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Three hundred years after Luna's banishment, Equestria is at a shaky peace, its borders protected by the Equestrian Armed Forces from several hostile races, from raiding Diamond Dogs to the increasingly aggressive Gryphons. Incidents are many, and tensions rise as the newly unified Gryphon Empire sets its sights on the lands and riches of its pony neighbors.

In this troubled time, a young pegasus orphan named Firefly comes of age. A born warrior, her name will one day be known as not just the founder of the Wonderbolts, but as one of Equestria's greatest heroes...


Set in the same universe as the Turnabout Storm novelization but taking place seven hundred years before, this is the story of Rainbow Dash's ancestor, the origin of the Wonderbolts, and the coming of the Great Pony/Gryphon War. Also referenced by multiple stories in the Gentlemanverse.


Writers: Leo Archon and Firesight
Prereaders: AJ_Aficionado, SilentWoodFire, JamesCyberlink, Denim_Blue

Cover Art by Equestria Prevails, classified as creative-commons/share-alike: http://equestria-prevails.deviantart.com/art/Firefly-351657539

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I commend you on your research. Have you actually watched the original 80's version of MLP?

6279751 I personally have watched two parts of G1 MLP: the pilot episode, Escape from Midnight Castle, and the movie.

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Myself, I've seen the movie and that's about it. The choice of Firefly was Leo's, but it makes perfect sense since Firefly was more or less the G1 Rainbow Dash, so you could certainly call her Rainbow's ancestor. Enjoy!

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6279812 Actuallly some people believe that G3's Rainbow Dash, an earth pony fashionista is the really ancestor

The lore behind the Armored Guard is pretty awesome. A few thoughts:

Given the need to keep male breeding numbers up in the mare-heavy Equestrian society, only stallions that have already sired at least one male offspring are allowed to join.

This is the exact opposite of the Pegasi Enclave from Fallout Equestria. In that instance, the population is encouraged to fight for the fascist military-run government for the benefit of being allowed to breed as a result of limited food and resources. In your example, the stallions themselves are the limited resource and have to 'man up' for the good of the country. Kind of a neat, if unintended parallel given no love for FoE on your part.

The best-trained and equipped unit of the Equestrian armed forces, training is brutal and only a quarter of those who attempt it make it through. But those who do proudly wear the armor of the Royal Guard. The self-proclaimed ‘spearhead’ of the Equestrian Armed Forces, they would only be used for critical attacks or defense.

It's like a cross between Napoleon's Imperial Guard and those Americans defending West Germany during the Cold War. It's no wonder the Guard has to be so well-trained. No matter what happens they're going to be outnumbered and outgunned at the onset of any conflict!

Earth Pony Militia - Each town tends to have its own, though training levels vary widely. Troop quality ranges from poor to barely adequate. ~40,000 hooves

In fairness, they throw one hell of a party. :yay: Although, this becomes problematic when archery training is scheduled the day after. :pinkiesick:

Earth Ponies - spears and forearm-mounted crossbows they can work with their teeth; some wield blades or snares with their mouths. Can wear heavy armor with ease, though there’s not enough of it to go around.

Just wait until they discover battle saddles and power armor...

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Until then, they have a lot to learn about war, and an enemy that's already well-versed and possesses a noble military heritage. Lets hope for the best for our hero.

just read the latest chapter and i Think this story is awsome. please have a :moustache:

Sorry I wasn't able to get to this yesterday. Lets have a look, shall we? :pinkiehappy:

“Stand and be recognized, Corporal Hexblade!”

I can't help but think of a World of Warcraft troll here: "Come get the voodoo, mon!"

To be sure, I didn’t win everything. After all, not even I could beat the new earth pony guardsponies in a contest of strength, but even the most powerful pegasi were no match for me either on the ground or in the air, and the unicorns quickly learned that I was not so easy to restrain magically either, as it took four at once to hold me down… or so I let them think.

And so we get a rare and welcome example of race/class balancing that a lot of pony fics strangely lack. As lopsided as MLPFiM the cartoon is in balancing the three pony races — sorry crystal ponies, you don't count :raritycry: — you generally have it even worse in fanfiction because pegasi and unicorns are the only ones that matter to the fans. Earth ponies are generally portrayed as being completely useless in the fandom and we all know it. :pinkiesad2:

But here, Earth Ponies have a distinct strength advantage that doesn't just go away because the protagonist is just so edgey and cool and stronger than everyone else. That is so rare, I'm all for putting this story in some sort of natural preserve so that it might survive and flourish and we can have more lead characters that aren't overpowered Sue's with impossibly strong magic.

“Okay, so where is she?” the lead pony, a pegasus corporal to judge from the insignia on his shoulders, called out, his wings and tail twitching. “Where’s that stupid mare?”

This will end in tears.

