Chapter three a rift forms once again between teacher and student
White knight settled down on the front of the porch of the cottage and felt her friend hop off and bounce inside and she flew up to the rafters as the rabbit handed over the letter to the orange mare she remembered was applejack. The albino demon bat though her mistress didn't know that had learned about the farmer and the others from the bearer of kindness who is the twin of her mistress. Once applejack and pinkie had read the note they went wide eyed and rushed out of the cottage and headed to the golden oaks library and white knight followed. She settled in the rafters and watched as they interrupted spike from opening a just received message.
"Sugarcube! Don't read that letter just yet! Read this message we got from fluttershy" said applejack handing over the message.
Twilight read the note going wide eyed at what she read recognizing fluttershy's handwriting easily and there was a after note in completely different handwriting that explained flutterbat's side of the story and sweatdropped at her mentors actions.
Yeah this is from fluttershy alright it's her handwriting so she had a long lost vampony twin sister and was taking her to her parents to finally meet but the princess ran into flutterbat alone and confused her for fluttershy. You knew fluttershy longer then I have would she lie about this" asked twilight confused.
"Yeah we knew her since she moved in and she's even worse at lying then I am if she sends a message then it's definitely true she can't even lie in her letters. But what I don't get is why the princess was in fillydelphia in the first place. Flutterbat said supernatural beings attract each other and we know how true that is what with tartarus and the everfree being near town" said applejack.
"Maybe the letter from the princess can tell us" said twilight.
She took the letter from spike and cleared her throat as she read the letter.
"Dear twilight
On one of my rutine trips to check on the status of fillydelphea I ran into fluttershy only she looked very different and I could sense darkness on her being. She said a funny story about not being fluttershy but her lost twin sister but there was no fooling my magical senses I will admit she did pull off a flight speed worthy of rainbow dash which surprised me but a few moments later I tracked her to lunar beam's residence who must have been controlled to think he was fluttershy's farther. Lunar beam is the head of the night guard stationed at fillydelphea and actually told me he was resigning from the guard. I had no choice but to personally put him and fluttershy's mother shy heart under house arrest with my personal forcefield spell! I ask that you and the others track down fluttershy and use the elements to purge the dark influence on her. Signed princess celestia.... well looks like flutterbat was right the princess jumped to conclusions twins actually have very identical or similar magical fields which of it was for the twins at the spa being inversed of each other ponies wouldn't be able to tell them apart" said twilight.
A smaller note fell out of the note fluttershy sent.
"Huh p.s. ask about sunset shimmer and say you heard the name in passing in your younger years but was so busy with studies that you forgot to ask about her signed flutterbat." Read twilight blinking.
"Actually that bit is true I did hear that name in passing a few times" said twilight shocked.
"Applejack and pinkie go get rainbow and rarity were heading to canterlot" said twilight. That was all white knight needed to hear and flew off following her bond to her mistress.
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Twilight and the mane six minus fluttershy headed over to canterlot and twilight hoped that asking about sunset shimmer under the guise of needing a destraction for what they are going to do was going to go without a hitch.
"Princess we came as quick as we could though I had to find dash first her random scedule makes finding her when she's needed hard" said twilight with a troubled look and not without a small glare at the pegasus.
"Being weather manager isn't as easy as you think! We have to carefully make sure the weather doesn't cause disaster like hurricanes or tornadoes. One mistake and it can get out of conttol! I know I seem lazy most of the time but you don't know how much stress comes with my job!" Said Rainbow glaring.
"Wait is that why you tend to be found sleeping most afternoons. You were trying to wind down for your job? Guess practicing for the wonderbolts also helps you relax" asked applejack surprised.
"Wow you learn something new everyday" said pinkie tilting her head.
"Girls pick up the elements I need to talk with the princess for a bit" said twilight and as the four mares went off twilight turned to her mentor as they went to the throne room.
" princess Celestia before we leave to track down fluttershy can you tell me about sunset shimmer? I heard the name in passing a few times but with my studies I couldn't find time to ask. the name sounds similar to mine in concept" said twilight and Celestia knew she was trying to get her mind off the task she set out.
