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Ruh Roh.
This i'm gonna read later.
Looks horrifying.. I like scary stuff like this. She looks like a zombie.
I normally love your work, but I think that I'll pass on this one. I don't like the dark tag, and I try to avoid the sex tag as much as possible. Sorry...
Why!? Dude! Just.............after The Threesome I thought there was some clarity as to DON'T MAKE SOMETHING THAT IS DARK WITH THESE CHARACTERS MY CAPS BUTTON IS BROKEN AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
serusly stap plz kthnkzby
just write more Rise of Roam and soak in the fame man!
No tragedy tag, I can work with that.
6386820 you'd consider this a tragedy? Hmm, it's something to think about.
6386737 something like that.
6386788 as you prefer, but as you'll probably know as a usual reader, a great deal of my work is devoted to evoking "the feels". I was obligated by the submission process to add the sex tag because of (more or less) implications rather than detail. The struggle Ray was originally declined until I altered the tags.
6386802 um, what fame? I did the s because I like evoking tragic feelings. It's what I like
Oh nope, gonna pass, sorry.
6386902 Then do it with other characters! Not with this adorable shipping!
6386908 why do people insist on telling me that they aren't going to read this? I'm already frankly disappointment, do I need to be told people can't even bring themselves to open the book?
It's frankly hurtful
6386914 But i do read them, I might not particularly like the dark nature of say, The Nightmare Sonata or The World Needs Less Monsters, but I do read them and somewhat enjoy the excellent story telling (especially near Halloween Time). I just feeling like this shipping in particular has been beaten enough with the dark setting, especially when you have written such great, lighter-heated stories like The Evening Sonata and Rise of Roam.
6386902 No, wait, I didn't mean it like that!
Plz no tragedy
6386902 Well, normally tragedy has to do with the death of someone
I think I know that they won't break up since they are still together in the sequel you're writing, which I'll see if I read it when it arrives
But the cover scares me, the dark tag though...
Well, I enjoyed it. You could've explored more of how the parasite tries to turn Sunset's mind into that of a submissive toy, but, well, that's just me.
As it is, it's a nice mix of sexy, scary, and tragic. The only thing I didn't quite get is why every case of a worm attack includes the (female) victims reacting very strongly to being humilated and degraded when the worm itself only cares about basic sexual impulses.
6386928 Oh, I'm not saying that you do that. Forgive that if you would, I was just expressing a vexation. It was kind of unfair to unload it on you though.
Well, I do have another story almost done that has a considerably more happy ending than this one. It still has its feel-y qualities, but it'll be considerably lighter and more heart-warming (or at least that's my intention) than this one is.
6386953 The sequel's out, you know. I'm not entirely sure I understood exactly what you said there. Forgive me if I didn't quite understand you.
I wouldn't ever try to make someone read one of my stories. To be fair, this is a dark story with an unhappy ending. I like unhappy endings I'm afraid to say. I love the empathy they evoke in me, the fears for the character's well being, my hopes being crushed as they are given over to their fate.
I'm kind of old fashioned in that way.
Be assured that this story does not have overtly sexual elements in it, not really. The original story was sort of heavy on the sexual aspect, but I focused here more upon the emotional reactions of the characters to what was going on, rather than on what was actually going on.
Again, I'm not going to force anyone to read this or any other story, but if you'd like I could sum up the story for you just so you know you're not missing anything.
6386932 Oh, well, no tragedy then
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I mean, I'm not changing the story. For better or worse, it's staying as it is (with the exception of correcting punctuation and the like, obviously.
6386989 Oh I quite agree that in the original story, a great deal was played more to what the parasite did to the characters, and the actions those characters undertook as a result of their situation. It was a great deal more of a physical outlook on the situation.
My intention however was to examine the emotional turmoil going on with the characters, to show how they felt about what was happening,rather than simply describe what was going on.
