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Half the time I don't even know how I do what I seem to do so well. I try not to think too hard on it, for fear of breaking myself in the process.

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This story is a sequel to It's Just A Bit of Baldness


Featured on 10/24/15, holy ****!

Twilight has been continuing her exploration and experimentation of being a nudist, and found it to be a lot easier when both Rarity and Spike are in the know. She's happy with how things are.

Rarity, however, isn't. She doesn't believe that Twilight can truly be happy with keeping such a big secret from the rest of her friends, and trying to avoid being caught by them whenever they pop over for a visit. And it's because of this, that she believes Twilight needs to let the others know about what's going on.

Twilight can't deny that there's a certain logic to her position. But that still doesn't make the idea any easier to consider.

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Yay a sequal. Wonder how celestial would handle this.

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Knowing Celestia, she might use it for trolling nobles that darken her hallways.

Curious to see where this goes. It felt well wrapped up in the previous story.

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That's why I decided to go with a sequel, rather than a simple continuation. That way any fans that don't like this one, won't have the other one spoiled.

Hillbe #5 · Oct 10th, 2015 · · 1 · Two ·

:twilightoops: Oh Stars!
:moustache: Rarity your fur!
:raritystarry: Oh dear. Spike turn away!
:twilightoops: Oh I'm sorry
:moustache: Oh wow Rarity
:duck: Oh Spikey
:facehoof: Oh no
:moustache: Oh yes:raritywink:
:applejackconfused: Oh fer crying out loud
:pinkiegasp: Twilight looks like a plucked Scootasheep!

Cool! I'm enjoying the pace of this one. Theres awkwardness and AJ being curious and supporting. It feels logical and not over the top. Its nice reading them interacting and no one is left silent.

Chimp #7 · Oct 14th, 2015 · · · One ·

:raritydespair:"Oh dear, what if I'm the only one of us who would take your baldness so...roughly? The internal embarrassment!"
:raritystarry:"Quick, we have to find Fluttershy! If anypony would be shocked by anything, it's her!"

Had she simply stayed out of the matter, this wouldn't be such a problem. But she simply hadn't been able to do that. She believed Twilight was in need of help, had established her position, had more or less pushed her in this direction... and now she was regretting ever doing such.

I like how this was in the story.

Also, Rarity...why you so pushy?

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Primarly because she can relate with Twilight about enjoying something that's not mainstream, and would even be regarded by others as a strange endeavor. She sees a bit of herself in Twilight and what she's doing, and is sort of giving her the support that she wished someone had given her.

1) Why are Dash and Rarity tribe swapped in you new cover art?
2) Why does Dash have Twilight's aura?


EDIT: Tenth!!!!

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It was the closest thing to an appropriate piece of cover art as I could find.

6562633 I thought you commissioned your cover art... There is really bald Twilight art out there?:rainbowhuh: That's a thing?
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Just checked, it's kind of a thing. But why not at least use the version of that pic where Dash has a unique rainbow aura?
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That's a thing?

Dude... With this fandom everything is a thing.:rainbowlaugh:

6487465 Hidden baldness runes for the unwary to trigger? :trollestia:

MAORRRR, IIII DEEMAANND MMMAAOORRR

And that support was going to start now, in the form of having a few words with Rainbow Dash, to ensure the cocky pegasus knew where the line was on comments that were appropriate, and those that weren't.

Oh god, that conversation is going to end in a shouting match. I can see things being said like
"Hey, I don't see you actually trying this, who are you to tell me what it's all about/?!"
"I'm not trying to tell you 'what it's all about', I'm trying to make sure you approach this in a sensitive manner!"
"Hey, are you saying I'm not sensitive to my friends feelings?!"
...And it all goes downhill from there. Applejack and Twilight are going to have a time seperating them.

Rarity is a great friend

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YES! MAAOOORRR!

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Yeah, I can totally see this. Maybe it not ending in a little fight, but definitely an argument.

So we have an alicorn, but former unicorn, a Pegasus, and an earth pony, walking into a bar.. *cough* sorry, going threw this now you have to wonder what comparisons will be made with muscle, size, etc... sans fur on the 3 of them.

