Twenty - Shopping Outbursts
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- 2 Weeks Later -
[4 Months, 2 Weeks Into Pregnancy]
[Adagio Dazzle’s P.O.V.]
Today was another great day outside. I’ve decided to go spend time with the girls today at the mall. Besides, I could use the opportunity to go shopping for some items for the baby. Clavier and I have also been discussing things lately such as who will be the godparents. Of course, we’ve decided that all our close friends, Flash and the girls, will be the godparents since it was hard for us to choose.
I sat comfortably on the couch in the living room as I waited for the girls to come by. Suddenly, the doorbell rang.
DING! DONG!
I stood up and went to open the front door, but Clavier had beaten me to it.
“Don’t worry, I’ll get it Dagi,” he called out.
I nodded and sat back down. “Thanks love!”
I heard Clavier open the door and the chorus of cheerful greetings from familiar voices.
“Hey, girls! Come on in!” I called out. I heard the shuffling of footsteps draw closer. The first to enter was Sunset followed by Twilight, Fluttershy, and Rarity.
“Hey, Adagio,” they greeted. I smiled and gave a small wave.
“Sit yourselves down. By the way, where are the others?” I asked.
“Oh, Applejack’s got chores to do back at the farm, Pinkie’s needed at the bakery, and Rainbow’s on a site tour at the Wonderbolts Academy,” Sunset replied.
“I see. Well, I hope Rainbow likes it there.” The girls nodded in agreement.
“Yeah, she’s always been eager to become a part of the Wonderbolts,” Fluttershy said.
“Anyway, shall we head off to the mall then?” Rarity asked eagerly.
The fashionista’s eyes sparkled brightly with a wide grin spread across her lips. I chuckled, knowing Rarity was eager to find materials and other accessories for her hobby.
“Alright, let’s go then.” I stood up and walked out of the living room, followed by the girls. “Clavier, we’re heading out now!”
“Alright, take care girls! Love you babe!” Clavier called out. I smiled.
“Love you more!”
The girls and I walked down main street as we nearly made it to the central mall. Walking had become a little difficult and slow for me, not to mention the back pains as my pregnancy progressed. My belly had swollen as if I was hiding a watermelon underneath my top. I sighed, feeling ashamed of my body.
“What’s wrong Adagio?” Twilight asked worriedly.
“Nothing. I’m just ashamed of how I look,” I replied, sighing.
“Why’s that?” I gave Twilight a glare.
“Because I look fat!” I hissed. Sunset chuckled. I turned my glare towards her. “What’s so funny?”
A sweatdrop rolled down Sunset’s forehead. “Oh, come on. You don’t look fat. It’s just the baby growing inside you. It’s natural,” Sunset assured.
I sighed. “Sorry about that. That was my hormones.” Sunset patted me on the back.
“No worries. We understand, right girls?” the others hummed in agreement.
“Although, I do have to say you’ve grown in a certain department,” Twilight stated. I furrowed an eyebrow.
“And what do you mean by that?”
A blush appeared on Twilight’s face.
“W-well, your chest seems slightly bigger than last time.” I blushed and averted my gaze.
“I-I don’t know how to respond to that,” I mumbled. Sunset and Rarity burst into giggles.
“Oh, don’t be modest dear. Think of that as a perk. I’m sure Clavier can get some fresh air with that enticing view in front of him,” Rarity teased. I blushed fiercely.
“W-what’re you saying!?” I stuttered.
“It seems Clavier’s getting the daily calcium he needs for breakfast eh?” Sunset added, wiggling her eyebrows.
“O-oh my, does that mean Adagio’s a cow?” Fluttershy mumbled, blushing. Hormones kicking in, I couldn’t help but feel infuriated by that comment.
“I’m not a cow!” I shouted, flailing my arms.
“Eep!” Fluttershy zipped behind Rarity, cowering.
I hid my face in my hands embarrassingly as the others girls giggled, much to my dismay. Setting things aside, we reached the front entrance and entered the mall.
“Hey, Dagi. Sorry about earlier. We were just joking,” Sunset apologized.
I waved a hand dismissively. “I know and it’s fine. I just can’t help it.”
“Alright. Well, we’ll stop. We don’t want you getting stressed out or anything.”
I smiled. “Thanks. I appreciate it.”
“It’s been some time and I’m curious whether you and Clavier have found out the baby’s gender?” Rarity asked. My face lit up with excitement.
“Oh, I forgot to tell you guys about that. The doctor said it’s a baby girl,” I confirmed proudly.
“Aww! That’s so cute,” Fluttershy cooed quietly.
“As one of the godparents, I must start designing. I must!” the fashionista declared determinedly. I giggled.
“Just don’t bite off more than you can chew, alright?”
Rarity smirked. “Trust me darling. I’ll have done them in a jiffy.” I smiled appreciatively.
“Alright then. Is there anything you guys wanted to do at the mall today?” I asked. I gazed at the girls who were thinking.
“Hmm, nothing,” Sunset replied.
“Me neither,” Twilight responded.
“I don’t think so,” Fluttershy added.
“Hmmmm, I could use some materials. What about you?” Rarity asked.