“And what are you, her mother?” the unicorn stallion called out, lowering his head to present his horn.

Go home, mage, you're drunk. That man mountain is obviously a stallion. :facehoof: Now conjure up some alcohol and piss off!

“The Armored Guard is for stallions, not undeserving mares who probably got a free pass the whole way through!”

What a bigoted craphead! How does he know she got off easy?

Three angry and incredulous faces turned on him. “Are you as stupid as you look, private? Windshear let her win!” the pegasus corporal shot back, fire in his eyes. “Probably under orders from Typhoon, if not Celestia herself!”

My god, we are reaching Dead Sea levels of salt here! :rainbowlaugh:

“So what did you do to get through training, offer your flank to everypony who wanted it? And how the buck do you rate sergeant right out of the gate? We’ve been busting our flanks for two years and still haven’t made it!”

Time for Firefly to demonstrate why, I think.

I smiled and made one powerful downward beat with my wings to blast up a cloud of dust, a second stroke quick driving it right into my opponents’ eyes—a trick I had learned well from Windshear—distracting the unicorn in particular just long enough for me to take flight. I could overcome his aura, but I didn’t need it slowing me down, firing bolts at me or just plain shining a spotlight on me.

Out of range of the earth pony, blinded the range attacker, and the other flyer. I couldn't think of a more efficient opening move. Well done. :moustache:

Losing a blurry-eyed Shadowslash briefly in the darkness of the woods, I immediately circled back and darted between trees and buildings, heading back towards the light of the plaza outside the pub. Emerging out of an alley, I took out the most dangerous target first, striking out of the darkness to blindside the unicorn, knocking him out with a single blow to the side of his head, the glowing aura surrounding his horn immediately flickering out like a shattered lantern. The magical threat eliminated, I dodged the retaliatory leap of the earth pony stallion, whose hooves smashed open a barrel in my wake, but then he pulled a sentry slingshot—a non-lethal version of a combat crossbow—and in a single smooth motion fired a projectile that sizzled past my head, one that would have given me a severe bruise or concussion if it hit. He was a good shot, but even if he was wielding an actual crossbow, he had little chance of bringing down a target as fast or elusive as me.

In most duels there is a circle extending out from the center that will disqualify someone if they pass it. I guess, you're allowed some leeway in pony duels as long as you're quick about it.

Leaving that alone, the tactics employed are solid; taking out the caster/healer first is rule one in any PvP scenario. The Earth pony wielding a slingshot made me smile. We're certainly putting our research into earth pony ranged weapons to good use! That said, if he were a really good shot, he'd be able to lead her. Firefly probably isn't flying in random directions, burning up her energy, she has the objective of closing with her opponents and putting them down. These three put no thought at all into how they were going to fight as a team and deserve the ass-whooping they're going to get.

Completely oblivious to where I was leading him until he ran headlong into a tree—

That turned him down a scoach! :rainbowkiss:

Incredibly, my blow stopped him in his tracks and the earth pony staggered back, staring at me. For a moment I thought he was actually going to shake off the blow, but his eyes abruptly rolled back in his head and he slowly toppled forward, then fell on his side, unconscious.

In the end, it was his own strength that betrayed him; no doubt, his hard charging only made the force of Firefly's kick scramble his brains even more. Were he gifted with greater intellect, he would have allowed Firefly to charge him. Genghis Khan taught his men not to hate the enemy but to view each foe as another problem to be settled with pointy sticks. I think earth pony guy was an even better example or how not to handle a fight than Shadowdweeb.

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So, methinks the toughest trainer of the guard really DOES have a softer side… I couldn’t help but note, but didn’t dare say out loud, instead drawing myself to attention and saluting. “Count on it, sir.”

Great chapter! I could read this sort of thing all day. :twilightsmile:

Loving it and looking forward to more!

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Thanks for all the comments! :pinkiehappy:

And so we get a rare and welcome example of race/class balancing that a lot of pony fics strangely lack. As lopsided as MLPFiM the cartoon is in balancing the three pony races — sorry crystal ponies, you don't count :raritycry: — you generally have it even worse in fanfiction because pegasi and unicorns are the only ones that matter to the fans. Earth ponies are generally portrayed as being completely useless in the fandom and we all know it. :pinkiesad2:

Definitely not to me! :rainbowdetermined2: In my headcanon, earth ponies have great strength and stamina, and are resistant to magic. Hell, part of the reason that Firefly's so strong is that's she's probably got some earth pony in her blood.

But here, Earth Ponies have a distinct strength advantage that doesn't just go away because the protagonist is just so edgey and cool and stronger than everyone else. That is so rare, I'm all for putting this story in some sort of natural preserve so that it might survive and flourish and we can have more lead characters that aren't overpowered Sue's with impossibly strong magic.

