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After the board rejects her research application, Doctor Luna tries something foolish; using herself as a test subject.
Surely diluting a pony's inner darkness is a worthy goal? Surely perfecting her elixir is worth the risk? Surely.
Thanks to Yami Vizzini for prereading and to Nonagon for prereading/editing.
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Right?
Good stuff. So now I have to read this.
'cause it's gonna bother me if I don't say something...
I think you meant to use 'distilling' rather than 'diluting'.
6630980 The potion was intended to dilute it. Things don't always turn out like we want, though
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<uncomfortable British policeman's cough>
Well, then, carry on as you were, good author.
Oh, right. I should comment on this.
It kind of... rambles. Overall, it's good, but it doesn't seem to actually conclude.
Still, I like it.
Despite you saying that the story is not good, I'd say it's great the way it is. I see it as a neat origin story for Nightmare Moon and how she was suppressed or "killed". Not sure if you can kill a nightmare. -shrug-.
Thank you for sharing this.
dr.jekyll and mr.hyde nice i love it
I like this interpretation of Jekyll and Hyde, and Luna's motivation seems reasonable, but the pacing is so fast.
Tee-hee, methinks I like where this is going
Typo:
It should be:
"For Science" is not something that can be muttered after all.
Good premise, execution is... well. The story isn't even <10k words so I'd say this was just a concept story.
Oh, no Nightmare Moon prospective?
She's awake
She's a part of you
I say embrace her
Level each other out