“I was hoping to go and buy some stuff for the baby while we were out.” Rarity nodded.
“I see. We can leave mine for later. First, we should get the baby’s items sorted out.” The others and I nodded.
We went towards the baby department store and entered. We searched around for some items, especially baby clothing. The girls and I split up and began looking for different types that I think the baby would need in its first several weeks. I chose to go and check out one of the particular clothing sections, onesies.
My eyes scanned the well organized stacks of clothing on the shelves. A particular one caught my attention. I picked up one of the onesies and examined it all over. It was decorated with purple and green horizontal stripes and had a baby dragon with matching colours sewn onto the front. It was simple and cute. I decided to take the onesie and hold onto it while I looked for more.
As I explored the shelves, another onesie caught my interest. I went over, picked it up, and examined it. The one piece clothing had a mix of light, normal, and dark brown colours with an owl of matching colours on it. Below the owl were words sewn saying ‘Coo-hoot!”. I giggled, understanding the emphasized pun on the word cute. I grabbed the onesie and took it with me.
I continued searching through the large variety of choices, but from the corner of my eye I noticed the girls approaching me, carrying some items in their hands.
“Hey, Adagio. Find anything?” Twilight asked. I nodded and showed her the two onesies I chose. Rarity approached and examined it.
“My, how adorable. You sure have a good taste of fashion for the little one,” Rarity stated. I smiled, cheered by the fashionista’s words. The other girls nodded in agreement.
“What about you guys? Did you find anything?” I asked. The girls stepped forward and showed me the items they were carrying.
The girls all held various types of clothing and accessories in their arms and hands, just as I expected. These consisted of shirts, a sweater, a couple of jackets, pajamas, socks, hats, a pair of mittens, and a couple of pacifiers. I noticed one of the clothes that was in Twilight's hand. It was a pink shirt with three cute insects that had little wings and large blue eyes bunched up in a hug. I couldn’t help but let out an ‘aw’. Twilight smiled, happy that I was satisfied with her choice of clothing. I smiled at the girls, thanking them for their choices as well.
“I like them! Although, I think we could use a few more,” I suggested. Rarity shook her head.
“Relax, I’ll cover the rest as I promised, okay? I want to first try making clothes for a child. I’m always up for a challenge,” Rarity assured.
“I don’t know what to say. That’s kindly generous of you Rarity. Thank you.” Rarity smiled.
“Anything for my friends.” I smiled in return. We went to one of the clerks and handed the items over.
“Hello there, Ms. Adagio. Congratulations on the baby,” the clerk said. I smiled.
“Thank you. Is word already spreading?” I asked curiously. The clerk shook her head.
“Oh, no. I remember Mr. Clavier coming here and shopping for some items for a nursery.”
“I see. He’s done a great job so far,” I said proudly. The clerk chuckled in agreement.
The clerk finished scanning the items. “That’ll be forty three bits in total. Would you also like one of these?” The clerk held up a pregnancy book.
“I think I’ll be fine, thank you,” I politely declined. The clerk nodded. She handed the bag of items over and we thanked her before we left.
“Alright, now that’s over with, shall we head over to the textiles store?” Rarity asked. We nodded.
As we made our way over, I started to slow down a little and held up a hand to my head. I felt dizzy and nauseous. I took in some deep breaths to calm my nerves down. The girls noticed and placed some hands on my shoulders to support me.
“Adagio, are you okay?” Sunset asked worriedly. I nodded.
“Y-yeah. I’m fine. Just feeling a little dizzy, that’s all,” I replied.
“Perhaps you should sit down for a while,” Rarity suggested.
“Yeah, I think you just need a bit of rest. Here, let me carry those for you,” Twilight offered. I nodded and handed the bag of clothes to Twilight.
“Fluttershy, would you mind going with Rarity? Twilight and I will keep an eye on Adagio,” Sunset asked the shy girl.
Fluttershy nodded and went with Rarity to find some materials. Sunset and Twilight stayed behind with me, their hands on my shoulders for support. As we went for the nearest seat, a woman standing outside a nearby bookstore approached us. As she got closer, we recognised her as Trixie.
“Well hello there,” Trixie greeted. “You must be here to see the great and powerful Trixie for the pregnancy books.”
‘Must be?’ I thought.
I raised an eyebrow at her. Trixie liked to brag that some found irritating, but she was still okay in my books. Unfortunately, I felt my hormones spiking up and now was not the time to deal with it.
“Trixie, what’re you doing here?” Twilight asked.
“I work here to earn money while I study at university. Is there anything wrong with that?” Twilight shook her head. Trixie turned her attention back to me.
“It’s fine, Trixie. We’re just taking a rest. We’re not interested,” Sunset said.
“Nonsense! The books are right here,” Trixie shoved a book in front us.
“Listen, we’re fine! We don’t need the book. We just want to rest,” I muttered irritatingly. Unfortunately, Trixie wasn’t getting the message.
Trixie smiled. “But you’re pregnant. Wouldn’t you want to be a better mommy?”
I glared at her as my hormones rose. “I’m not taking that book.” I crossed my arms under my chest.
