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RoyalCanterlotVoice98


Hi, thanks for taking the time to read my fanfics, which I put a lot of effort into. If you hate fluttercord, beware!

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Note: I put the entire story into one chapter so the chapters would not be so short!

I remember how I loved causing chaos as a young draconequus. Chaos is fun, what can I say? I loved

the feeling of being a puppet master, pulling at the strings of other ponies.

One day, while I was up in a tree making it rain chocolate milk on two little fillies, a voice, very delicate

and deep, almost made me jump out of my skin.

"Why are you up here?"

I turned around, startled. There, sitting on the same branch as I, was the most beautiful pony I had

ever seen, with a sleek white coat, bright magenta eyes, and a lovely pink mane.

I didn't want her and I to be on bad terms, so I put my hands behind my back and quickly snapped my

fingers to make my chocolate milk cloud vanish. "N-nothing,' I sputtered, my eyes wide. She looked at me

closely. "You seem lonely. Would you like to play with my sister, Luna, and I?"

"Sure," I said, a little too enthusiastically.

"Wonderful! My name's Celestia."

"I'm Discord."

...End of preview.

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Comment posted by RoyalCanterlotVoice98 deleted Aug 21st, 2015

I might take this down. Thoughts? Any objections? It's just kind of old and amateur:moustache:

Thanks! That's exactly how I feel with this story too. It was my first fanfic after all. I will try to remake it, but not anytime soon. I'm developing a new story and working on another. I appreciate you being brutally honest because sometimes it's best not to sugarcoat it.

I do think you should remake it so it would look a lot more professional. And it would give me a nice long Fluttercord story to read. I have no objections to this story other the
An the fact that it was a little rushed, but my first one is still in need of a lot of editing. But good work! I love it!:heart:

Did you write this in wordpad or something similar with wordwrap? Because that tends to lead to awkward line breaks like you have and makes it a bit hard to read. :twilightsheepish:

If this is your first I never want to see your last. It was cute and lovable with all the fluff of a Fluttercord story I always love! Always keep writing because it will only get better.:yay:

*Slowly starts applauding with tears in my eyes*
Beautiful. Just... beautiful.

Fluttershy then proceeds to cry. "And to think... I- I liked him."

Oh yeah all over now. 😂

"Princess Luna told me everything at the party."

LUNA OMG QUEEN 💙🖤

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