Welcome to Ponyville, the most equal and joyous town in all of Equestria. We pride ourselves in our unity, in our conformity to the one true harmony. Discover why your heart aches and why hostility thrives around you. We welcome all guests to visit us and explore the truths they so yearn to find. You'll find we're all smiles here.
Join us today and feel your free thoughts whisk away. We do not express uniqueness here, thus, no conflict has or will ever come to our town. Come one, come all, and join the hundreds who have given up their cutie marks to bond in the joy of sameness.
After all, we're all equal here.
- Your gracious and benevolent overseer, Starlight Glimmer
"Sometimes somepony needs to be superior."
Chapters (2)
Hm, not too bad. Minor spelling errors (I.E. a they're used instead of their), but the pacing is not too bad, and provides enough background material throughout.
Overall, a 7/10 so far. Actually, make it an 8; I got a story idea while reading this.
Well, you've got my interest!
Neat.
I'd upvote if I could but for some reason it won't let me.
6657960 Thank you. I'll probably do another
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grammergrammar edit before posting part 2. I was rushing myself to get this out before the season 5 finale. Glad I could inspire an ideaDude, please tell me this won't end on a bleak note. I can't stand stories where a rebellion of freedom fighters loses.
6659513 It will not end bleak
. I realize how the story at this point could go in that direction, but I'd rather not take that route. I think you'll find the ending surprising, but there won't be a dark tag.
Hm... following for now. Also, I don't know how you can talk about incineration and call this E rated. Maybe I don't understand the rating system fully.
6660044 The word I used was incarcerate (to imprison) which is a bit different from the word incinerate (to burn).
I debated over the rating, but chose an E-rating because there isn't violence and, despite some darker themes, there is some silliness strewn throughout. It's intense in some places; if I could give it an E.5-rating I would. But I think what makes it sound deserving of a T-rating is the concern about what's in part 2. Which I'm fine to make clear, it doesn't go where we might fear it's going.
6660110 Ah, sorry, I misread it. Ok, I'll keep watching to see where this goes. Somehow, I'm expecting mood whiplash.
Nicely done. Plenty of comedy to go with the friendship lesson.
6670558 Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.
I really enjoyed this story! Great job!
Dat plot twist though
Applebloom >> Apple Bloom it's a two word name ^_^.
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Good start so far.
Applebloom >> Apple Bloom.
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This makes a good AU fic. I kind of want to see the continuation of it, but so far, so good.
To be honest I liked this story better than the season 5 finale Starlight fooling Twilight into making herself into the bad guy so everyone will side with her instead is pretty clever.
Besides I kinda liked Starlight better as a villain and she sounds so sinister here.
I'm surprised Discord had no idea Fluttershy was imprisoned.
By the way you never explained to us where Spike was especially at the end