"Sunset shimmer is the student I took before you. She was much like you only as she learned more she was starting to get impatient I tried to tell her that power wasn't everything but she didn't listen. One day she just vanished and I have no idea where she had gone. Her skill was fire magic which I should have remembered reflects the personality of ponies attuned to them. Like the magic she wields. If not handled carefully it can grow out of control her desires also grew out of control. Your talent is general magic but you are somewhat attuned to fire as well. Applejack sent a letter about your temper getting the better of you and had undergone a physical transformation. White fur with red eyes and your mane and tail became flames. Her exact description. Oddly she said your cutie mark vanished in this transformed state" said celestia.
"Really? I didn't even notice though that explains why I had soot on me when I tried to understand pinkie's sixth sense" said twilight.
Twilight sighed as they left canterlot and tried to think about where to find fluttershy.
"Girls I hate to admit it but the princess isn't looking at all the angles. I am getting a bad feeling that sooner or later my trust in the princess is going to be not as it was when I was studying under her in canterlot" said twilight.
"Dear we will still be by your side though I didn't know fluttershy had a twin sister. Though finding out she was half threstral is a surprise" said rarity.
"Not only that but this flutterbat is a naturally born vampony when from what I remember vamponies were usually created and it took centuries before they had rational thought again. They were formed by a curse placed on a settlement of ponies some 300 years back in what's now known as transylmania it's very rare to be born one instead of cursed. Threstrals today are pegasus ponies that resemble vamponies just more nocturnal and don't even have a hint of vampirism in their being. The only reason I can think of how flutterbat is a vampony is that fluttershy's mother shy heart is decended from a vampony and it was by chance the blood woke in flutterbat. Otherwise she would look exactly like fluttershy and be hard to tell apart. Flutterbat must be in a black outfit as vamponies are drawn to those kind of outfits due to being masters of stealth. If the flutter twins as I'm now nicknaming the two are in hiding it is going to be a while to find them" said twilight.
"Why don't we try manehatten didn't fluttershy mentioning meeting flutterbat there for the first time in her letter? Plus wasn't the local coven there taken out so they may head to the place the coven used to be to hide" asked rainbow.
"Good thinking I can ask my cousin dark hunter and tell him that we are on the twins side. He's a friend of fluttershy's farther and works as a vampire hunter he was the one who took out that coven" said twilight.
"Wait lunar beam must have asked him to help fluttershy and flutterbat as well." Said pinkie thinking.
"Good thing I trust dark otherwise It would be hard to contact fluttershy" said twilight.
"I hope so Sugarcube or we might be in trouble" said applejack.
(End chapter)
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6378033 yes it is so you pretty much wont understand why most ponies can accept that at face value. Plus ponies in equestria tend to have different ideas of normal. Its a world of magic so things that make sense for a human is going to be slightly skewed here. And yes ponies do beleive almost anything remember trixie and her boasts? After that I saw ponies tend to belief a lot. A certain comic with a minotaur and applossa comd to mind for example.
So... This chapter confuses me. Where in the timeline is it? I think it's in season one, but when in season one is it? In the first chapter they had just gotten the tickets, but now apparently Twilight knows about Pinkie sense indicating that at least a week has passed even if you mix up the episode order.
6378108 it's been a long time since I saw the season so my memory of events are a bit off okay.
6378108 The events could be in a different order he doesn't need to stick to the script shall we say..
Also not everyone has perfect memory but I get what you're saying.
nice chapter. more please!
6378807 you didn't see the author note at the end of chapter three didn't you. I said the next few chapters won't be out for a while. My mother is in the hospital with both cancer and pneumonia. Until I know if she's going to make it out or not my writing is effectively on hold as I can't think on the story due to my worry.
6379426 um... sorry... well,
i hope she gets well soon.
What I've read so shows great potential, there are however a few things, like capital letters missing from names, as well as there is no indication when there is a switch in either POV or when there's a new scene.
I will would complain about how OOC Fluttershy felt, but I'll let it slide since the story has an AU tag on it. Also the fact that she would be cam and accepting about meeting herself...
Another complaint would be how fast the story is progressing. It feels a bit rushed in the sense that there is nothing to flesh the story out, almost like only the absolutely necessary is included.
The concept however, is great and I enjoyed the story none the less. Keep up the good work.
I wish your mother will and that she heals up soon.
