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A_guy_from_Earth


I can't dance, I can't talk... and draw, and sing, and write, and study and do everything else.

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Twilight arrives to Canterlot at the urgent request of princesses Celestia and Luna and finds that they behave, to put it mildly, strange. She surprises greatly, but she doesn’t dare to ask what’s going on. So, as a result, she spends very odd day with her teacher and her sister. When she finally returns home, she sincerely wonders what could be the reason of it. And she receives the answer from the most unexpected person. Turns out that if you can have control over celestial bodies, celestial bodies can have control over you too!

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Comments ( 5 )

I don't mean to be rude, but... Is English not your native language?

If not, then that explains a lot. If so...

Well, either way, let's just say that you are in DESPERATE need of a proofreader, so the story doesn't look like it was written by a caveman.

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You're right, English is not my native language. I'm from Belarus, so I speak Belarusian and Russian.

What about a proofreader... I tried, didn't work well. Since then I just try to "do better English".

This story was written before I started more intensive practice, so... you can see the results.

8997572
I'd be willing to help you out. I got my degree so I could be an editor, so I'm quite good at it.

8997577
I appreciate it. It would be great to have such kind of help.

However, the thing that really needs help is this: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/228124/exploring-equestria . LOTS of not-so-good English. But it's a sci-fi adventure comedy. Does... this type of stories is fine with you? If it does, then I bow before you as much as my rigid body allows me.

8999407
Honestly, idgaf what type of story it is. If you want to pm me, maybe link me to a Google Doc or something, I can check it out

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