Firefly is no Mary Sue. She's an incredibly gifted flyer and born warrior, but short of donning the Alicorn Amulet again, she's perfectly mortal and if she's not smart, could certainly be taken out. And before all is said and done, she will face opponents every bit as good as she. And at least one who might be better.

This will end in tears.

Go home, mage, you're drunk. That man mountain is obviously a stallion. :facehoof: Now conjure up some alcohol and piss off!

What a bigoted craphead! How does he know she got off easy?

My god, we are reaching Dead Sea levels of salt here! :rainbowlaugh:

Time for Firefly to demonstrate why, I think.

They were drunk and didn't take her very seriously, but I think they all just found out why they haven't made sergeant if their judgment is so bad...

Out of range of the earth pony, blinded the range attacker, and the other flyer. I couldn't think of a more efficient opening move. Well done. :moustache:

Thanks! :pinkiehappy: The biggest lesson she had to learn was simply to use her head, and not just to butt heads.

In most duels there is a circle extending out from the center that will disqualify someone if they pass it. I guess, you're allowed some leeway in pony duels as long as you're quick about it.

Actually, you're right, so I added some explanation. As the terms of the duel never included fight boundaries, she broke no rule by flying off a short distance and circling back. Their oversight, not hers. :twilightsmile:

Leaving that alone, the tactics employed are solid; taking out the caster/healer first is rule one in any PvP scenario. The Earth pony wielding a slingshot made me smile. We're certainly putting our research into earth pony ranged weapons to good use! That said, if he were a really good shot, he'd be able to lead her. Firefly probably isn't flying in random directions, burning up her energy, she has the objective of closing with her opponents and putting them down. These three put no thought at all into how they were going to fight as a team and deserve the ass-whooping they're going to get.

Yeah, I was definitely drawing on Siege a bit for this one. Wonder what Linky would think of Firefly? :raritywink:

In the end, it was his own strength that betrayed him; no doubt, his hard charging only made the force of Firefly's kick scramble his brains even more. Were he gifted with greater intellect, he would have allowed Firefly to charge him. Genghis Khan taught his men not to hate the enemy but to view each foe as another problem to be settled with pointy sticks. I think earth pony guy was an even better example or how not to handle a fight than Shadowdweeb.

Exactly. All three of these guys assumed either through arrogance or drunkenness (or probably a combination thereof) that she was no match for their strength/speed/magic, forgetting that the first rule of any fight is you damn well better take your opponent seriously or you'll end up flat on your ass. :trixieshiftleft:

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Thanks, I'll wear it proudly! :moustache:

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Thanks as well! More is coming... and hopefully more readers, too.

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Definitely not to me! :rainbowdetermined2: In my headcanon, earth ponies have great strength and stamina, and are resistant to magic. Hell, part of the reason that Firefly's so strong is that's she's probably got some earth pony in her blood.

I've never headcanoned a magical resistance before! Time to update headcanon.exe.

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Yeah, I was definitely drawing on Siege a bit for this one. Wonder what Linky would think of Firefly? :raritywink:

Lets ask her and Twinkleshine what they thought about all of this...

Linky: Fair play to yeh, Firefly, but yehr victory came against vastly inferior opponents. Shadowslash was a prat; a mere thug more concayrned with revenge than winnin'. If yeh came up against me, I'd 'ave popped yeh one on the first dive! At least the pegasus did better than the ayrth pony. Yeh had one job!

Twinkleshine: At least the two of them did... something. The unicorn couldn't perform the simple courtesy of sending up a star shell enchantment to illuminate the sky? Appalling form! Firefly did him a service by knocking him out first before he could make us look even more inept!

Now there would be a nasty fight! Firefly versus Linky and Twinkleshine. She'd be up against two potential ranged attacks, protective enchantments and close-in threat.

Firefly is no Mary Sue. She's an incredibly gifted flyer and born warrior, but short of donning the Alicorn Amulet again, she's perfectly mortal and if she's not smart, could certainly be taken out. And before all is said and done, she will face opponents every bit as good as she. And at least one who might be better.

Oh, absolutely! She's a great fighter, and I look forward to seeing her face off against a foe worthy of facing her. It was a smart move to show her facing an opponent that was beyond her first, to let us know that she is mortal and she can fail. This story really drives home the point of how Siege could have been done a lot better.

Looking at these numbers, I can only think to myself, "If the griffons and minotaurs banded together, Equestria would be in trouble."

I suppose ponies are not a warrior-centric culture in general terms, though I do agree with the popular idea of the pegasi having a strong military culture and history compared the the earth ponies and unicorns.

I sense that dark times are approaching. I can only hope Equestria is ready for it.

P.S.- poor airship division. They need a morale boost :(

Yeah, insulting a higher ranked officer, regardless of experience, is rarely a smart thing to do. Those guys got off easy.

Seems like Firefly is finally taking on the task she was preparing for. Let's hope she's up to the task. It'll be interesting to see how she handles this.