I was on the verge of losing control, just barely able to contain myself. Trixie was being persistent and it wasn’t helping my case.
“Please, Trixie. I think we’re okay. For the love of all, don’t push Adagio over the edge,” Twilight warned nervously.
“Surely, she’d like at least one book? Potty training, diaper changing? Anything?” Trixie stated. She approached me once again and shoved the book in front of my face.
I glared and stood up. I was barely able to control myself anymore, my hormones reaching the peak of their limit. I swatted the book out of my face and stood up.
“Listen, how many times do I have to tell you that we don’t need any books?!” I hissed angrily. Trixie laughed nervously.
“I see. Perhaps, you’d like one that’ll tell you how to take care of your hormones?” Trixie offered.
“Yeah, because my hormones are worse when I talk to stupid people like you!” I shot back.
“Adagio, stop it. You’re making a scene,” Sunset whispered. I huffed and looked around. A couple of people stopped and turned their attention in our direction. I felt embarrassed.
“Trixie, you should be more considerate, especially to pregnant women. If a person doesn’t want one, please don’t force them,” Twilight scolded. Trixie lowered her head in shame.
I sighed deeply and calmed down. “I… I-I’m sorry.” I apologized. I turned and left the scene.
“Adagio wait!”
I heard Sunset’s call but I ignored it. Shortly, a hand landed firmly, but gently on my shoulder.
“Adagio, are you okay?” I sighed deeply and nodded.
“Yeah. I’m fine. Sorry about that.” Sunset gave me a warm hug.
“It’s fine. You’re not at fault,” she reassured.
“Yeah. Trixie shouldn’t have been forcing you like that,” Twilight added.
“She should’ve known better. Anyway, I think we should go wait over there. I’ll call Rarity and let her know where to meet us.”
The girls and I were walking down the road to Clavier’s house. Rarity was carrying several bags full of materials for her boutique while Sunset carried the bag of items for the baby’s clothing.
“My, that was… quite an encounter,” Rarity said, referring to my outburst.
“I know. I’m not mad nor do I hold anything against her. My hormones just kicked in and it just… happened,” I explained.
“Hormones sound like a pain huh?” Twilight asked. I rolled my eyes back.
“You have no idea. One day, you’ll get to experience it when Flash is taking care of you,” I teased. I noticed a faint blush on her cheeks. Calmed down, I let out a laugh.
“T-that’s not going to happen!” Twilight stuttered.
“Keep telling yourself that,” I said. Twilight groaned, making us all giggle. It felt good to get a little payback after being teased earlier.
We reached the house and I opened the door. Sunset gave me the bag of baby’s clothing.
“Thanks again girls. I appreciate it.” I turned to Twilight and Sunset. “Sorry about earlier.” They shook their heads.
“Really, it’s fine,” Sunset dismissed. I chuckled.
“Alright then. Next time?” The girls nodded. I opened my arms and wrapped the girls in a group hug. I felt the girls wrap their arms around me in return.
“Thank you guys. You’re the best.”
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Yikes. Adagio's definitely starting to feel the stress of it all and letting the hormones get to her. I must say though, I certainly wasn't expecting Trixie to appear.
Kind of the last character you'd expect to appear in a story like this, unless it was for Sonata or Aria's birthday parties when they get old enough. (If you're planning to continue the story that far.) Anyways, nice job as ever and great work on surprising me!
7381091 That was some quick reading haha. No problem.
7381097 Yep, I'm a fast reader. That's me! I'm like the Flash when is comes to reading chapters!
Awww...don't do that Trixie. Poor Adagio....
Wow!Trixie is so annoying!Poor Dagi...
Hey,I'm going to make a fanfic where the three Dazzlings get pregnant,any advices?
Great chapter!I'm looking forward for the next chapter!
7381238 Well, I'm not sure what useful advice I can give but nevertheless, I wish you the best of luck with your plans!
7381296 Thank you.
Trixie was pushing it there. Just saying.
7381497 I kind of regret how I portrayed Trixie in this. Personally. I like her character despite her boastful attitude.
Aw, man! This is getting better! Keep on going, mate!
7381804 Cheers my good chap!
7381809 Also, here's something that got to me:
Is this going to be a really huge story? Cause Aria's being born, yet Sonata will have to be born, then the motherhood... How long of a story are you expecting?
7382541 Oh quite long my friend. There's a lot to cover.
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7382752 Done!
It seems you hold hidden potential, man! The steady pace of the story's development, the plot, the portrayal of the character's feelings and of course, the romance! You've done quite well writing (Something I didn't expect you would do in real-life
) and I'll look forward to its progress! Keep it up bro! You deserve the credit!
I fear for my life when I get married and my wife is pregnant.
7390923 Don't worry chap. I'm sure you'll have friends and family there by your side If you want, I'll be here for moral support too. Things may look really difficult and scary before it happens, but I'm sure the joys of marriage and parenthood outweighs the concerns. Stay committed to the woman of your life always. Best of luck ahead for your future.
7390923
Oh, you'll be fine. My kid's ten now, and the scars have started to fade, the nervous tic is barely noticeable, and I only wake up screaming two or three nights a week.