Absolute Terror
Scootaloo froze, her heart racing in her chest. “N-no...” she stuttered, unable to comprehend what she was seeing. Her wings drooped down, her ears flicked back, and her eyes widened as large as dinner plates. “No!” She was so terrified that she felt her bones turn to jelly.
She turned and ran back to her bedroom. Slamming the door behind her, she fumbled with the lock for a few seconds before she got it to turn. Looking for avenues of escape, Scootaloo looked at the window before throwing the idea out of her mind. The window’s latch had been permanently stuck in the locked position, and she wasn’t anywhere near strong enough to break the glass. On top of that, she didn’t see anything she could use to break it. Scootaloo knew that the locked door wouldn’t hold her father back for long, so she frantically darted around her room, looking for anything to barricade the door with.
Her eyes fell on her nightstand; it was the only thing that was light enough for her to move. She swiped everything off of its surface, not caring about her favorite comic that she’d left behind. Scootaloo had left behind quite a bit of her old personal life. Part of her wished that she had come back to grab some of her personal belongings, but that opportunity was long gone now.
As she heard her parents run upstairs, she got behind her nightstand and put all of her weight against it as she pushed. It barely budged. She strained against it, her hooves uselessly scraping against the wood floor. “Come on! Move!” she yelled, hearing her parents make it just outside of her door.
Scootaloo gave up on trying to push the nightstand. Instead of trying to push it in front of the door, she grabbed the bottom of it and tried to tip it on its side. She pulled upwards as hard as she could, making her hind legs tremble from the sudden stress. Her back started to hurt, but she forced herself to forget about the pain, especially when she saw that it started to tilt. A sudden and jarringly loud hit on the door shocked her, making her drop it on her back left hoof.
“Ow!” she cried out. Another bang on the door made her look up in terror. The doorknob jiggled wildly, only making her freak out even more. She heard her parents hit the door again, and much to her disbelief, she saw it start to splinter in the middle. Her breaths came in short pants and her heart was beating so fast she thought it was going to break through her skin and escape. Scootaloo watched, utterly terrified, as the splinter suddenly became a small hole with another hit.
Her terror giving her the strength she needed, she put her front hooves back under the nightstand’s edge and pulled upwards with all of her strength. It didn’t budge much at first, but she was able to make it fall on its side, half of it laying in front of the door.
Now that she had bought herself more time, she took a couple of deep breaths and looked around. She was trapped in her room, and the only way to safety was through her window. Scootaloo knew the door wouldn’t hold forever. Her head whipped about. She didn’t see anything sitting around her room, so she dashed over to her closet. She whipped the door open and rummaged through the mess until she found her old scooter. Her breath catching in her throat, she stared at it, wondering if she’d be able to use it to break the window. Another bang on the door, followed by sounds of the door splintering even more, made her make up her mind rather quickly. She heard her father breathing heavily and her mother egging him on, although she couldn’t make out what she was saying.
Scootaloo grabbed the scooter and pulled it out of her closet. She shot a glance over her shoulder as the door broke nearly in half. Her father was peering through the door with one eye.
“Be a good little filly for once and unlock this door, hm? I promise I’ll make it quick...”
Hearing that scared Scootaloo to heights previously unknown. Scootaloo lifted her prized possession as high as she could and threw it at her window. The glass cracked, but it didn’t shatter like she had hoped. She lifted her scooter again and threw it at the same place.
“Aw, come on, now! Don’t be like that!”
With one last throw, the glass finally shattered. Her scooter fell through the window to the snow just outside of her window, disappearing in the thick snow. The sight of the glass shattering brought hope to her. She swiped at some of the jagged glass, trying to widen the hole. It was just big enough to fit her forelegs through but not the rest of her body. The sound of the door splintering apart scared the living daylights out of her, and as she swiped at the glass again, she cut her hoof on a particularly sharp piece. The pain from that was just enough to make her falter, giving her father the time her needed to break down the door.
Scootaloo’s head snapped around just in time to see her father rush over to her, a maniacal grin on his face. She tried to push herself through the small hole she made, uncaring as to how bad the glass would cut her, but her father grabbed her hind legs and yanked, nearly ripping her away from the window. The sharp glass cut into her legs, but she wouldn’t let go. She couldn’t.