Also, Windshear seems to be taking on the role of mentor, or at the very least, he's seeing Firefly as a soldier and worthy of proper respect. I do hope to see more moments like the conversation they had here. He's obviously seen the horrors or war, and while he cannot stop Firefly from likely experiencing them as well, he's at least trying to keep her from coming home in a casket.





(Please don't kill too many griffons. They have families, too.)

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(Please don't kill too many griffons. They have families, too.)

They started it! But seriously, they'll put up one hell of a fight before they're done!

R. Lee Ermey's rebirth as a pony and Firefly's first taste of combat. Lets take a look, shall we?

“Nopony, eh? The bucking Tooth Breezy said it? I’ll work you all until you break! I’ll fly you all until you bucking die! Was it YOU?” he then snarled in the face of one hapless recruit.

He'll PT you until your tail holes are sucking buttermilk!

“Sir, Sky Sentry, sir!” he proclaimed proudly and almost without fear.

You had best be a well-written character unlike Flash or I will unscrew your head and s*** down your neck!

“N-no, milady!” he replied through gritted teeth, trying to bite back his pain.

Milady!

When despite that he began to get visibly antsy and aroused under my scrutiny, I ended his excitement quickly by suggesting that, for his disrespect, perhaps I should simply relieve him of his malehood entirely so there could be a second mare in the guard!

:fluttershyouch:

Winter was coming, and this far away from the heart of Equestria, we were more or less at the mercy of wild weather, rain-and-snow-laden storm fronts rolling out of the heart of the Gryphon Empire that I tended to think were just a means to torment ponies and kept Aerial Corps weather teams busy.

I'm going to ignore the obvious joke lest I be smitten by the gods and instead make fun of the pegasi for their meteorological OCD. :rainbowlaugh:

I had barely time to acknowledge the command before there were a series of blinding flashes and deafening booms left my eyes seeing spots and ears ringing. Thunder gems!

That's some serious Navy S.E.A.L. stuff, right there! "Flashbang" Stun Grenades are one of the best tools in the specwarrior's arsenal for achieving Relative Superiority.

Startled by the sudden move, she tried to fend me off with her free claws, taking several defensive swipes and using her wings to buy time and distance to use her bolas but I wasn’t having it, using the strength I’d developed in basic to blast right through her guard and drive a hoofstriker into the bottom of her beak.

Fool of a featherbrain! You retreat before the warrior and she will take your space! :flutterrage: Seriously bad tactics on her part as well as admitting to her reliance on the bolas. Your enemy closes on you, you must either accept close-quarters combat (CQC) and abandon your ranged weapon in favor of a melee weapon or counterattack with something before withdrawing to a comfortable range with which to finish your foe.

So I put on a burst of speed and tackled him in midair before he could draw his weapon, ignoring his alien smells as I went for his head, pinning it in the crook of my foreleg, putting pressure on his carotid artery.

The carotid and stick approach works wonders. :rainbowkiss:

Once I had word from Sundiver that our missing patrol had been released—even more infuriatingly, I later learned we paid a ransom for their safe return—their shackles were unlocked.

:facehoof: Oh, where do I even begin? Ponies... I know you don't want a fight. I know it's not in your nature and all that but take it from an American, you don't make friends out of enemies with bribes; you make better friends out of neutrals with them! :eeyup: Giving money to your sworn enemy to prevent violence encourages more violence! Ugh, such a terrible diplomatic move; my commentary can't do it justice. That was just completely idiotic! Annnd the chance of a war has increased to 1:1. Well done, guys...

“Aye sir. But still… we drove off our assailants with minimal casualties,” I reminded him. “We got our prisoners back and suffered no deaths, capturing six. Against a dozen gryphon warriors, surely that is cause to celebrate?”

Since she only found out later about the cowardly ransom, she's likely still high off her first taste of combat. Particularly, having kicked ass and looked damn good doing it. It's just a shame Equestria now faces a gigantic war for their limp-hooved politics. Luck be with ye, Firefly. :rainbowdetermined2:

Back by popular demand -- and by that I mean, Firesight thought it would be cool -- Linky and Twinkleshine's fight scene review!

I had barely time to acknowledge the command before there were a series of blinding flashes and deafening booms left my eyes seeing spots and ears ringing. Thunder gems!

Now that's a good way ter make an entrance! Distract the lot of 'em and start shooting after taking their mates in an ambush! Now hayr's a worthy foe!

Wouldn't it be better to get all of them to come out of their base and attack them in the open?

Well sure, if yeh kin manage that! I cannae think of a good way the gryphons could've managed ter do that without givin' themselves away though...

Pull the fire alarm?

(sigh) That would never work...

Ask if there refrigerator is running?

Yah're fired! I'm making all the tactical decisions from now on!

