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Few weeks after the pizzeria incident, Toby Morrison was relaxing until he and Spike get in a argument over the past events until Twilight suddenly lost her focus and sent him back to the Wondercolts and Timberwolves pizzeria. Can he survive again only this time with more evil and past evil out to kill him?

Based on smg4 return to Freddy's spaghettiria

Ed belongs to EDPLUS777
Captain Underpants belongs to Dav Pilkey
Dr. Neo Cortex belongs to Activison

One again, huge credit goes to Crash Bandicoot for editing this.

I own nothing but my OC.

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6452467 What do you mean "literally no"?

Few weeks after the pizzeria incident, Toby Morrison was relaxing until he and Spike get in a argument over the past events until Twilight suddenly lost her focus and sent him back to the Wondercolts and Timberwolves pizzeria. Can he survive again only this time with more evil and past evil out to kill him?

Based on smg4 return to Freddy's spaghettiria

Few weeks after the pizzeria incident, Toby Morrison was relaxing until he and Spike get in an argument over the past events, until Twilight suddenly lost her focus and sent him back to the Wondercolts and Timberwolves pizzeria. Can he survive again, only this time, with more evil and past evil out to kill him?

Based on SMG4 Return to Freddy's Spaghettiria.

"What's up? Welcome to your summer job at the new improved Wondercolts and Timberwolves pizzeria." said  the phone guy

"What's up? Welcome to your summer job at the new and improved, Wondercolts and Timberwolves pizzeria." the recorded message from the phone said.


If you want, I can help, but up to you. I have nothing to do, ever, so I'm always free, although I'm no editor, and my fics aren't exactly popular. :derpytongue2:

Word of advice; You need to become better at grammar, and probably rebuild your fics from the ground up.

I have no intention and nopony else should have any reason whatsoever to continue reading past the first chapter. Are you sure you received help from an editor? There's so many mistakes and horribly written things here, I can't list them all.

No offense, if that makes you feel better.

And this is way beyond random. It makes absolutely no sense, and there is no descriptions in the writing! You miss out a few words every so often, and it's not funny.

6517943 That's because SMG4's blooper didn't make sense either!

Why is there so many dislikes on this I'm not asking for people to like it but come on give this story a chance sure it doesn't make sense but hey all of SMG4's bloopers didn't make any scene at all plus I'm doing the third instalment after this one is completed plus I have other fics based on his video's

What does SMG4 stand for?

6564011 super Mario glitchy 4

6547689 The dislikes are because you're a terrible writer. You should try paying attention to what people tell you when they criticize your stories and learn how to be a better writer. And, you know, write things that anyone actually wants to read.

This is absolutely horrible. Darling, PLEASE read some other fics and try to get a handle on how a story should be tole. Please don't use Videos, with racist language. I clicked on it, listen to it, and now I'm angry -at- you. Not a good way to win over your readers, dear

6778393 Well, I'm not the ONLY terrible writer here in Fimfiction.

6838972 True, there are many terrible writers on FiMF. But that has nothing to do with the fact that you ARE a terrible writer.

6839029 OK, I accept it. But has anyone like you came up to Writer's Block in case of trying to write some ideas?

6847003 Every writer deals with writer's block.

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