“Help! Rainbow, anypony, please help me!” Scootaloo screamed at the top of her lungs a moment before her father tossed her all the way across the room. She hit the floor hard, knocking most of the breath from her lungs. Her head slammed into the wall, making her vision become blurry. Scootaloo tried to get up and used a wing to help her do so, but before she could stand up all the way, her father stomped on it. Pain exploded from her wing, making her scream out in agony. It was the same wing that had been broken before and it sure felt like it was broken in the same place.
Scootaloo looked around for any other possible avenues of escape. She thought to make a run for the hallway, but her mother stood in the doorway. Her wings were flared and held low, blocking any avenue of escape that Scootaloo once might have had.
Scootaloo’s chest heaved up and down as she looked up at her father in fear. Knowing exactly what Rainbow Dash would do, Scootaloo tried to put on a defiant look, but the pain was simply too much to bear. He simply stared right back at her, his unsettling grin never faltering. She whimpered as she slumped down against the wall. “Wha... what are you going to do to me?!” she asked, her voice trembling. She couldn’t stop shaking. The bones in her legs felt like jelly again, and the pain from her broken wing robbed her of her strength.
“What do ya think, ya runt?” he asked with a chuckle. As her father raised his hoof to hit her, Scootaloo came to one simple conclusion: she was going to die.
Rainbow... save me, please!
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.... Damn feels.
6494407 yeah
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I am feeling a lot of emotions right now... the most prominent is anger... anger at her parents...
I'm going to take both of her parents... and then I say to them...
I'm going to break your legs, yank out all of your teeth, cut out your tongues, chop off your ears, clip her wings, gouge your eyes out, use your bodies as a punching bag...
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Awesome chapter...
I'm going to have fun playing with her parents~
Who's with me~?
6494432 Agree
6494466
...and no one's posted this yet?
Okay... did the parents escape? Cos if they did, I am going to hunt them down and slowly tear them to pieces.
Talk about a roller coaster chapter...
...is it weird I could see the damage to Scoot's wings actually somehow fixing what was wrong with them that prevented her from flying? Or is that just stupid wishful thinking?
I want to stalk her parents though the woods like a wolf stalking a dear. Then End Them.
I want them to know fear.
Morgan: I swear if I ever see her parents I'll use them both as test subjects for my sciece experiments
When will Twilight get the M word? SHe done just as much for Scoots, and if I know my stories, she will do even more soon!
6494510 i hope twilight get the m word soon
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Don't know how to reply to this chapter honestly. Lots of conflicting emotions.
That was a sweet ending to the chapter! Hope Scoots gets better.
The amout of ANGER RIGHT NOW!!!....ok ok I have got to calm down..HER PARENTS NEED TO DIE!
Wow. That was an amazing chapter, you outdid my expectations, again! Keep up the amazing work!
Okay the Here's Daddy line was so painfully out of place it made me physically cringe, and destroyed both the immersion and tension you'd managed to build through the scene.
The strain on their relationship felt forced at best and artificial at worst. While I'm not saying it doesn't have a place, it was simultaneously overblown and underplayed. It took up too much space considering the other circumstances, and was resolved far too quickly. That's something that should have lasted a few chapters. You have to take time to build tension for the fluffy snuggles at the end to pay off.
Dunno, but this fic just feels really off to me. The first one felt the same way but not as pronounced.
How I processed my feels throughout this chapter.
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Those
basrardsbastards hurt Scoots...(my reaction)okay
1: The guards in the prison need to be fired.
2: They now have attempted Murder on their list of charges. NO EASY way for them.
3: If a guard happens to kill them I have NO PROBLEM with it.
Alright. I have my iPad, Nutella, and milk.
Time to read this.
You WILL be, one of the most memorable people in MY life; if this makes me cry...
ALRIGHT, LETS DO THIS!!!
Right in the feels.
You were close but no cigar. Walking Dead, Game of Thrones, and Fallout:Equestria can do a number on ya.
damn just damn...I really hope Equestria has the death penalty in your universe cuse scoots parents truly deserve it something slow and painful that will take months or even years to kill them
Okay, I think I speak for everyone when.... *ahem*
*opens a box, takes out a rusty screwdriver*
For maximum pain.