6390431 I'm sorry everyone but just yesterday I received word that she passed away I'm going to be taking a break from writing to greave and may try to remember the times I had with her. Her cancer and pneumonia plus her already degrading body had been to much for her. When I get things back in order I will be back but I am officially dedicating this story to her as I started on it when she went to the hospital. So with that said I have no idea how long this will take so I'm going to put my account on hiatus until I can find myself again. At least I know she's no longer in pain.
plz continued it....
6391541 my mother recently died! I will continue but first I have to get my emotions back on track and properly greave. any more of these types of comments are just going to set my temper off. And considering I'm dutch Irish you don't want to see me not emotionally balanced with the tempers the Irish are known for. Just let me have time to sort out this first. Trust me when I say you are being a bit insensitive here. It was Litterally only been a day since she died here!
6391311 you my condolences
6391820 You have my condolences also.
6393562 have you read the recent comments? Because life just decided to throw me a curveball out of left feild. I'm going to try and do those once things are not feeling like my heart got torn out.
Sorry to say this mate, but your story needs a serious overhaul. This is the type of story I would call rushed exposition and nothing else. We are constantly reading characters telling about stuff that happened. The actual stuff that happens is there for a second before you repeat it in a wall of text afterwards. Also you should get someone to look over the grammar of this story since the mistakes were starting to feel like punches to the face.
Another problem I have with the story is that it all feels very forced. Everything just happens suddenly and without any explanation. The best example of this is the meeting between sky and fluttershy where they meet and instantly everything is a-ok. If suddenly someone that looked like you came to you and said the stuff sky said I think you would not instantly say ok come to my house and I will pretend to be your sibling.
were is ch.4?...
6411236 I'm working on it I just have to make sure to pace myself here.
I like it. This was better then some of the more recent stories I've come across.
6480286 thanks and as I got the au tag up I don't have to follow episode order for events!
good story
Interesting story. I look forward to the next few chapters.
Do you have an editor? I don't mean to be rude, but you need one. The typos distract from an otherwise great story.
Still waiting... Patiently waiting...
When will this be updated
6937743 when I can find a way not to blow up the battles on here out of porportion. After seeing gurren lagann I found it difficult not to make the battles of my stories on the kind of scale of it where it isn't needed. I have to relearn restraint there before I update this story.
anymore?
7190292 I'm working on it but insomnia takes a lot out of my will to write even when it's the only thing I do all day.
7194566 ok
7194566 Still working on restraint?
7603814 yep. Mainly so I don't go the overpowered route. I rather my characters be believable not unreal. I like curbstomps for comedy sure but escalation is hard to prevent. Which is why I decided to focus on one story for now so I can handle it.
7604607 I can comprehend that logic. And, due to my sleep deprived state (woke up Tuesday, at 05:30. Still going.), I will count that as a win on my behalf. So, I accept your answer as valid, and sound.
7635725 nope Flutterbat displaced. The character got displaced as flutterbat. Though unlike the original one that Fluttershy became this one kept the mind intact and not lost to the bat instincts. So she's technically a threstral in a way. Story though is on hiatus while I work on doing some rewrites I kinda want to do this over and make a more planned story. I was completely winging it when I started this so besides the displacement everything else is being reworked from the ground up. And trust me having a twin sister gives me a bit of leeway in making female characters like this.
7641832 im impressed that you did a great job making this on the fly. Can't wait to read on what comes next
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This is REALLY good....
im sad this is cancelled
two year and no new update
i hope the story ain't dead
Please update
UPDATE?
WHERE ARE YOU
I think the author forgot his password
Despite any mistakes I've found in this Fanfic with it's grammar and/or spelling, I've enjoyed it.
8518393
Be patient please im rewriting this story from the ground up. Ill post the new version later next year need to get my thoughts in order.
8557671
No I didnt forget my password things this past two years was a bit stressful what with things here in cali getting hectic.
8564764
Thank you for enjoying the story at least. Hard to write with adhd getting in the way but be on the look out for the redux.
8567610
Very well, I will wait patiently for the Redux.
I really wanted to read this, but my desire just evaporated when I saw it was on hiatus. What a disappointment...
Edit: Just took a look at the author's note and understood why it's on hiatus. I am so sorry, and wish that everything work out in the end for you...
Update please