I'm glad that you liked it though. Glad someone other than me got anything out of this story
As to your last inquiry, I'm not entirely sure. As humans, the characters are sentient beings conscious of their situations and circumstances, and thus react to those circumstances. I personally imagined the parasite as being, what we might call, a "mere animal", being driven by instinct rather than by inclination. Its focus on sexualising its victims was merely its natural way of subduing its prey, like how a spider spins a web, or a tiger stalks.
6387082 Unhappy ending, I'm definetly not reading it then
Okay, sum it up for me through a note
Sequel is out? I must have missed it since I don't read all of the notifications since I get a lot
6387114 Rise of Roam is the Evening Sonata sequel. Don't worry, that one will have a happy ending, no matter how bleak it begins.
6387129 Yes, I know that that's the sequel
6387087
6387138 Wait, so, why did you ask if the sequel was out...?
6387155 I meant that I knew how was it called, but I didn't know that it was out
wow 11 dislikes already? You definitely did something wrong here.. O.O
6387193 Ooooooh.
I've been informed a few times that the site's means of informing us about new stories is a little flawed at times.
6387211 I don't know what it was
6387236 But I already told you how I possibly missed it. I get a lot of notifications and I ignore them most of the time because I'm lazy. I just watch the first blogs and I continue on my way
Oh geez, this is spreading to other authors.
I can only come to conclusion that they're both dead?
*looks into the story* eh a bit too tragic for me, but Dan does good fiction, and this has a good Lovecrarft vibe... wait, I sense anger...
*checks the comments*
Whoa whoa whoa, some folks here need to take a nice dose of chill. I'm gonna start by readily admitting I'm not a fan of tragedy, even the much touted tragedy y lirique is beyond my scope of enjoyment, and I really love opera! But Dan is clearly experimenting here. The comments in catching are far too immediately damming. Come now guys, the story is tagged to be sad, you look on the cover, you're gonna see that everything is gonna end on a sour note. Now I love Evening Sonata, it's beautiful, and the ending made me so incredibly happy and sad that I have since watched Dan here, but every author needs to produced content that intrigues them. If you have an honest analytical gripe with a fic, sure down vote it, but Dan did a good job here. Dan, if you see this, I love your work and im happy to see you experiment. Thus isn't my cup of tea, but the right time and I could enjoy it. To hell with people that just run about unhappy because you took a risk, the fic is quality and it's effective. Rock on my friend, as long as you keep writing I'll always give it a good look.
6387237 I 'll tell you what went wrong, you established yourself ad a strong "sonata" now you make a rape fic, rape is not entertain in the slightest, there is no real context, no good reason for any of what transpired to happen, it's a waste of time and talent from your good fics, and nothing good has come out of this, frankly you're better of just deleting it, I've been with you since The Evening Sonata so I know what good you can do but I not going to let you ruin you're streak with this one-of
6387415 At what point was Rap music involved?
don't be discourged by what all of those worthless plebs are saying just write what ever you want to!
Okay... A bit on the disturbing side. Not enough for a fave but I'll leave a like. Hope it'll be enough.
6387425 who said anything about music
This was really great. I loved the way you portrayed their emotions.
So glad that the mlp community finally discovered the wonders of mind worms.
6387376
You nailed it. Folks like jsow777 are upset that this isn't like what Dan usually writes. They don't want experiments. And they really dislike anyone else liking it. Encouraging comments get downvotes, the story gets downvotes, but here's the thing, unless people explain their downvotes they're completely useless.
6388085 I have explained it if you even bother to notice
6388129
Actually, all you did was explain that you don't like it. The only thing even approaching a valid point of criticism was noting a lack of context. The rest... wasn't.
And do tell me... are the downvotes I and Novemberwolf up there got yours? Or are they by some other random person?
Addendum: Yup, downvoted with no explanation. Like I said, useless.
