[First person through Rainbow Dash's perspective]
Just another sunny morning in Cloudsdale, and everything is just as usual...
...except what comes next in the afternoon...
Nearly everypony is at the annual Wonderbolt festival, including ponies who could afford getting the ability to stand in Cloudsdale.
Everything seems to go as awesome as every year, until something goes terribly wrong, and Rainbow Dash is right in the middle of it.
Will she survive? And if she does, will she be able stand back up?
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*Author's note* This is my first ever fanfic that I am writing from first person, so cut me some slack, but I would also love criticism to my writing style/grammar. Criticism helps me improve as I write future chapters, and maybe future fanfics.
Hey readers
I do appreciate anything sort of criticism that you might have. I won't bite, but giving a thumbs down without telling me a reason is simply not beneficial. For those trolls, it's not going to work here.
Anyway here is an awesome theme music by Aviators to get you started:
Click!
dat pic
short, but pretty awesome
DUN, DUN, DUN, DUN
This is a really good story, but you should find a pre reader. There are a lot of small mistakes that having an extra person read it over could fix.. It's amazing how much it helps a story.
Anyways, can't wait to see where this is going; keep up the good work!
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Now that's the criticism I want
Sorry, haven't had the time to edit anything of it because I am kinda forced to rush this. One day I will do a massive edit in exchange for not doing a chapter (which will probably be around chapter 10)
awwww sheet
Too busy to read right now(will look later), all though I have to congratulate you on using broken wings as something other than a shipping device.