The gryphons had been briefly startled when the bells went off, but as Sundiver barked out his orders, they recovered and quickly resumed their strike, picking off more ponies with their darts as they emerged. Three of them dove directly for him, the obvious leader while another three went for me, more pinion darts flying out from their blowpipes. Adrenaline surging through me, I back-flipped away, beating my wings to give me more breathing room as the darts hit the dirt in front of me. One of them swooped in, intending to pin me with his talons; I flipped over him, and slammed my hooves on the base of his wings. He gave a pained squawk as he plowed into the ground, wings completely numbed by the attack as I quickly followed up, knocking him cold with a hoofstriker hit to the head.

No comment here. Whacking somepony on the wings hurts whether you're a pegasus or not!

Aye! Hit the enemy where they're strong, and they'll become weak.

Startled by the sudden move, she tried to fend me off with her free claws, taking several defensive swipes and using her wings to buy time and distance to use her bolas but I wasn’t having it, using the strength I’d developed in basic to blast right through her guard and drive a hoofstriker into the bottom of her beak.

The aforementioned feather brain comment applies here, I think...

If I can get out me soapbox fer a moment... If yeh ever find yah'reself fighting close up with a ranged weapon, seek an altayrnative means of waxing your opponent. Or, yeh know, yeh could just die lookin' stupid.

With that, I turned my attention to the third gryphon, who had just finished reloading but hadn’t been able to draw a bead on me; I’d been moving too fast. I shot under him then up behind and saw him twist in midair, discarding his blowpipe and going for the sword on his back.

Behold, the sword of pacification! (giggle)

Well, if yeh can't aim worth nuthin... Still, seems a bit much for a non-lethal mission. A blunt weapon would more likely knock a pony out without killin' her.

Their initial advantage lost and the base now fully rousted, the weight of our numbers started to tell, and we chased down the remaining assailants, Sundiver leading the direct assault despite his bleeding barrel, while I led a wide sweep with Blindside’s squad to hunt down stragglers and cut off our enemy’s retreat, taking out two more raiders personally.

The Feathery Folk had a good plan but it was poorly executed. They dinnae seem keen to leave either once they'd been caught, despite already taking prisoners. Retreat is inexcusable, but an orderly withdrawal is preferable to being bucked in the face.

Not the face! Linky makes money with that face!

Neigh, but I easily could!

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You had best be a well-written character unlike Flash or I will unscrew your head and s*** down your neck!

Well, at least Twilight won't randomly fall for him... though per my thinking now, he probably is Flash's ancestor. And after that little encounter with Firefly he will almost have to be heard from again. :ajsmug:

I'm going to ignore the obvious joke lest I be smitten by the gods and instead make fun of the pegasi for their meteorological OCD. :rainbowlaugh:

True, but in fairness... wait until they start to use weather as a weapon! :pinkiegasp:

That's some serious Navy S.E.A.L. stuff, right there! "Flashbang" Stun Grenades are one of the best tools in the specwarrior's arsenal for achieving Relative Superiority.

SEALS versus Gryphons... I'd pay to see them go hand-to-claw.

Fool of a featherbrain! You retreat before the warrior and she will take your space! :flutterrage: Seriously bad tactics on her part as well as admitting to her reliance on the bolas. Your enemy closes on you, you must either accept close-quarters combat (CQC) and abandon your ranged weapon in favor of a melee weapon or counterattack with something before withdrawing to a comfortable range with which to finish your foe.

Which is exactly why this bunch aren't real warriors. :ajsmug: And actually, lucky for the Epsilon pegasi they weren't...

The carotid and stick approach works wonders. :rainbowkiss:

Nice! :rainbowlaugh:

:facehoof: Oh, where do I even begin? Ponies... I know you don't want a fight. I know it's not in your nature and all that but take it from an American, you don't make friends out of enemies with bribes; you make better friends out of neutrals with them! :eeyup: Giving money to your sworn enemy to prevent violence encourages more violence! Ugh, such a terrible diplomatic move; my commentary can't do it justice. That was just completely idiotic! Annnd the chance of a war has increased to 1:1. Well done, guys...

Are you talking about ponies appeasing gryphons, or Obama's idiotic deal with Iran? :facehoof:

Since she only found out later about the cowardly ransom, she's likely still high off her first taste of combat. Particularly, having kicked ass and looked damn good doing it. It's just a shame Equestria now faces a gigantic war for their limp-hooved politics. Luck be with ye, Firefly. :rainbowdetermined2:

Well, not right away. The Gryphons are being patient and laying the groundwork. You'll find out exactly what the purpose was behind these raids and captured ponies in due time.

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Are you talking about ponies appeasing gryphons, or Obama's idiotic deal with Iran? :facehoof:

The correct response here is 'yes'.

Meanwhile, in a parallel universe, humans have started thinking of uses for gunpowder...maybe, could be off by a few centuries.

