Oh wow... I knew this one would be a bit controversial... but I've never gotten such a bad like/dislike ratio on a clopfic before. (And without a single comment saying why! Though I'm pretty sure I already know why.)

Are there going to be more chapters? I will give it an up vote because it is pretty well written.

Well even though this fic is a completely fantasy maledom power trip fic. It's still an enjoyable read, though I wouldn't expect any deep plot points or story line out of this. Anyways, like and favorite.

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Yeah don't let it get you down.
Although you are right this is a bit more on the controversial side, but I'm sure it will be enjoyable nevertheless. I look foreword to reading it later.

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Ya, the subject matter makes this one kind of down vote bait, kind of like "Fall of Equestria". But I loved this one!

I noticed scoots was tagged but didn't show, so I am guessing she is going to be the filly. Future chapters coming?

Fascinating.

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Yep, two more chapters incoming.
One of them is longer than the first two combined.

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I hope I put a little bit of emotional touch into it.

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Thanks for that! ^.^

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Yep, Scoots will be in both of the next two chapters.

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Well, there's a couple I gave a new fetish to, at least.

Only 4 measly chapter for a story like this?

... Not bad. Up vote awarded

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Well, the next chapter is over 10,000 words. I'd hardly call that 'measly'.

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Heh, thanks. ^.^ I think most of the downvoters haven't read it.

What about the princesses? Do they have their own stallion masters?

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incest, foalcon, master/subordinate sexual relationships

These will bring the hordes of white knights.

I think I can see why it's not quite as popular as some of your others.

The concept is fairly interesting, and its execution is surprisingly tasteful for what it is, but Dash feels completely out of character the whole time. It's like you could replace her with some random OC and nothing would change, which honestly is putting me off a little. Not because of the sex-crazed bit, though, but rather what she says and how she acts during it. Like I'm reading about a sex-crazed generic porno mare rather than a sex-crazed Rainbow Dash, if that makes sense.

Also, why is Rainbow her own father's mare? It doesn't mesh well with everything else we've been told about the process. If colts are assigned fillies just after they get their cutie marks, how could Rainbow Dad get assigned his own daughter? Not to mention how colossally dumb it is due to the extreme inbreeding factor present in that pairing.

6531895 To be honest, I was a bit nervous starting it, because it sounded like hardcore pet-slave play, but the mares seem like they enjoy themselves, as well as being very sexy. Anatomically correct is just amazing. I just pretend mares are not owned, and all my worries go away.

6532174 Oh, no, I've read stories like this before on several occasions. I just find this one particularly interesting.

This fic needs 30 chapters showing every single character of the show.

So this is like Fall of Equestria, except no caribous and stallions treat their mare's with love and kindness?

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I'M IN!

6533654 And it's not anthro, thank god.

6536087 what's wrong with anthro?

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The trigger warnings are enough for many to downvote this without even reading.

But after the first chapter I had to acknowledge that this version of Equestria operates in different rules than I'm use to.
1: there is no such thing as incest in this world. Whether that is due to magical pony genes, or some other reason; Dash is happily married to her own father, and the marriage was arranged by the state. This can only be true if there is no history of incest causing birth problems, hence no incest taboo.
2: Mare libido is much stronger than stallion. Enough that stallions are not acting possessively and mares can get needy enough to start eying any random passing male in hopes of relef.
3: So far everything is not only consensual, it's eagerly embraced by all parties.

The only thing that I really don't like at this point is that the mares are getting very little characterization. But the protagonist is male, the focus is sex, and the lead females aren't on stage yet; so I'm willing to wait a bit for that.

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Anthro is normally a poor choice because an author that chooses it usually does so because they cannot write an erotic scene with non-human characters.

It also has an instant downside because when a character is named, the reader gets the visual image of a pony. When the author is speaking of an anthropomorphized being it causes a lag in the reading as the reader has to reimagine the scene.

Don't get me wrong: anthro can be done very well, and there are some stories that have very good, plot line based reasons to be anthro. But the typical reasons that characters are anthropomorphized are lack of imagination or lack of talent. And that makes for poor stories.

How the bloody hell, isn't Equestria over-populated!? If this happens already in arena... what about the rest of Equestria...

6539370 if you want good athro check out distorted flares the sent seares there is some grammer and passing ishues but it is good over all

Why am I enjoying this? This is madness!!!

One and only one thing bothers me in this chapter.

That damnable announcer pony talking like John Madden at an orgy. Seriously, they can see what's happening, no play-by-play needed!
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My guess is that the rate of impregnation is much lower, even during heat.

OMGthat was awesome read,And it was great to see Fluttershy to.

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When Cadence is left unsatisfied.

I'm going to double hell now

That's two for two that managed to be adorable.

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Very true. I can't count how many times I've seen mention of hands (both clop and otherwise) and I have to go back to the cover page and check to see if it's anthro or not. Really throws you for a loop.

I have a few (mostly smart-ass) comments to share.

First off, shouldn't Cadence be teaching sex ed? Perhaps encouraging promiscuity amoung young foals in some oddly-specific place like Ponyville?

Second off, am I the only one who keeps hearing the voice of the anncouncer from Dragon Ball (Z) martial arts tournaments making sexual announcements? Woah, I just imagined Goku pounding the sh*t out of Cadence, super-saiyan style! Poor Cadence!

“Told ya I was good!” She winked at him and gave a cocky smile – as opposed to a smile with a cock in it, which she'd been giving him a moment ago.

Hurray for cheesy puns!

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I can't speak for the other princesses, but I'm sure Cadence does. If you overlook how many stallions he has to share her with, Shining is one lucky bastard!

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shouldn't Cadence be teaching sex ed? Perhaps encouraging promiscuity amoung young foals in some oddly-specific place like Ponyville?

She’s quite the multitasker.

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If there are foals that need a good princess fucking, a good princess fucking they shall get.

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I'm so getting downvoted by the anti-foalcon crowd for that, aren't I?

He just hoped he wouldn’t screw it up.

I'm sure he will... But in a good way.

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Heh. I keep making unintentional puns like that in my stories, don’t I?