Oooh, this is pretty good already. I'll be watching this closely...

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Haha, glad to hear you enjoyed it. ;3

More depravity to come soon!

I found this terribly cute. Good job!

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Glad you enjoyed it! I'm not sure if things will remain as cute going forward but something tells me people will enjoy it anyway.

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I certainly will, anyway.

It's hard not to think of this when reading.

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Haha I should watch more black adder. My family watched it while I was growing up but I was too young to appreciate it

If my story brings this to mind then maybe I should add the comody tag!

This is nice so far. Some spelling mistakes but not many:

The sigenario simply poured into her mind like sweet ambrosia.

scenario

Twilight moaned, louder then she would have normally allowed herself to in her old home.

that should be 'than'

they both came harder then either had ever thought possable

possible

rocketed forth into her silicone fucktool with impossable force.

impossible, like the above one.

I'll definitely be following this, have a like

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Thanks for the point outs. All fixed!

Unapologetic, shameless clop. Oh Celestia, I want to read more!

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More's on the way sooner then you think ;3

6326481 Oh please. I need it right now.

Looking foward for more :3 .. this was very fun to read

what the hell is wrong with some people

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Glad you liked it! What follows will be either very fun or very horrific depending on your point of view.

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Yay! My first negative comment! I am now officially a clop writer!

6329406 im not judging are trying to be rude, its just I don't like crap like this is all

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im not judging

are trying to be rude,

its just I don't like crap like this is all

Sounds judgey and rude to me.

6329454 sorry let me restate what I said '' I don't like stories like these and I was just thinking what's wrong with people when I saw the comments''

6329406 and I apologize for what I said, people will like what they want

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Fair enough. Honesty is fine in my books so I'll give some back to you.

The few seconds you spent adding a tiny tidbit of negativity to a world that's already overflowing with it could have been spent investigating the site's settings and preferences for a way to filter out "crap like this".

6329491 you make a good point, and thank you for your honesty

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No hard feelings, man. It's not like I wrote this expecting everyone to like it.

6329529 well I'm glad we sorted this out and good day sir

6329406 Welcome to my world, I can't wait to do foalcon.

Pretty good so far, I can't wait to see what happens between these two mares and where it could end up.

One suggestion for later though: cum inflation is best inflation.

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Yay! Glad you're enjoying it!

I'm not really sure how this story is gonna progress, but the general formula is gonna be: the longer it goes on, the more fucked up it's gonna get.

And yes, your choice of inflation pleases me.

She ley strwen across the mattress in her room, on her back, wings spasming excitedly against the bedsheets.

I believe you mean "lay strewn"

Only error I spotted, but it's early enough I thought "Oh god, this is going to be a potentially hot piece populated plentifully by painful spelling errors." But then I read on and it's good... so far. Tracking.

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Fixed~ Thanks you!
I hope you enjoy what comes next. >:3

Excellent, excellent. I loved this. Can't wait to see what comes next. : 3

It's always fun to read proper dirty talk from someone utterly lost in thier lust. I really like this, and I'll be watching for more.

Hmm...well, I do like TwixShy, so I'll see where this goes. From the sounds of it, this will eventually grow too dark for me to continue reading, but I'm interested to see how it goes until that point.

Very curious to see how Twi and Shy work this out at all once Twi catches up to her. I assume it will be adorable before turning depraved. A good depraved, mind you.

I'd say the ones most likely to end this for me will be rape and Mind Control. But don't let my thoughts stop you at all from doing what you want. Rape is not my thing, kinda hard to rape the willing as well, and I assume Shy is fairly willing to do stuff with Twi by that point *I don't see Shy having any luck raping an Alicorn. ^^;;;*

And mind control always takes the fun out the reading for me in general. Hypnosis to make someone aroused when a certain phrase is said can be amusing, but mind control is just not fun to me. A listless zombie that gives no reaction due to only taking orders? I, myself, do not understand the appeal. But, again, that's just me.

Good luck to you on this, and curious to see how this goes.