You write great action scenes, and damn if I didn't think things were going to go to hell real quick. Then again, going for captures instead of kills shows just how bad things are looking for our little outpost. Can't imagine what it'd have been like if they were serious.

Damn Griffies...I mean, sure, they get along great with the humans, but you can't help but want to get the birdshot out and...ahem...

Great chapter, Firesight. Here's hoping our heroes make it through with minimal losses.

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You write great action scenes, and damn if I didn't think things were going to go to hell real quick. Then again, going for captures instead of kills shows just how bad things are looking for our little outpost. Can't imagine what it'd have been like if they were serious.

Appreciate it, thanks! Well, the griffies weren't always friendly. At this point in their history, they've defeated the Cloven and Elder Rams without help, think very highly of themselves and believe they should be the planet's preeminent race, not the Equestrians. Their exact plans will become clear in due time, but you're right--had these raiders been a bit more disciplined or been actual Gryphon soldiers, Outpost Epsilon would have been lost. And don't think Firefly and company don't know it.

Great chapter, Firesight. Here's hoping our heroes make it through with minimal losses.

Can't promise that, sorry.

Finally found time to read this story properly.
I have to say I really enjoyed it. The fight scene in this chapter was especially good, Your an excellent author.
Not much more to say, it's a really good story.
Looking forward to more to come.

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I appreciate it, thanks! :pinkiehappy: More is coming, though perhaps not right away. Trying to get some more readers in first, so if you know anyone who might like this, feel free to point them this way.

Finally got this off my read later and into the up to date folder... Now it becomes a waiting game as to which "Old Equestria" war fic updates first, Wind and Stone, this or maybe The Stranger and her Friend.

Granted Stranger doesn't have the same feeling to it but I wouldn't say no to it updating.

Time to get my pony medieval warfare fix! :pinkiehappy:

I had to learn the hard way that there are two lines in life that once you cross, you can never go back. One was pleasurable, the other decidedly not.

Is it weird that someone like me that breathes clopfiction can appreciate the concept of losing one's virginity as an irrevocable decision that actually matters? I know, it's a trite observation; I beg pardon.

The day that naive young filly finally learned what it was to be a warrior, and the terrible price that must be paid.

I love the Firefly intro this chapter. She carries herself like a true badass.

From now on, we wear armor at all times whilst on duty, not just out on patrol.

For some weird reason, I found this old timey english is some of my stories during my last editing spree. What the hell is that?

She stood half again as tall as I did, making her fairly sizeable as pegasus mares went. Looking at her, I was somewhat startled, mostly because of her eyes. Though her wings were feathered and her ears normal for a pony, she had the slitted pupils of a thestral.

Thestrals are awesome. That is all.

After passing magical scans, most were allowed to return to active duty, though some seemed confused, having lapses in memory like they were suffering concussions.

Sounds like that old movie: The Manchurian Candidate.

Our unicorn medics chalking it up to a passing side effect of the sleeping potion, they convalesced at an Equestrian Army base in the nearby town of Maresk.

Ahh Minsk! That's where Worf is from, don'cha know!

Thestrals remained in severe disfavor throughout greater Equestria for allying with Nightmare Moon nearly three centuries ago, and as a result mostly kept to themselves in isolated communities, the largest of which was a town called Hollow Shades.

I'm flattered to have contributed to your headcanon, sensai. :twilightsmile:

I scanned it and learned a large force of gryphons had broken past our defenses near Outpost Gamma—they’d hit the other end of the border at outpost Alpha hard to draw in the bulk of the Corps ready forces, and now a second force was slicing through the gap that had created in our patrol screens, descending on the town of Gallop, nearly fifty miles inside Equestria.

That sounds an awful lot like Operation Yellow. Von Manstein's greatest achievement among many as a hotsy-totsy blackshoe-wearing Nazi general.

They’d chosen their target well. Being set back from the border, that town, a farming community, didn’t have an Army presence, only earth pony militia, and their fighting quality was highly suspect at best.

But their drunk quality is finely honed!

“When they arrive, you’ll hold them there whilst I make a wide sweep with Blindside and Derecho’s squads and attempt to… well, blindside them,” I winced slightly at my clumsy phrasing.

I don't know about you, but I find this blatant ableism to be problematic. Also, Derecho is an awesome name for a pegasus.

I burst in through a window to find… a single earth pony sentry standing low watch, though ‘standing’ was a very generous term given he was sleeping on duty.

Ye'll tak' the high watch and I'll tak' the low. And I'll be in Scotland afore ye.

“Their communication magic is supposed to be unbreachable.

So was Haystation Network.

Should I not have left more pegasi behind to defend the base?

It's time for Linky and Twinkleshine again!

