Crossover: MLP/Destiny (game)
The Guardians stand as the last of humanity's defense against forces of Darkness that seek to destroy everything. Guardians know their mission is to protect Earth, but the Darkness threatens to spread to other realms, to grow more powerful and spell doom for humankind.
A young Warlock takes her duties to a world beyond, and finds that this new world is much more connected to her own than she thought. New enemies, new allies, and new friends; Lexine will seek to discover the secrets of this magical land and the answers behind her very existence.
She must -- to save both worlds.
[Set before the events of TTK; MLP FiM "Twilight's Kingdom"]
Chapters (6)
i like this. very well written, and the pacing seems fine (even though I'm not a good judge on that.) 2 things near the beginning though:
"What do you think is in there?" she asked to her small, mechanical companion as he casted light ahead of them.
I'm pretty sure casted isn't a word. just 'cast' is the right way to say that.
Curious as always when encountering new places, the Guardian had to mentally focus herself on the mission at hand, fighting the urge to examine artifacts and technology that hasn’t fallen on human eyes for hundreds of years. The rather lengthy and, so far, uneventful trek into the depths of the facility did little to stay her impulsiveness.
I know what you're saying, but I think you got the phrase wrong. it should be human eyes falling on the ancient artifacts, not artifacts falling on human eyes. also, don't mix tenses. replace hasn't with hadn't.
I hope you have fun writing this!
6311874 Fixed! Thanks so much!
I really should look into getting a proofreader... especially since I have trouble in staying consistent in tense. I would sometimes stare at a sentence because I wouldn't know what form of the word I should write in.
Anyways, thanks for the help and the kind words!
I like it though some things were bothering me.
"In the heart of what was once the most POPULOUS cities on earth."
I think you mean populated. Though that is a small error that can be fixed. This next one however.
"The Hive are here!"
I thought the hive hadn't been on Earth in centuries after the guardians pushed them back to the moon? And the only recorded sightings of hive being on earth were in very contained spots in old Russia? That information most likely would have drawn more of the ghosts attention.
I hope there is an explanation for this. But until then I continue my read.
6316079 Error fixed! Thanks for the heads up! Need a proofreader...
As for the second point, any occurrence of the Hive on Earth would be a very pressing manner indeed!
Very well writen. I am looking forward to the bext update.
Great job!
I agree with Lexine here. Fire team lone and I will gladly help you torch the hall of guardians and steal that jumship, Lex. (Gives Exo salute.)
Awesome story so far, this might end up a decent crossover!
Lex looks like a really interesting character and I'm excited to see what she does next. Like her, I'm not a big fan of PvP in destiny, either (mostly because I'm really bad at it). Lord Shaxx can suck it!
Please continue!
PS: It's obvious she's a Sunsinger Warlock (Represent!!11!!
), but have you specified what race she is? The story is tagged as human but having her be Exo or Awoken would be even more interesting!
A nice story so far. In fact, you have written something better than Bungie's employees managed!
(Just starting TTK, and I was not impressed with any of the plot in Year 1.)
You know, the conversation between Lexine and her ghost in this chapter reminded me of that opening cutscene from TTK...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WzsuqLDnA7s
It's a striking resemblance, but you posted the chapter 5 days before TTK. So I guess it's the other way around.
6426605 Lexine is a human.
Now this is a crossover! Many crossover fics I read awkwardly mash the two universes together and hope that our suspended disbelief takes care of everything else. Please continue!
Oh FUCK yeah the hive is coming to equestria and knowing the hive it will kill every single living thing until nothing but the hive soldiers will walk the planet of Equis thinking up ways to capture other planets to do so oh man Croat will be so proud of he won't kill...hopefully
human why are kairiuis is not advancing on the new planet?
Right away Croat they are boarding the ships now!hehe please don't kill me
Oh shit. Hive. Well, time to KICK SOME ASS!
Let's go! (Readies Hawkmoon)
Great chapter, as always.
just in time for the april update too
Alright here's the plan... Lexine takes the ones on the right, the girls get the left, and the princesses get the ones in the middle.
I'm gonna pot shot the ships cause I'm helping!
I have been waiting for this. This is some good sh*t. Keep it up
Oryx? Please tell me you are planning oryx!?!?!
Vonderbar! Fantastic! Amazing! Awesome!
This is great, I read this story already, but it was before I knew of Destiny, but I've been playing the game and when I read this story again, everything now makes sinces and makes tjs story even more awesome now, hope to read the next chapter soon
7116665 Bad Juju, Obsidian Mind, and Dead Orbit armor all around
Like the story so far and can't wait for the next chapter. The only real gripe I have is Celestia addressing her sister. Public or not, I doubt she uses the 'princess' title as often as you think. I also recall her telling Twilight to drop it ever since her transformation.