Also the thought of Rainbow Dash with feathers only.. falling asleep and then flying outside forgetting she's nude. Heh.

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DumbDog #20 · Nov 6th, 2015 · · 1 · Five ·

LOL SHE'S BALD :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Just keep in mind that you mind want to grab something to eat afterward

"might"

Welp, only two others to inform. I get the feeling Pinkie is going to want to throw a "fur optinal" party once she and Fluttershy ate brought in on this.

I know it's been well-established by now, but Twilight's inability to multitask with the illusion just feels kind of wrong, especially with the whole "being an alicorn" thing. It's kind of transparent in its nature as a narrative device. Still, a good chunk of my dislike is a matter of clashing headcanons.

The tone does come off as a little didactic at times, more like the characters are lecturing the audience than talking among themselves. Still, in all, this is an interesting character study in unusual circumstances.

Finally, you may want to consider a new cover image. I can only imagine how many people might come into this expecting a race swap.

All that being said, I'm enjoying the story and am looking forward to more.

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The tone does come off as a little didactic at times, more like the characters are lecturing the audience than talking among themselves.

Well, one of them is Twilight Sparkle... :twilightsheepish:

I'm actually finding it kind of amusing how... insistent Twilight is in disconnecting nudity and sexuality. Not that she's wrong in there being no required link between the two, or it not being a sexual thing for her. More like she feels uncomfortable with the idea of it being sexual for some ponies. :rainbowlaugh:

Seriously there needs to be an M rated side story to this. The idea of a short RariLight romp exploring how shin feels :raritywink::twilightblush: It has awakened a desire I didn't know needed filling... :pinkiecrazy:

"Alright, ah think ah'm ready"
"Okay AJ I'll be right outside"
"Ah didn't say you had to go" :ajsmug:
:twilightblush:

....I'll just show myself out :trollestia:

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Fuptional if you will :pinkiecrazy:

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I know it's been well-established by now, but Twilight's inability to multitask with the illusion just feels kind of wrong, especially with the whole "being an alicorn" thing. It's kind of transparent in its nature as a narrative device. Still, a good chunk of my dislike is a matter of clashing headcanons.

I'll admit, it's narrative device. It's meant as a subversion to the notion some writers have the magic can be used as an excuse for doing anything. I like to take the other route and suggest that magic has its limits. It's also used for showing that, still being new to the subject, Twilight hasn't developed the necessary experience to perform as smoothly as others might if they had months of experience to run on.

But beyond all that, it's meant to show that Twilight is doing this because she enjoys it, and that anything worth doing isn't necessarily something easy to do.

The tone does come off as a little didactic at times, more like the characters are lecturing the audience than talking among themselves. Still, in all, this is an interesting character study in unusual circumstances.

That's an unfortunate circumstance of trying to write about a subject I'm not well versed in, being told by a character with a limited understanding of the whole subject, to characters with no understanding of the subject. It's not exactly something Twilight can just talk casually about since she has no idea how to, and it being a controversial subject in Equestria just adds to the problem.

Finally, you may want to consider a new cover image. I can only imagine how many people might come into this expecting a race swap.

I'd love to use some new cover art, but I can't find anything that seems appropriate. There's just not enough bald Twilight art around to pick from.

All that being said, I'm enjoying the story and am looking forward to more.

I don't know if I can keep up with this on a weekly basis, but I'm going to try.

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Feel free to try and write it.

6607823 well imagine you wear t-shirts a lot, it's just another regular piece of clothing. now imagine you find yourself among a group of people who have a strong sexual link with t-shirts. I'm not sure the analogy works, but for a surface level comparison, I'd imagine twi is objecting to the idea that her normal is sexual and thus by extension she is sexual.

There was no denying that an illusion spell could do a lot more than any physical costume could; like making a limb invisible so the pony in question could... Rainbow Dash might've stumbled upon a very interesting idea.

THE STEALTHBUCK! She's making the first stealthbuck! ...What, didn't anyone else think that when reading this part?:applejackunsure:

Pet the smooth pony!

