Coming Clean

BOBtheman2000

BOBtheman2000 #1 · Aug 30th, 2015 · 1 · ·

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Saw it coming. This story was still good however.

goaway

goaway #2 · Aug 30th, 2015 · · ·

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6374473

Hope you got out of the way in time, then.

Misslordoffluffyclouds

Misslordoffluffyclouds #3 · Aug 30th, 2015 · 1 · ·

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I actually really like this! I actually have a gay friend who is treated like this a lot.
And it's really beautiful how Twilight is so accepting. I loved this fic!

Excy

Excy #4 · Aug 30th, 2015 · · ·

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Woah, hey! What's up with the dislikes? Do I offend?

Spooky Moon

Spooky Moon #5 · Sep 2nd, 2015 · 6 · 4 ·

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6375809 hey i did a mini review of your story to try and help a bit. Uh what? just what??? okay first thing first

It was the week before, Spike was on an errand run for Twilight. He had just finished picking up the quills and parchment when he saw someone walking by. It was a tall, muscular man. One would say a handsome man. Spike was analyzing the man, eyes running up and down the man's body. Spike was so caught up in his gaze, he didn't notice the man had caught Spike staring directly at him. Spike blushed, and turned away.
"What're you looking at, you faggot?" The man yelled at Spike, who began to walk away. The man began to follow Spike. He tried to pretend he didn't notice him. He began to walk faster. He saw the boutique in the distance. He could run in there and hope he leaves him alone. He was almost there when he felt a hand grab him by the shoulder, turning him around.
"I asked you a question, you queer. What were you looking at?" The man grabbed him by the shirt and held him up a few inches from the ground.
"N-Nothing! I-I wasn't looking at anything! I-I swear!" Spike pleaded to the obviously bigger man, hoping he wouldn't hurt him.
"If I catch ya looking at me again, you'll be sorry, ya hear?!" The man angrily said to Spike.
"Y-Yes!" Spike said, scared for his life.
"Good." The man threw Spike on the ground. "Faggots like you make me sick." The man said before walking off angrily. Spike rose from the dirt and dusted himself off, picked up the quills and parchment, and walked home, scared, hoping he wouldn't run into the man again.

uh what the hell was this? this scene made no sense. Okay so Spike was getting something for Twilight and was caught staring at someone the guy freaking the hell out suddenly on Spike someone known around town picks him up by the shirt threatens him throws him down to the ground in the middle of the day in crowded ponyville and no on help him at all???? someone would have helped him and another thing is Spike thinking having been caught by this man makes him know that Spike's guy which is uncalled for. And then there's this

Twilight had a fearful look in her eyes, she pulled Spike into another hug.
"I'm so sorry! I shouldn't have sent you out there by yourself! I should have been a went with you or done it myself so things like that wouldn't happen!" Twilight began to cry into his shoulder, worried for her brother. "W-What if something worse w-was to happen? It would've been my f-fault!" She said between tears. Spike stopped her before she could continue.

... *sigh* okay author the hell is this? Twilight freaks out over Spike who you said in the story was almost a young man which twilight knows this and can take care of himself and being tossed to the ground like some bully did it apparently could have died. Yes that makes so much sense when I was bullied in my school and pushed to the ground I and everyone always thought that they could've killed me and please try to go for something a bit more dramatic for the secret spike was going to tell Twilight no offence to gays but that scene was underplayed I honestly excepted Spike to tell Twilight that he murdered someone in self defence which would've been much better and all in all this story needs much much more work.

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