6388136 me downvoting you, yes, me downvoting the others, no, I said these fic have no value and I say this because it's the truth, if people can't handle that then they're idiots, and if you look not many people say why they like this ether, in my view this is a horrid, pointless, unpleasant, mess and I see no redeeming qualities about it, if you want me to go into more detail, how about you fill the blanks in for yourself sins you have no opinion outside of supporting others and making the opposition look like immature children with no braces for your argument
6388183 I feel like I'm stoking a flame war here, but what you're offering isn't any sort of valid criticism. The cover tells you what this is, I hate broccoli, but i don't berate chefs for making a dish with it, I just don't eat it. Same principle here. This is an offshoot, it isn't cannon. Please just lighten up a bit.
6388183
It's true because it's true? That's no argument and you should know that.
Praise without explanation can also be called useless, true. It does have the effect of encouraging writers to write, though, which is the opposite of what you're doing.
Don't I?
I believe Dan hit the right notes to show what he wanted: A sense of personal tragedy, of despair. Of losing yourself. The whole thing is unfair and depressing, a true bad end. You can see so when Sunset desperately tries to get a message out to Twilight. The pen breaking and mixing the ink with her blood and saliva conveys the sheer desperation, and it makes everything being futile even more heartbreaking. Sunset put everything she had in her attempt and failed. She's left isolated, not even her best friend aware of her fate. The fact that the worm uses the pain from the splinters as further sexual fuel also shows how little control remains with her.
That's just from one aspect of the overall scene. I think Dan did great.
Your turn.
6388203 just cause it not canon don't change the fact it exists
6388215 that's the thing, all those points make me feel horrible, and I don't like it, I'm not saying it's poorly written, I'm saying what is written make me feel unhappy and that there's no expiation makes it feel worse, and an even grater fact is that this is happening in real life around the would is even more worse, no one should feel this way, not you, not me, not anyone, and I don't doo those pull perverse quotes in depth detail as it is a waste if time, you can't let anyone else have an opinion and leave it can you
6388216 it doesn’t, but it is tagged properly, filed accordingly and the warning in place let's you know what it is. If your perception of a great piece of fiction can be clouded by something like this than i feel really bad for you. In my years I've seen many pieces that were cannonically part of a series i liked, and they were god awful. Take, for example, Final Fantasy 13. I loathe that game, it's a piece of shit, to me. However I still enjoy square Enix games, and will continue to. This is just an infuriate clash with your pallette, and that's fine, you don't have to enjoy it, and i am sorry you feel so betrayed for it, but don't hate on it. Even if you see it as an abomination, remember that it's a piece of fiction, and a valuable experience for an author whom will be better in his next, happier, iteration. And then go read some feel good stuff, you deserve it at that point because you were an adult about something you disliked.
6388247 I am right now, but unfortunately when I voice my opinion people like to drag me back here
6388237
Here's the thing: Had you just said "I don't like it because it's not my fetish/I find the topic disgusting", it would've been fine. But you didn't. You said you don't like it because it's bad.
Now you're saying it isn't even badly written. Don't you see how this contradicts your earlier point? I'm not trying to be snarky here, I'm honestly just wondering.
6388254 just cause it well written dose not automatically make it good
6388251 well if you'd like I'd be happy to let you be after this, but i want you to understand that the level of vitriol you used could dishearten a great author. We fan fic writers are a broken fickle bunch, and hate directed at our fics that seems less based in a stylistic flaw hurts. I dont mean to hurt anyone's feelings, ever, and I'm sure you're the same. I really hope you can refresh yourself a bit, escape this argument and have a better day. Cozy up to some nice happy fiction, you don't have to understand or love dark tragic stuff like this, but just, please, consider an author's senses for this stuff next time.
6388261 it's hard for me to do that as no one seems to value my views point
and as a side-note, just cause yo are a writer do not put your opinion above non-writers, I'm not saying you are but you need to understand the viewer just as much as the writer
6388265
I'm not the one putting a downvote on everything I disagree with. But fine, I won't bother you anymore from this moment on.
Just one last thing: My problem is more with stating opinion as fact than having an opinion.
6388280 witch is what you're doing now