I am not usually one to criticize, and it has been a clever and well written story so far, but... isn't it starting to get a tad repetitive?
I really hope there will be some shift in the next chapters, because otherwise.. well, it won't be as good a story as it could have been I guess.

Oh boy. Luna may be trying to learn all she can, but I could still see this leading to a wide variety of misunderstandings when she raises the subject with Celestia.

That said, I do have to agree with ChudoJogurt. This is starting to get a bit repetitive, especially since this chapter didn't actually accomplish anything beyond having the same conversation with a different person. Everything else doesn't really count, given the circumstances. Don't get me wrong, I'm still enjoying the story. I'd just enjoy it more if it moved on from explaining the concept to all and sundry.

This story makes me want ice cream...

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Yeah that's unfortunately a shortcoming I recognized early on when I wanted to do a sequel, but knew that the material would be pretty limited. I've got ideas for how to change things up, but they might take a while to actually get into chapter form. That's not to say I've got lots of chapters in mind where I'm repeating the same theme. It just means that the next update might take more than a couple of weeks to get published. This chapter was basically just filler for the time being.

to hide her bald seld?

With just a small pod in order to nod

Just a couple of errors there. :twilightsmile:

Also, kudos for working in one of the classic signs of dreaming. :pinkiehappy:

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I believe that it would actually help if the reactions to Twilight's nudity were more diverse. For example, if one of her friends, even if she understood and supported her, still couldn't actually bear to watch Twilight being naked. (Like if Fluttershy associated a naked pony with a badly hurt bird, or an very ill animal.)

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Oh you have NO idea how much I'd love to do something like that, and have it be a point of conflict for how things go.

OK, so, I can get how Twilight would fall back asleep; large breakfast, hot summer day, comfy place to rest and books to read but what I'm not getting is how Luna winds up in the dream if it's not going to become a nightmare.

From the way she talked it felt more like she was drawn into the dream because it was about to go south and not because she was watching the dream and saw that Twilight was bald. And while I'm one of those people that understands the latter is part of Luna's duties and not at all creepy </sincerity> you'd think she'd wait for a bit to see if Twilight even noticed that she was bald before stepping in.

Also, one does not tend to realize they can't read in a dream, but I'm going to contribute that to Luna's presence making Twilight more "aware" of her dream state than normal.

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Actually the whole chapter was written to be Twilight's dream. That was why she found it odd that Spike would be making waffles instead of pancakes, but didn't think to overly question why. It's not that she fell back asleep, she just hasn't woken up yet.

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Oooooooh. That makes sense.

I don't think I've ever been this interested in a SoL story. I'm looking forward to more!

She's just one hoof step away from getting Baldness legally acceptable. :rainbowkiss:

"Sister! I have accidentally blasted of my fur! What am I to do!?"

"Calm yourself Luna, and gimme a hug so I can feel your skin."

"Wait, what?"

"It was over a century since the last time somepony blasted their fur off in my presense. Why do you think that spell formula subtly hidden in the masonry of the east courtyard wall exist?":trollestia:

"Err... Yes! The wall! Spell and everything, eheh. It was what I was talking about all along."

Those three need a serious grounding....

Hoo boy, this is gonna take some talking.

Oh noooooo! :twilightoops:

Hoo boy, this is going to be awkward! I mean, it's not a sexual thing for Twilight, but you KNOW those fillies are going to be all curious and want to try it for themselves...yikes. Even if they don't, how are they going to keep their big mouths shut about this? Twilight will say there's nothing wrong with being a nudist but don't say anything to anypony, but this is the CMC we're talking about.

This is just so wonderfully awkward. Poor Twilight, today is not her day.

Windmill, meet midden.

Midden, meet windmill.

6763099 the can be he most annoying and impolite little rascals. No decenyg at all and even children know basic courtesy.

The cmc can be so one way focused that they go and forget all the basics of simple things like not barging into someone's house uninvited.

Wow!

Love this story, so glad I took a chance and read the first one in one sitting.
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