le story 4 le u:trollestia:)

"So Fluttershy, what kinds 'er colts are ya' inta!" Applejack said.

First off, that's a question, not a statement. Don't really like when you make Applejack's accent so overly pronounced. Where she says "I" change it to "Ah" and maybe a couple other things here and there (think less, not more), but we're not talking about a speech impediment, it's just an accent. Between the way it's written and the incorrect indication ("said" does not follow a question, it follows a statement), I had to read that line three times to figure out what the hell it was attempting to say.

Not the only issue I saw, just the first one that annoyed me enough to make me comment on it.


It's early, so you don't want me to point out errors so they can be more easily fixed later? :rainbowhuh: 'Kay.

682378 No, that was when it was WRITTEN!


I... see. And this is somehow stopping you from fixing it up now. Or later, for that matter.

... 'Kay.

682394 The story is done, and it may not ever be continued, so why bother when I have other projects?


Pride in yourself? Pride in your writing? The desire to put forth your best, to do your best, to showcase your best? You wrote a story and deemed it good enough to post. A reviewer points out a few errors and you ignore them because the story's done? Well, the story was done when I came upon it. If the author doesn't care enough about the story to give a damn about polishing it to a real shine, why should I even bother to read it? Authorial modesty aside, if you can't be bothered tweak your work where necessary--regardless of its current level of completion--how can you honestly expect others to read and review?

If you cannot even muster the effort to have pride enough in your own story to make it as close to perfect as it can get, that tells me you don't think it's actually good enough to bother with. It tells me that this story is clearly not something I should be bothered with either, because even the author doesn't think it's worth a modicum of time or effort.

Yeah, adorable. Rainbow Dash being enthusiastic about things is always cute for some reason.
Add some snuggling and you've got yourself a bonafide cute story right there.
I liked it.

Omg. Please write a full-ship sequel? :pinkiehappy:

This need a sequal! A fantastic small one-shot fic that leaves me wanting for more and to know if it is just friendship or if there will ever be romance!
I enjoyed this story to the very end and will without hesitation read the sequal if there is ever going to be one. :pinkiehappy:

659522 I was laughing so hard after I saw this...and THIS is golden did author, I'm a really big fan of Spike/Rainbow Dash, you did perfect, I'm hoping to see a romance about the two soon if you wish, I'll be tracking even though I think this is done....perfect job!

659617 I agree with that statement completely. :pinkiehappy::yay::raritywink::raritystarry::twilightsmile::derpytongue2::ajsmug:

"There is only a romance tag because there are mild hints, ignore it."
:facehoof: Don't tag it romance then. Came here because it showed up in my search for stories with Romance.

are you sure that this is complete?

That was pretty nice, I can't help but think about Persona 4 and the Social Links though. Maybe Rainbow should try to get the girls about recent events more. ^^;

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