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PastaSparq


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After an explosion, Admiral Ackbar is sent to Equestria. Will he live through this horrid 'magic of friendship'? Is he brave enough for this?!? Will he bang Fluttershy?!?

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**Lifts up Futashy's tail**

IT'S A TRAP!

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Dangit! You beat me to it!

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Mang, I'm sorry, but it had to be done. The joke was just presenting itself in public, like a perverted pegasus.

Again, my apologies. :pinkiehappy:

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Eh, it's alri--

*sees your username*

IT'S A TRAP!

Now this made my day

The names are all switched...
Trap confirmed.

Well, whatever your wrote i found it heeeelarious. :rainbowlaugh:

I love ackbar, wherever he shows up, whether it be a cereal commercial or some mlp fic...

OH JEEZ! My brother and I were just talking about this!! Ha!

Awwww.... More dislikes than likes.....:ajsleepy:

But I don't give a fuck!:derpytongue2:

I... wha... bu...

I...

Well.

6280348 This was art. Maybe not good art, but art nonetheless.

The dialogue tags are really confusing. It's hard to tell who's talking sometimes.

"Okay then. Who the fuck are you?" She gasped at the F-bomb.

Should be:

"Okay then. Who the fuck are you?"

She gasped at the F-bomb.

This is because if you put "She gasped ..." right after Admiral Ackbar's dialogue, it makes it seem like Fluttershy gasped as she said that.


"I'm Fluttershy...." He nodded.

Should be:

"I'm Fluttershy...."

He nodded.

Same reason as above. It sounds like Ackbar is saying he's Fluttershy.


Additionally:

"Nice to meet you, my name is Admiral Ackbar." He said, pointing to himself with his appendages.

Should be:

"Nice to meet you, my name is Admiral Ackbar(,)" he said, pointing to himself with his appendages.

You need to end a quote with a comma if you're going to use a dialogue tag afterward.

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Have you even seen '60s Spider Man comes to Equestria?!? That's where I got the idea, so bad grammar is MEANT to be in it. Anyways, thanks for trying to point those out! I really appreciate it!:twilightsmile:

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Oh. I don't usually read troll fics, but I definitely got that this was supposed to be humorous. It was amusing.

This whole fic WTF its halarious tho.

Will he bang Fluttershy?!?

>rated "teen"

Will he live through this horrid 'magic of friendship'? Is he brave enough for this?!? Will he bang Fluttershy?!?

The real question is: "Is this a trap?"

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The sequel may or may not be based on that... Hehehe...

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Quick to the Mullenium Falcon! CHEWIE GET US OUT OF HERE!!!!!
GRRRRRRRRR!

Before I read this, what is the Gore tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?

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Absolutely horrible. At one point he decapitates someone and sucks on their insides in front of Fluttershy.

>hence the teen rating

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... W... Why ?

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Because I am a horrible and sadistic author who wants to watch all of his fans suffer, obviously

((none of that is actually in it, otherwise it'd be rated M!))

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You'll be fine, a spoon of butter will help the hurt go down

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Don't you mean
a spoonful of sugar helps the medicine go down

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No
What I said is exactly what I meant

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i predicted the future, this is now canon

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