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i'm a simple brony who enjoys interesting, funny, and heartwarming fimfiction. i watch the show every day and always have a mlp fim song stuck in my head.


Shining Armor vowed he would be the best brother ever forever but as the years of happiness and playtime fall behind them he finds out that responsibilities and duty will put their relationship to the test and the true test of brotherhood comes all too soon.

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Comments ( 13 )

This is a good story, however this fic is lacking a bit. :ajbemused:
First: Show don't tell. You're basically just telling the readers what's happening, when you should be weaving a narrative. Make it so that the audience feels like they're experiencing the story. :pinkiehappy:
Also you should be mor descriptive in your characters. Instead of just naming them, describe them, show us what they look like.
I would give more specific advice, but its hard trying to type this on a phone.
Anyways, I don't want to see such a potential filled story buried because of some common errors every writer faces.

Le D'awww :twilightsheepish:
I shall follow, and I shall look forward to more!
There are slight spelling errors, but that's fine! :rainbowkiss:
Continue ASAP! :twilightsmile:


Daww, this was so adorable. Definitely following! :pinkiehappy:

Aww baby Twilight is so cute, and Shinning Armor and Cadence sitting in a tree K.I.S.S.I.N.G. :heart:

Narrator at the start of this chapter: "A few years later" :moustache:

Can't wait for the next chapter! It's so much d'awwww.:twilightsmile:

I'm currently working on the latest chapter. sorry for the long pause.

682574 I hope this doesn't sound rude but this is my first time writing a store so please cut me some slack. i'm doing my best.

Very lovely and a lot of emotion, I approve!

Aw so happy and yet so sad. :yay: :fluttershyouch:

Make more i love this:heart::heart::heart::heart:: :fluttercry::raritycry:

that is so sad :applecry: and so touching:fluttercry:

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