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For the former apprentice of Princess Celestia, science experiments are fun and enlightening. Then, one day, magical butterflies start haunting Sunset Shimmer from every corner, even hours after the experiment is long done. Now it's time to panic.

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Heh. Just as deliciously silly as always.

Butterflies, your soul.

Shipping and Handling, your heart.

For everything else, theres Discordcard. :pinkiecrazy:

“Pffft.” Sunset rolled her eyes with a pleasant smile. “Please... I've been through worse. Heck... I once turned into a she-demon and got nuked by a rainbow laser. You remember that?”

Fluttershy stared at her.

Sunset arched an eyebrow. “...'no offense?'”

:rainbowlaugh: Nice.

An adorable and hilarious adventure in Sunset Science. Nicely done, and thank you for it.

Though I have to wonder, has liquid rainbow been manifesting around Applejack?

So the objects/things that the mane six summon keep appearing around whoever they're infatuated with?

And that bit at the end.

Of course you would, Skirts. :rainbowlaugh:

I have the stupidest smile on my face right now. good work!

“Uhhhhh... Rainbow Dash?”
Rainbow took another bite. “Mrmmmff... Yeah?”
“... … ...where did you get those apples?”

:rainbowlaugh:

I totally saw that coming. You go, AJ! :ajsmug:

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Though I have to wonder, has liquid rainbow been manifesting around Applejack?

AJ probably took a Rainbow Shower that morning.
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Please please..Make sequel!:applecry:
To leave as a cliff hangar on what happens next is cruel!

OK, that was a cute reversal of what I thought would happen at the end. :rainbowlaugh:

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Gnawing on the bottom of her lip, Sunset looked at the aluminum can in her grasp. She squinted down the lid, shuddered, then poured the bubbly contents into the kitchen sink before shuffling awkwardly up the stairs.

:rainbowlaugh:

Water stained the tile and carpet around her body and the plastic tarp wrapped around her like a pastel cocoon. “Unnnnngh...”

And then Sunset was butterfly.

Sunset fidgeted. She looked all around... and finally relaxed. With a calm smile, she hummed to herself, walked over to her wardrobe, and casually opened her underwear drawer—

FW-FW-FW-FWOOSH! A wave of kamikaze pink insects soared into her, knocking her across the room.

:rainbowlaugh:

Dat sunshyne, tho. I should have expected it, given the romance tag.

“Uhhhhh... Rainbow Dash?”

Rainbow took another bite. “Mrmmmff... Yeah?”

“... … ...where did you get those apples?”

Ohhhmygod. Of course you would.:rainbowlaugh:

Slowly, Sunset's eyes fluttered open to the dim light of the early morning. She smiled contentedly to herself, hugging a white alicorn plushie to her chest.

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Welp... as long as they don't have to free Rarity from a balloon that's suddenly manifested around her and is threatening to carry her away...

Where did this cover art come from?
HOW did this cover art come from?

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It's also in a link in the description.

Write more! Please, please, please, please, please!

However, instead of the soul-cleansing scent of peaches and lavender...

I don't think those two things are as random as you'd have us believe.
...
So why does Sunset Shimmer have Twilight scented shampoo anyway? :rainbowhuh:

“Oh jeez oh jeez oh jeez oh jeez—!” She flailed, teetered, lost her balance and—“OOOMF!”—fell through the shower curtain. Water stained the tile and carpet around her body and the plastic tarp wrapped around her like a pastel cocoon. “Unnnnngh...”

This just in! Sunset sleeps nude in an oxygen tank which she believes gives her sexual powers!

Fun story Skirts. Cute Flutterbutt is cute.

Woah woah woah! Did I just see a Tiesto reference here?

6274212 Nah, AJ was with Rarity. Rainbow was off pulling some pranks with Pinkie.

Sorrynotsorry!

That was hilarious and adorable! My only problem is that I need more! :ajsmug:

F'naaaaa~
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scent of peaches and lavender...

Why does Sunny have Twilight-scented shampoo? :twilightoops:

Rarity grinned wide. “And then two weeks later, it fell out of her!”

I...want to know what they were talking about, morbidly enough.

“Uhhhhh... Rainbow Dash?”
Rainbow took another bite. “Mrmmmff... Yeah?”
“... … ...where did you get those apples?”

Somepony has a cruuuush. :ajsmug:

That kiss, though. :heart:
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This was adorable, Skirts. You've earned four squee's out of five from me. :twilightsmile:

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And this is why baconpone is cutest.

“Whewwww boy! Now I know why they call them thangs Troj—”

:duck:

is it me or does Sunset's voice sound totally different in that clip

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i have to agree. Her colours are less bright her voice sounds better. I wonder if they explain about it.

Is the chapter title a reference to Scientific Progress Goes Doink? If so, you win an internet.

