That was so funny. Especially with Sweetie Belle trying to pry into Rarity's situation.

I don't mean to be negative, but there's a few typos:

“Hey! Isn’t that them over their!?”

“I didn’t see Apple Bloom and Scootaloo over their by the way.” Sweetie added.

I think Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon were spotted around their

*there

“My panties!” she cried. “Give it back!”

“Oh? You want it?” Strawberry teased as she let it swing on her finger, but didn’t let it fall, angering Rarity. “Come and get it!”

Should probably be "them" rather than "it".

She’s actually in the opposite direction your going.

*you're

Other than that, I think you could improve the overall flow by adding a few commas, there were sentences I had to scan a few times to make sense of.

I liked the concept, though, and I hope to see more from you in future.

6392786 Ok, I'll fix 'em

haha. very good chapter. Can't wait for the next!

possibly pet play? as in hasn't happened yet?....

6418590 It might, it might not, not sure yet

6418726 well let me know if it does....

6418742 Do you think I should?

6418784 for sure....

6418784 I was thinking that encounter would go vary differently something like: Listen to my you little homeless cunt breath one word of this to anyone and you will fined out how painful a Brazilian wax can be one hair at a time and you Rarity said turning to apple bloom would you like it if I told Applejack that you have been spying on big mac wile he is in the shower? how do you know that? asks Apple bloom with fear in her eyes I'm sure by now you've notice Sweetie belle talks in her sleep with that rarity turns and resumes her search. still great chapter (ya no grammar skills why I don't wright)