I have no idea what to put here.
Takes place in Calm Wind's Wonderverse
Blaze; the overconfident and vulgar-mouthed fire handler of Squad Two.
Spitfire; the serious and duty-bound captain of the Wonderbolts, as well as the lead squad.
One day Blaze decides to disguise herself as her older half-sister, Spitfire. It was only meant to be a harmless prank, nothing more. But what happens when she takes it a bit too far, just for the fun of it?
Rated 'T' for swearing
Cover art by me
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Well, I loved it xD
For some reason, I can just see Spitfire making her sister write a letter to Princess Luna.
"Dear Princess Luna
Today I learned about leadership...."
xD
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That's an awesome idea! IF I were to write another chapter, I would totally include that!
Except that it would probably go along the lines of: "Sup Princess Luna, today I learned about leadership and responsibility by destroying a gym (kinda)..."
Or maybe not xD
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Hehe, yeah Blaze wouldn't be one to be all proper.
Of course, Luna would just read it and go "Destroyed a gym...? And learned about leadership? Reminds me of the time me and Celestia...." or something.
Regardless! Awesome story! I added it to my favorites
BEST WONDERVERSE SPIN-OFF!
YOU MY FRIEND HAVE WON A TROPHY!
I LUV IT!!!!!!!!
That was AWESOME I reaaaalllyyyyy loved it
I love it a vary good one shot. a vary good job.
Harts Fire
WAIT
OH WOW
I JUST SAW MY STORY IN THE ALSO LIKED LIST
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Thank you all so much for reading and commenting! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story.
Oh man... Spitty let Blaze do this?!
Wow, Spitfire... I didn't know you could pull a Troll...
Bet you didn't think Blaze was playing with fire and would wind up setting the gym on fire though...
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Yeah. . . I might have made her just the slightest bit out-of-character. . . I hope Calm isn't upset at me for ruining his characters.
Well that's actually very easy to believe, seeing how Blaze's mind works.
Oh my God,that was so awesome!!!
Like,fav and follow!!!
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Thank you so much!
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No prob,looking forward to see more from you
This is cute! The way Blaze seduced Wave Chill
If you could only see my face right now...which is
times infinity
Awesome story! [infinity] Pinkies out of ten Pinkies
Hahaha that was really clever. I could see most of the pranks coming, but i wanted them to happen regardless and they did xD (I knew there was gonna be some Wave seducing in there somewhere)
I knew it was going to be fun from the moment Fleet almost pounced on her at the beginning.
Though i must say i was very interested in the way you took it from straight humor to actually having a bit of a moral towards taking things too far and dealing with leadership.
And i was quite surprised by Spitfire admitting she knew at the end/actually using the prank to get some 'time off' for paperwork
I was curious from the start where Spitfire was and that was a great way to bring her in.
In terms of the characters, since im sure you are curious how you did:
Blaze: Pretty spot on, it was funny having her hold back the swears.
Fleetfoot: I approve :3 Super bubbly and getting right up in Blaze's grill as if she's Spitfire.
Air Mach: Pretty good, but he's a hard one to get perfect since he's directly based on the specific idiocy of character from something else.
Soarin: I liked how he was the one who was a little skeptical
I likely would have don the same thing with him in this situation.
Spitfire: I'm not sure she'd take the risk with Blaze, but for the sake of the story and the funny ending, i loved it
Silver: Grabbing Blaze by the neck seemed a little bit much. Silver is blunt, hard, and unsympathetic to shenanigans, but under the circumstances he'd probably just tower over her for intimidation and give her is best glare. Otherwise, you nailed how he acted perfectly loyal and dutiful while under the impression Blaze was Spitfire.
Wave Chill: 10/10 that darn stallion just can't handle the flirting
High Winds: Somepony wake up that mare...
With the rest there wasn't enough for them for me to fairly judge, but i did like Surprise's little line she had
I had fun reading this! It's always interesting to see other authors take on my characters. Sorry it took me so long to get to this
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Augh... I haven't been on here for ages... stupid high school...
Sorry for the late reply, but thanks a lot for reading this and especially for giving me feedback. It's been almost a year and a half since I wrote this... I'm surprised I still remember what it was like writing it. xD It was actually kind of challenging for me to write out this plot while trying to keep the characters' personalities. I remember there were a handful of characters I found especially tricky to write, like Silver and maybe Air Mach, and I was actually fretting about how you would respond to my way of writing them. But overall, it was a great writing experience and I guess I could say the story was successful as well.
Wish I could go back to writing like I used too...
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Thats PRECISELY why im trying to finally get to these, because i know, more than anything, people want to hear my opinion on how they wrote my characters
THERE NEEDS TO BE MORE I WAS ADDICTED