Yep
Sun’s up.
Wake up.
Don’t throw up.
Yawn.
Scratch.
Up and at ‘em.
Brand new day.
Get ready.
Get fresh.
Brush hair?
Nope!
Brush teeth?
Yep!
Look in the mirror.
Smile.
Do it.
Wider.
Good.
Breakfast time.
Let’s eat, Gummy.
Pudding?
Pudding.
Who’s a good boy?
You are!
Let’s eat, Pinkie.
Cakes baked cupcakes!
Two chocolates and orange juice.
Need that sugar.
Eat, chew, swallow.
All fueled up.
Thanks, Mrs. Cake!
Out the door.
Meet the day.
Ponies here.
Ponies there.
Ponies, ponies everywhere.
Smile and wave.
Smile and wave.
There’s Lyra.
Minuette.
Applejack!
Berryshine.
Caramel.
Hello, Hey, and Howdy.
Smiles all around.
No cheer needed here.
What to do, what to do?
Bored.
Find a bit.
Pick it up.
Have good luck.
Impromptu song number.
Bored again.
Someone has to need a smile.
But who?
Wait!
Sweetie Belle’s frowning!
Fix that.
Get her attention.
Shout real loud.
Got it?
Good.
Watch closely, Sweetie.
The humble banana!
Peel, eat.
Drop peel.
Slip.
Crash.
Classic.
There’s that smile.
And a chuckle.
It’s not so bad now.
Another day made brighter.
There she goes.
A job well done.
Bored again.
Sugar crash.
Yawn.
Going down.
Mayday.
Need a fix.
To the tree!
In the trunk.
Find a cupcake.
For cupcake emergencies.
Sugar crash averted.
Crash, crash...
Dash!
Where’s Rainbow Dash?
Not here.
Not there.
Not anywhere?
Check again.
There she is.
Hey!
Did she hear?
Hey!
Get down from that cloud!
Down, silly!
Come on!
There we go.
She’s down all right.
In the dumps.
Fix that.
Wanna do pranks?
Rubber Chicken?
Whoopie Cushion?
Whoopie Chicken?
No?
How about jokes?
No?
Too late!
Knock knock!
…
Knock knock!
“Who’s there?”
Avenue!
“Avenue who?”
Avenue heard this joke before?
Eh?
Eh?
Nothing.
What’s wrong, Dashie?
“It’s a long story.”
Time's no problem.
Stay a while.
Listen.
Uh huh.
I know.
Uh huh.
Yep.
Hm…
Tough cookie.
Advice?
Well...
Try again, Dashie.
I believe in you.
You can do it.
Trust me!
It gets easier.
Now put a smile on.
Wider.
You're doing great!
Now get going.
You'll knock 'em dead.
And I want to hear about it.
Tonight.
At...
My...
Party!
Of course there's a party.
When don't I throw parties?
Right?
I'll see you there.
Step one: plan party.
To the store.
And we're walking.
Derpy.
Twist.
Rarity!
Heya, Hiya, and How you doing?
Through the store door.
Buy balloons.
Streamers.
Confetti.
More confetti.
More.
Too much!
Perfect.
To Sugarcube Corner!
Step two: decorate.
Get help.
Cakes are busy.
That's okay.
Hang the streamers.
Make a banner.
Blow up balloons.
Arm confetti cannons.
Looking good.
Could be better.
But still good.
Step three: prepare invitations.
One for her.
One for her.
And especially for her.
Invite the whole town.
Why not?
How many ponies live here, again?
...
Bake more snacks.
Bake even more snacks.
There.
Step four: deliver invitations.
This is a singing telegram!
I hope it finds you well.
You're invited to a party.
Because I think you're really swell.
- - -
No, it's not a birthday.
I had no actual reason.
But why not stop by anyway?
Since this is the party season.
- - -
There's plenty of confetti.
I bought a metric ton.
So be sure to come on down.
And we'll all have lots of fun.
Continue singing.
Cough.
Keep it up.
Doing great.
Hack.
One more...
Wheeze.