Neigh, brave pegasus! Yeh mass soldiers to take what yeh don't have and let a few soldiers keep what's already yehrs. Massing behind a wall only invites yehr enemy to trap yeh.

By that logic, what's to stop you from attacking your own neighbor on any given sunny day?

Nothing. Hehe!

(sigh) Ask a stupid question...

A Mage Gryphon!

Shoot it!

She's got a shield up.

Yer bum’s oot the windae! (You're crazy!)

No really! They're magically shielded and flying so you can't melee. What are you going to do now, Linky?

Ah dinnae kin... (I don't know)

Finally, I had closed with a fifty yards and pulled one of my red ruby alert gems. Though now compromised as a communication device, they had one other secondary use in combat, and that was that they could interfere with casting, disrupt magical auras when thrown into them.

How keen of her to think of such a simple magical solution!

(grumble) Cheaters...

“Methinks there’s been enough blood spilled here this night!

I think she's channeling Aragorn!

Time slowed down again as I shot forward with all my speed and strength. My wingblades deployed, locking into position just as I arrived on target. The enchanted metal sliced through both sinew and steel as I saw everything in vivid detail, including the upper half of her sword spinning backwards as my strike broke it in two…

And her head as it was separated from her body, falling from her shoulders and tumbling gruesomely to the ground below.

Couldn't have happened to a nicer eagless.

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Time to get my pony medieval warfare fix! :pinkiehappy:

And your comments are always appreciated! :pinkiehappy:

Is it weird that someone like me that breathes clopfiction can appreciate the concept of losing one's virginity as an irrevocable decision that actually matters? I know, it's a trite observation; I beg pardon.

Not trite to me. It does matter. Or at least, it should.

I love the Firefly intro this chapter. She carries herself like a true badass.

Her true badassery hasn't even been shown yet, though we're getting glimpses of it now. In the immortal words of Vegeta from DBZ abridged...

:rainbowdetermined2:

Thestrals are awesome. That is all.

Agreed! Fell Flight is Leo's invention. She's a bit of a badass in her own right, and will figure more prominently as the story goes along. And as for the thestrals... I have a very special chapter planned for them in due course.

Sounds like that old movie: The Manchurian Candidate.

All I'll say is, if Fell Flight is correct and the communication gems are unhackable, then there's pretty much only one way it could have happened.

Ahh Minsk! That's where Worf is from, don'cha know!

I did not know!

I'm flattered to have contributed to your headcanon, sensai. :twilightsmile:

Well-deserved, Kohai. Well-deserved. I loved that chapter and scene in your story.

That sounds an awful lot like Operation Yellow. Von Manstein's greatest achievement among many as a hotsy-totsy blackshoe-wearing Nazi general.

The gryphons are no strategic slouches, and being a meritocracy, their generals have earned their rank. Though this particular operation, we'll find out in the next chapter, may have exceeded its parameters...

They’d chosen their target well. Being set back from the border, that town, a farming community, didn’t have an Army presence, only earth pony militia, and their fighting quality was highly suspect at best.

But their drunk quality is finely honed!

Well, apparently their cider nog is first rate...

I don't know about you, but I find this blatant ableism to be problematic. Also, Derecho is an awesome name for a pegasus.

I'm sorry, am I triggering you? :trixieshiftleft: I wish I could send this crew into a college campus. They'd be less than impressed with feminists and the SJW crowd.

“Their communication magic is supposed to be unbreachable.

So was Haystation Network.

Burn. :rainbowlaugh:

Should I not have left more pegasi behind to defend the base?

It's time for Linky and Twinkleshine again!

I keeping imagining these two giving a running commentary on the story like they're watching it on a movie screen. Ah, Linky... you would have done well in centuries past.

A Mage Gryphon!

Shoot it!

She's got a shield up.

Yer bum’s oot the windae! (You're crazy!)

No really! They're magically shielded and flying so you can't melee. What are you going to do now, Linky?

Ah dinnae kin... (I don't know)

Try a 40mm grenade, Linky. It worked wonders on corrupted mage griffins in Feathered Heart!

Finally, I had closed with a fifty yards and pulled one of my red ruby alert gems. Though now compromised as a communication device, they had one other secondary use in combat, and that was that they could interfere with casting, disrupt magical auras when thrown into them.

How keen of her to think of such a simple magical solution!

Also borrowed at least in part from Feathered Heart. The griffies gave the marines some gems that tended to block magic in a small area so they could use their comms.

(grumble) Cheaters...

Now, now... FIrefly is a mare who who uses all tools at her disposal, Linky. :trixieshiftright: You of all ponies should appreciate that! And in truth, not even she could just punch through that shield on her own. She's badass, but she's no Mary Sue.

I think she's channeling Aragorn!

You know, I didn't even think of that when I wrote that line, but you're right! :pinkiegasp:

Couldn't have happened to a nicer eagless.

