• Member Since 9th Jul, 2015
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Child of chaos


Hey I'm here making story for you guy so please without nothing more here u go

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Being this world guardian for so long it was alright it had it down falls it had it perks, but being betrayed now that was a slap in the face. I am now in crystal frozen waiting to be release. But open my eye to not him but his daughter Celestial begging for my help against Triek and king Sambra, So I must help protect this land once more. Here come the a guardian

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 21 )

Just gotta ask is English your 2nd or 3rd language?

well lets see where it goes its not bad so far

I want to read more and want to see where the story goes.

Thank you for this I will start writing as soon as possible

This is pretty good, but you need an editor. More? Also longer chapters? Please?:fluttershysad:

6442222 I know this truly I do but it is hard I'm still new at this and don't worry i will hopefully by the end of this week will have a new longer chapter thank you for reading my story

this good story, can't wait till next chapter:twilightsmile:

I like it so far. Please keep this going.

Do you have an editor because I am not trying to be mean but the grammar is really bad. Good story though.

Yeah a lot of incorrect Plural/not plural and past/present/future tense

Commas save lives.

Let's eat grandma! Vs Let's eat, grandma.

Uhh.... What?.... The grammar went downhill fast... No offense meant

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Do you know how to edit or anyone that can check my writing for me?
It will be a big help.

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I don't personally. But there are groups that you can put this in to get an editor.

Grammarly is needed for this

It's a good story but it need to be edited badly

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thanks for enjoying this story im planing on getting back into the series so hopefully it will be out soon

This is actually a really good story, the only issue is the poor english of the earlier chapters. Im guessing the Author speaks english as a second language. If someone offered to help him clean up the english, this would be fantastic.

The Monk
“Come into my parlor, Ted. I have cookies!” -Reykan

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Do you know how to edit or anyone that can check my writing for me?
It will be a big help.

I used to do editing, mainly for some of our German Authors. Unfortunately since my work schedule killed all my free time, I cant reliably do that. I would suggest that people volunteer to edit a single chapter and submit it to you as a private message to the Author. Thats how I started out in editing. You don't have to be perfect, just be able to fix the obvious issues.

Monk
"Yes, I will eat the Fear Turkey." -Illua

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