Drink honey tea with lemon first.
Done!
That's all of them.
Every pony in Ponyville.
Step five: wait.
Wait.
Wait.
Check clock.
Wait.
Check clock.
Party time!
Step six: party party party party party!
Twilight!
Big Macintosh.
Fluttershy!
Glad you could make it.
Glad you could make it.
Glad you could make it.
Yawn.
Sugar crash detected!
Drink some punch.
Wait.
Drink all the punch.
Sugar high!
Make more punch.
Check on things.
"Great party, Pinkie!"
"Turn the music up!"
"I'm so glad you invited me to this party, darling. You have no idea how much stress I've been under lately. I've just had so many orders from Manehattan since my line of sapphire-encrusted hats with tiny golden trimmings debuted. It's been nothing but work all week, and it hardly helps matters that Sweetie Belle's been gallivanting about in my workshop like it's some kind of theme park. I could go on, darling, do you want me to go on? No, hold that thought. They're starting another round of truth or dare, and this may be my only chance to get Fluttershy to tell me where she gets her mane done. I'll speak to you more about it later. Wait for me!"
Party's doing well.
Everyone's having fun.
Confetti cannons on full blast.
Tell a joke.
"Avenue who?"
Avenue heard this joke before?
Always gets 'em.
Bake more treats.
Mix more punch.
Rainbow Dash!
How'd it go?
Knew you could do it.
Here, have a cupcake.
It's got rainbow sprinkles.
Now go have fun.
I'll see you later!
Schmooze a little.
Eat a dozen cupcakes at once.
Impress everyone.
Disgust Rarity.
Turn the music up.
Improvised dance routine.
Hope this lasts forever.
Party.
Party harder.
Party hardest.
Party over.
Everyone's going home now.
They're going.
Really.
Say goodbye.
Seeya!
Later!
Come back next time!
That's everyone.
Bye, Derpy!
That's everyone.
Music off.
Lights out.
Fall down.
Get up.
Clean up.
Don't throw up.
Cough.
Crack shoulders.
Get to work.
Throw out treats.
Dump the punch.
Sweep confetti.
Get another bag.
Sweep the rest of the confetti.
Stop.
Take a breather.
It's quiet.
Too quiet.
Back to work.
Put the games away.
Take down the streamers.
Pop the balloons.
Done.
Party's over.
Everyone gone.
Cakes asleep.
It's quiet.
Go upstairs.
Shut your door.
Check the drawer.
Here's the rope.
There's a chair.
End it?
Not today.
Brush hair.
Brush teeth.
Look in the mirror.
Smile.
Mean it.
Lights off.
Get to bed.
Fluff pillow.
Get cozy.
Sleep.
Tomorrow's a brand new day.
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Surprisingly moving. Bravo as always Obs.
And after so long...
He finally releases another story.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I found it rather good.
I liked it. You really captured Pinkie's voice here.
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That ending caught me quite of guard.
I was singing, having fun then all of a sudden; "Here's the rope, there's the chair, end it?"
Okay... thanks Obs...
I dunno, I didn't get any feels out of this.
I just read through it, got to the point, but you can see it coming from the third line. Not your best work.
I ship Obselescence with the return key.
Heh heh.
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I'm not sure I'm ready to
enter into a relationship like that just yet.
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Goddammit.
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Why not? She's cute as a button!
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That, ah, ending...mood whiplash.
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I felt like it was worth writing. That's all I can really say.
I love Pinkie stories. Cute, but suprising. Great job!
oh.
oh my.
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Otherwise, was a good read. Not enough stream of consciousness fics on this site
Aw, poor Pinkie.
Who makes her smile?
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You too, goofball
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But I'm not even Dutch...
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Then you're just a crazy bastard.
It took me reading this twice to really appreciate this fic. The first time was kind of a skim through, catching all of the details but not really appreciating the subtly of it. S'probably why the whole rope and chair thing kinda threw me for a loop.
But when I slowly read through the second time, I could really see and feel the situation that Pinks is going through. There's a struggle, sure, but there is also a very determined and stubborn optimism keeping her mostly stable. Something that I myself can relate to.