Fluttershy's got the best wingmen ever.

She smiled contentedly to herself, hugging a white alicorn plushie to her chest.

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Rarity grinned wide. “And then two weeks later, it fell out of her!”

“Hah hah hah!” Applejack guffawed, slapping her knee. “Whewwww boy! Now I know why they call them thangs Troj—”

Jesus Christ.

Also, dat final scene. :rainbowdetermined2:

That end, though :rainbowlaugh:

6274545 It was cheaper than Spike-scented shampoo.

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Nopony wants Spike scented shampoo anyways.

:trollestia:

This was adorable. And hilarious. Adorably hilarious? Hilariously adorable?

Eh, whatever. I liked it! :pinkiehappy:

Bravo. You deserve a Shia Labeouf applause :pinkiesmile:

Ugh. Too sweet. Too funny.

More?

It was an interesting short that raised lots of questions and lots of expectations. I wonder if the Cutie Mark holograms are going to appear in Friendship Games as an extension of the HuMane Six's magic?

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Sunset is so similar to Twilight at times that it is outright scary at times. It seems that Sunset just got her 'Doozy' lesson Twi got with Pinkie earlier.

She pulled out a can of Dr. Pepper

A Dr. Pepper, on the day Sunset happened to be wearing a lab coat. I think I spy a Steins;Gate reference...

The fact that Rainbow doesn't even question eating random, translucent fruit concerns me a little, however, the subtle nod towards Appledash makes it excusably better.

All in all, very silly and adorable! :pinkiehappy:

Oh Skirts.... this was... exactly what I should have expected from you. Great job :rainbowlaugh:

Brilliantly silly story with some cute FlutterShimmer and a nice little commedic AppleDash

I came in not expecting the SunShyne. But it was very welcome, I love that ship. (SunLight is still my otp though)

Cute as hell, and that ending made me laugh louder than I should at work.

SunShyne huh? That's not a fic I see often. Kudos, Skirts. Though I should admit I'm more partial to the SunAta pairing myself

Aaaand there's Appledash in the background.. Why am I not surprised.

6274362 hnngggggggggggg

Heh, always comes back to AppleDash with you.

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Shout-outs to mah Rarijack.

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Yeah, who'd want to smell like wet dog?

I love me some Shimmershy, so this gets an upvote. I think it went a little over the top toward the end, because the point at which this was traumatic for Sunset instead of fun to read felt...well...yeah.

This needs a second editing pass, because there are a number of minor errors to correct, such as this:

“I just gotta straighten a few things up,” Sunset said, stripping her lab coat off and hanging the tattered thing over an edge's desk.

Pretty sure edges don't have desks. Desks DO have edges, though.

Not doing a full line-by-line for you, but I will point out things where you could use some improvement. For example:

In the middle of all this, however, something tickled the back of the woman's neck.

Don't do this. If a character has been identified, refer to them by name, not by some oddity like "the woman" or "the lavender unicorn" or "the bipedal creature".

Cars and trucks throttled by

The only thing more strange than your choice of verb here is that you chose to bold it.

throt·tle
ˈTHrädl/
noun
noun: throttle; plural noun: throttles

1.
a device controlling the flow of fuel or power to an engine.
"the engines were at full throttle"
2.
archaic
a throat, gullet, or windpipe.

verb
verb: throttle; 3rd person present: throttles; past tense: throttled; past participle: throttled; gerund or present participle: throttling

1.
attack or kill (someone) by choking or strangling them.
"she was sorely tempted to throttle him"
synonyms: choke, strangle, strangulate, garrote, gag More
"he tried to throttle her"
suppress, inhibit, stifle, control, restrain, check, contain, choke off, put a/the lid on;
stop, put an end to, end, stamp out
"attempts to throttle the criminal supply of drugs"
2.
control (an engine or vehicle) with a throttle.

I'm...pretty sure this is NOT what you were going for in this scene.

Two panting breaths later, she reopened her blue eyes

You've got this more than a couple of times. Sunset's eyes aren't blue. They're green. Teal, to be precise.

“Well, worry no further!” Rarity said, clenching her fists. “We won't let no magical swarm bother our friend! No matter how glamorous!”

Rarity would say 'any', not 'no'.

Sunset should just count herself lucky that there's no real equivalent of parasprites in the EG world, because if Fluttershy liked them Sunset wouldn't have had a home left. Or underwear, for that matter. The shipping intensifies!

Slowly, Sunset's eyes fluttered open to the dim light of the early morning. She smiled contentedly to herself, hugging a white alicorn plushie to her chest.

Aww, even after what she felt was a betrayal, Sunset still misses her mommy ;)

At least butterflies didn't come out of you 'flowerbed'.

I like the first chapter a lot so far lol :moustache:

Are you going to do a sequel? Because I want to see what happens next!
All in all, brilliant.

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