Be that as it may, poor Firefly may end up a bit distraught over it... :fluttershyouch:

Holy shit, you're updating your stories in rapid succession. You're putting pressure on me to keep writing that side story. Yes, I'm still working on it. Slowly...

Anyway, what a chapter. And what an ending. That's very effective.

6 days since I power read the story and you give me another chapter. An awesome chapter to boot? You're my hero.

I'm certainly interested to see where this goes.

This is a great story.

It is just a shame that it has so few likes...

6532849 This is one of the most underrated stories of all time. It's better than more than a few 1000+ like stories I've read on the subject of war.

Sorry for not answering all this earlier.

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Thank you! The next chapter will obviously deal with the aftermath of the raid, and the effect on her psyche. But when all was said and done, it's best she deal with it sooner rather than later.

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You're welcome. I'm trying to do one chapter of each of my stories in turn, and by coincidence you caught up with the story just as I writing a new chapter. Next one will probably be out in a couple weeks.

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You both flatter me. :twilightblush: Starting to see more of an uptick in likes now, I'm happy to say. This will be a long story, just have to keep at it and trust that readers will come in time, especially as the like count goes higher.

6575376 I'm going to break a personal rule and upvote now instead of when the story is completed, it's not getting the love it deserves.

I normally read from my phone (which sucks that i can never leave a reply), but i happened to be home near a computer. Finally decided this needed to be off my 'to-read' list (and into my favorites i might add), so lets do this!
*Side note: Also dropping this into my fav list on my (Never looked at)page. This story needs more love!

“Bully,” I nodded. With that, I set up a new patrol and training schedule with Wind Whistler, keeping it flexible so that the veteran squads could be cycled in.

Good to see she made it to camp. :ajsmug:

Early the next morning, I was waiting by the outpost’s landing pad, Blindside at my side...

Hehe.. at her blind side.. :rainbowlaugh: (no problems here. just fun.)

Now, either you acknowledge me as your commanding officer until Lieutenant Sundiver recovers, and I forget that charming little repartee… or you continue making a foal of yourself and I put your in your richly-deserved place.” With effort, I kept a smile off my face.

Perhaps 'you' would do better? Eh? Eeeehhh? :rainbowwild: I know... :applecry:

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Two stupid mistakes, now fixed. :facehoof: Thanks for pointing them out.

6581209 Eeyup. :eeyup:
After constantly reading from a phone that i can't comment on stories with, makes me feel good when i finally can help/comment. :twilightsmile:

Off the hook!! Took my sweet time reading this... Plus the other one. Oh and, A shout out to one of the Quest of Skyrim which has the same Title (Innocence Lost) Awesome! :pinkiehappy:

Finally decided to pull my head out of my plot and give this a whirl. Not disappointed.

Ah, Full Metal Jacket. * sniff* now that takes me back.

Firefly is going to have to straighten up and fly right and that soon.

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Well, it is appreciated. I'm an editor and I *hate* it when I make editing mistakes in my own stories.

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Glad you enjoyed!!!! Promise I'll get back to CoD before too long as well.

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Welcome aboard! The FMJ reference was rather blatant but too good not to use. Take it you've been to boot camp yourself?

6593011 I've never had that particular *ahem* pleasure of going through boot camp.

I am quite enjoying this story after it was recommended through a couple of author's stories/blogs I have been following. One thing I will say though, if it hadn't been for the recommendations I would have dropped it early on. I personally found the initial flashback(?) that started the story and the one at the start of the first chapter off-putting. Once those were done and the (present time) story started to get going I am glad to say that my initial impression was wrong and I am happy that I kept reading.

6594721 Was there anything in particular about the initial flashback and the first chapter's introductory narration that bothered you?

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The one in the prologue was franky just strange and apparently is only a thing because of some other stories that aren't exactly related in any meaningful way according to the authors note. For the second it is mainly because after such a short bit of 'normal time' in the prologue the opening part of the next chapter only rehashes things the reader can already infer without giving any actual details about those things.

*edit*

The first one in the prologue might be scaring off some readers from this story as it gives a very different impression about what the story contains compared to the description. I came in expecting ye olde Equestria with a helping of warrior pegasi and instead get a plate of mystical planes and a side of humans channeling the spirits of ponies.

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Your point is well taken, and is now addressed. There's a different intro to the prologue now, one that more fits the story. Give it a look and see what you think. Beyond that, thank you for the like, and welcome aboard.

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That is a much more fitting start to the story, well done.

Not that I mean to intrude, but do you want a soundtrack done for this like on TLaTU? I'm not busy, and kinda need a distraction as of now.

I'd normally mail you this sort of thing, but I feel this should be a public notice.

All nostalgia here... It somehow reminds me of something at this chapter in particular... literally.

The description of Firefly equipping her wingblades is a great addition to this chapter. Fantastic way to handle exposition!

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