"Tomorrow's a brand new day." is a line that is used frequently, and it's meaning isn't really understood as often as it should be. I feel as if this fic has captured the meaning of that line perfectly. I honestly really enjoyed this fic.
Now, don't get me wrong, I'm not trying to be edgy or anything here, but that twist at the end was so sudden and abrupt that it actually made me laugh. It just seemed so stark and out of place that it was ridiculous. That aside, this wasn't anything new, and while it was a very fluid read, the whole "Pinkie Pie is actually suicidal and her wild life is the only thing that keeps her moving" thing is just so overdone that I personally felt like this would have been a better story if you went full fuzzy feel instead of trying to throw us for a loop there.
You do deserve an upvote for the rest of the story though, as that wasn't enough to destroy its enjoyability.
Huh...so far no one's used the 'That escalated quickly' meme...
Perhaps it's finally dead?!
Seriously, this is cute, strange, and interesting enough to have a like.
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What? Expecting something at the end of all that? Please; I just read a depressing Pinkie story. I got nothing.
I know them feelz, Pinks.
Just do what I do and keep smiling. Maybe it will be worth it someday.
Well done! It really shows Pinkie's frantic stream of consciousness as mostly an escape, so the scene with the rope didn't so much surprise me as it just caught me off guard. Just to be clear, this isn't what I picture Pinkie's internal life to be like, but it was a very interesting take on the Pinkie as a tortured soul genre.
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This is true
Don't love it. Don't hate it. If nothing else I can offer a like. Ending was a nice. At the same time, I cant really enjoy it because it made me think of two things. 1. I recall reading that people who enjoy making others laugh often suffer from depression and they make jokes to mask their pain.. 2. Having said that, I couldn't help but think of Robin Williams.
6351752 Worth writing and reading, but it left me sort of meh.
That...that got surprisingly dark.
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Your avatar is PERFECT.
[Considers posting that picture of Pinkie hanging herself after a self-party]
[Let's not]
CURSE YOU OBSELESCENCE! Another fine story that breaks my heart. YOU HEART SHATTERERERE. You meany, writing such good stories of sad!
Nice fic.
Almost did a spit-take.
And it made me chuckle.
Gonna read again.
Well, damn.
I was amused.
And ive always wondered about pinkies mental health.
More so ever since I started reading fanfiction.
Whoa... That bit near the end threw me off so hard... Man Obs, good job
Jesus Christ! Maybe I should have expected it, but I didn't, and wow did that hit me like a tonne of bricks.
Strangulation would mean many drawn-out minutes of unpleasantness, all compounded by feelings of helplessness while you wait for it to end. A gun would be preferable. So in Equestria, maybe a crossbow would do the trick. An explosive device held against her neck would probably be the best, though. I'd suggest a very high cliff, but Pinkie Pie would probably just bounce.
6352639 Actually if you snap your neck that way then you'd only feel what's above it, meaning only your head would feel any of it. You'd barely notice any of it before you passed out
Unusual style, definitely, but it fits the story. The glimpse of the darkness and depression always lurking at the back of Pinkie's mind was startling, but again, it fit in.
Her suicidal thoughts could've been more subtle, sprinkled around the story. The rope + chair at the end was too sudden, IMO.
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So this is the difference between moderator and admin writing level in comparison to normal scrubs like me? Just two words on one line and we are all deeply in-influenced. Damn Obe, you're swell.
A large number of suicide-themed fics featured this past week or so...
Hmm, you know, the story was pretty good throughout, the unique story telling mecahnic being what really had me captured and interested, but when the suicidal twist happened, it really suppressed all the great build up until that point. I understand there is an undertone of all her actions being forced, like she has to, no matter what, make people laugh and feel better, even at her own expense. However, the suicidal thoughts stood as a stark dichotomy between the tone that had led up to this.
I can't say I necessarily dislike the story, but the sudden twist had left me perplexed and not leaving with what I thought I'd leave with from this story.