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Hi my name is Crystal Soul! I went to a con as my online character from bleach.
I bought this cool sword of Ichigo's bankai and a cute plushy of kid Nel Tu.
I took tow steps from the seller, when I saw him about to use some weird stick thing.
Now I know who the creepy guy is. The creepy guy is the one who sends people to new world's.
I just got an idea!!
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You know it's going to be a fun ride when the description is unreadable.
If you are searching for an editor - look for a group, which is used for promoting editors. I know there are some, just dont know how many of these there are.
6291750 I think this is a Bleach Displaced fic, not a a trollfic given the premise. Grammer could use some work for sure but that's what editors are for. I assume the author still needs to find one.
Get a proofreader and editor
6304115 The biggest reason why I thought it was a trollfic was because of the terrible spelling and grammar, along with a few other flaws. However, the author contacted me, giving me a pretty good reason for the wording problems (provided the author is telling the truth, but I have no reason to distrust them). I'm pretty sure that you're right about this being a Bleach displaced fic. I might continue reading (although I really don't like HiE stories nor crossover fics) if the author gets an editor to really clean this up.
6304556 Ok then.
I felt my soul wither as I read this.
seriously, you need an editor. or if you already have one, you need a new one.
If you have trouble finding an Editor here is the Perfect group for that.
Looking for Editor
Oh boy generic incompetent guards Imma shaken in may boots.
she is going to have a "talk" with celestia, then have a small argument. the guard will try and arrest crystal but fail. crystal and nel will have to flee from canterlot.
more please!
If you write another chapter, then you need an editor.
I start to think, that you could be one of my favourite authors, if you would just get a proofreader for a second opinion, and maybe an editor.
, and didn´t waited for her to answer my question.
I´m not sure if her going into that hospital room, and Twilight Velvet even wanted it, ...well I´m not sure if that could be bad enough for the princess to arrive, or why was she there?
I actually only don´t know what to think about the sudden arrival of the princess.
Not sure if that was already the third, or fourth story I had read from you, but even if you write it in a nice way, I noticed that you maybe really like to make your characters a little bit, or nearly OP.
I think I like Puppet, and that Forest Changeling (Rose?) the most till now.
aaaaw man I was hoping for a cross over
Why was this cancelled
6839475 It back and thanks for bring life back into this story.
6869668 yes thank you
6869668 Its back? YES! *Gets ready to review it*
6889325 two or three days.
Good chapter needs some spellchecking though
6901535 yes I know and think for likeing the chapter but hard to find sameone fix tham.
I'll be completely honest, your story is great and has a good plot line that could go somewhere in the future. But the only problem that I can clearly see id the grammar in this which with a lot of people causes them to stop reading. An editor could help, but all in all I give your story a 7/10 so far.
Dont take crstal haggling she fails.
This is a good story but i highly recommend you going back over with a fine tooth comb. Lots of spelling mistakes, I'm normally not one to say anything about grammar but in this case it makes it difficult to read.
Spellcheck, THEN it'll be better.
But it's STILL AWESOME
6901535 Every chapter.
Sigh* Disappointing. I like the concept but the writing needs work, i can't comfortably read this man.
Another good story is cancelled. When they'll stop killing good stories?
That’s... not how third person works.
more please
Who is the woman in the cover art and where is she from?