In the wake of Terik's attack on Equestria, a large number of ponies did not in fact get everything back. Vinyl Scratch is one of these ponies, having completely lost her voice. However she discovers she still has at least one die hard filly fan who wants more and more to be just like her.
As she tries to teacher her hyperactive fan about how to be a DJ, or at least how to dance without looking like a pony firecracker, she and the filly share warm moments and an awesome time.
Turns out I'm not allowed to use chapters to notify people of sequals. Here's the sequal, it has a different tone but the same characters: Mentoring Is Awesome: Facing Fear
Did I mention she's mentoring the adoptive child of a dragon? Yes, this will be a wild ride ponies! Just like Vinyl likes it.
This is a series of short stories that aren't necessarily directly connected, save for having the same characters and premise. Translation, it's episodic.
Just to note, I hate that I have to choose EITHER Slice of Life or Adventure. It's not like the series we're all writing fanfics on is BOTH or anything.
Hm.
While I rather like the idea overall (and it's not a bad headcanon for why Vinyl doesn't speak, either; I like the notion that Equestria didn't just walk away from the Tirek Incident completely unscathed)... I really don't think it's necessary to give the kids super-powers as a result of a Mysterious Dark Past of having been experimented on by Evil Mad Scientists, and all that. In fact, I'd strongly advise against it; that's the sort of thing that tends to make readers write OCs off as "Mary Sues" and downvote the story just on general principles.
(Oh, by the by -- it's spelled "Tirek", not "Terik."
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No offense, but changing her based on poorly thought out preconceived notions... doesn't that contradict the entire message of the story here?
I guess I know where you're coming from, but Lightning is a doppel ganger for an original character from an original series. Her powers are actually very limited to the point where a few of the mane six could straight up embarrass her both athletically and in a fight with or without them. Jessica, the character she's based on, might be able to compete, but Lightning Strike is a little kid pony. No offense to you, but If people are gonna call a character with obvious weaknesses such as being a bit of a brat, uncoordinated, scatterbrained, socially awkward and a little dumb, "Mary Sue" because she has different abilities, that's kinda their problem. Mary Sue, is not defined as, "having gifts that cause you more problems than they fix and having ligit character flaws".
love it! Dude, keep it up cant wait for the next chap.
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Perhaps "Mary Sue" isn't the right term, by the strictest definition, but as a catch-all term for "OC with one or more excessively overused clichés as defining character traits", it's serviceable enough, I think.
I'm just saying, I personally found it a bit jarring and dissonant. Up 'til that point, it seemed like it was developing into a pleasant enough slice-of-life story about Vinyl Scratch, with a potentially-interesting take on the character... and then suddenly, wham!, all this bollocks about Evil Mad Scientists turning ponies into Living Weapons with powers they can seemingly barely control (and yet, despite the obvious hazards they would present, are allowed to just wander about unsupervised?) just seems to come right out of nowhere, without serving any particular purpose to the plot. Usually, that sort of thing is a sign of an author trying a little too hard to establish their favorite OC as being "so-much-more-extra-super-special-than-everyone-else" right out of the gate, especially when it appears to be at odds with the type and genre of story as a whole.
Were this to be the start of a "dark adventure" story, the whole mad-scientist/living-weapons thing might be appropriate, but it feels rather misplaced in a relatively light slice-of-life comedy, I'm afraid. The story, and your characters, would be better served without it, I think.
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Wait till the next chapter and you'll see the father of the two foals. Really I don't see Lightning as all that different from filly Rainbow Dash, she set off a sonic rainboom at around the same age right?
Trust me, Lightning's abilities will make for a lot of fun scenes. I'm basically having Vinyl explore some scenarios she never would have expected. Much of the comedy will come from her reactions. She's a strong pony who can go with the flow, but some of the things she's gonna see are gonna throw even her for a loop. I guess this might end up reading like some animes in the end.
Pretty good so far. Can't wait to see more.
Going great Sciwriter! Keep up the good work and a good way to end the chapter. Can't wait to see what will be the reaction that Lightning will have that she gets to stay with her favorite DJ, for a little bit.
This story is getting very interesting and cant wait to see what will be in the next chapter. I am wondering is it possible for Vinyl to get her voice back anyway? Just out of curiosity. Anyway, keep up the great work and I love how this story is coming out.
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There will be a story on that, but I'm holding back on it. A bit of a hint, what would you sacrifice for your voice?
Yay! Someone else shares my love of good music!
Italo Forever!
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Thanks. I really need to get back to this story soon. After writing this I so wanted to find a video of someone tap dancing to that song, but no luck.
I liked how Discord was added to the story. I feel that Vinyl should pay Fluttershy a visit.
7126425 There's an interesting thought. I'm curious, why would she visit Fluttershy in particular?
I think I said it before, Discord is really interesting in a lot of stories because of all the things he can do. In action stories he kills suspense of course, but in a story like this, he creates dilemma's and excuses for situations that otherwise couldn't occur.
7127432 why the visit? Vinyl has been to a future where Lightning is worse, and it was Fluttershy who forced Discord to change it back. Whether or not it makes things better, I still think Vinyl at least should visit her, to see if it helps
It just now occurred to me to wonder, is Celestia's school is a boarding school? Because that's the first thing I compared Vinyl's offer to.