As a princess, Twilight, you're expected to respond to threats normal guards and law enforcement officials cannot deal with. This means you must also learn everything about physical combat; you cannot rely on magic alone. It's important to know the secrets behind proper hoof-to-hoof combat: if you don't know how to hit, you'll only risk hurting your own hoof.
The best way to learn how to punch is to use live targets. "Live targets" such as Scootaloo's biological parents. Princesses Celestia and Luna here will both be your instructors. You may begin.
And Dash, don't worry. You will get your turn too.
I'm glad Scoot's alright.
But what happened to her former psychopathic parents?
I feel something. Not sadness, not anger, and definitely not happiness. I feel rage. A rage as big as when my parents took my video games away.
And here's what I'm gonna do:
First, I'll hack off the mother's hind leg, and I'll stuff it in the father's ass all the way in. Then, I'll take the fathers hind leg, wrap his sawed off wing around it, and force it into the mother's mouth. (I will take it out before they die.) After that, I will break the rest of their legs, take one off each, feed it to them raw with one of their eyeballs each, then make them drink the sweat from my balls. Next, I will drop two 100 pound weights on their wings, pull them up from their bodies, thus, ripping their wings off painfully. Then finally, my Dragon God OC will use his never-ending slow burning fire, to burn them forever... slowly
Am I being a bit over dramatic?
BTW, great chapter, continue.
When Twilight finally sees her parents:
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and damn you! my feels!!!
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that hurt...so much feels!
6494605 It felt a bit like an entire soap opera story arc compressed into one episode. The dad was pretty funny though. I'm going for him.
I'm glad Scoots is alright but after what her "parents" did. I personally hope the order is kill on sight!
I think these two douche bags need to be branded with 'Filly Abuser' on their faces so no pony ever helps them ever. I hope this is the last time they lay hands on Scoots and that Rainbow and Twilight get to lay the smackdown on them soon. I think inflicting every injury they've ever given Scootaloo is a good starting point, then we get creative!
6494457 dont' stop at their legs, break every bone in their bodies!!!!
6494793 Close, try a dulled rusty spoon
6494819 I advocate breaking every bone in their bodies, and subjecting them to dragon fire seems to quick an end.
that's its I'mma calling the Ultra Marines. from this moment forward Scootalo's parents are declared heretics may their deaths be slow and painful
6494876
Then how about this?
Then finally, my Dragon God OC will use his never-ending slow burning fire, to burn them forever... slowly...
6494640 Totally agree with you there and once I'm done I'll toss them to the scarabs.
There's only one thing left to do...
6494933 Yes we shall rain terror apon them all. THE MARINES SHALL PREVAIL! XD
Saw that new chapter was uploaded. Starts choking on bottle of coke from excitement!
You know you really love a story when you nearly die just because it continues.
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6494947 Or ya know my OC could just send them to his realm where they will feel the pain of Scoots magnified by 1000%, they would feel this pain forever and they will feel nothing but said pain and when he gets bored he will probably then just add on the pain felt by every creature in reality along with the very slow burning death you mentioned and then when they die resurrect them just to have it happen again and again and again.
“Here’s Daddy!” he yelled. GO AWAY
I'm going to hunt you down and you shall perish slowly and painfully
Also nice chapter with good feels 
now back to the murder!
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So I hear Scootaloo's parents now have a nice bit of prime real estate...On a star. Being torn apart over thousands of years. At the event horizon of a black hole.
I know somewhere Princesses Celestia and Luna are making a torture list, and Twilight and Rainbow will need everypony's help now more than ever,
There's more than shit about to hit the fan here.
6494947 Much better.
6494933 Slow and painful is too good for them, how about being torn slowly limb from limb, for eternity.
6495183 that could work too
This definitely wasn't as gut wrenching as I thought, but gut wrenching nonetheless. Now excuse as I go into this corner and cry.
G-Good work, by the way...
this reference made me roll on the floor, laughing for a few minutes.
lol. I took the "here's daddy" as a reference!
"HEEEERES BRUCEEEEYY!!!!"
do you even know what I referenced?
6495290 yeah finding nemo