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Equestria, the bastion of peace and harmony of the world. The nation favored by Fate itself.
However, a discovery, a power hungry noble, and the death of a single Griffon breaks the chains of destiny.
Both sides have their heroes. Both sides have their villains. Both sides believe they are doing what is right.
Both sides may be wrong.
In either case, it is no longer up to Fate, but to the wings of War.


Edited by jeray2000 and WickedLSDragon
Inspired by the artwork and characters of Equestria-Pervails
Cover art by Equestria-Pervails

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 51 )

Look's good so far, keep it up.

Also, it's kinda refreshing to see a war story where the issue isn't black and white the ponies aren't perfect and good by default.

This looks promising, I'll be sure to keep tabs on it.

6283581 Thank you! :rainbowkiss:

I will try my best and hopefully I won't disappoint you. :ajsmug:

6283677 I am working on the second chapter and I will try to get it out this weekend.

Avidity's a bit ♫ cray-craaaay ♫ I think... :rainbowlaugh:

I don't think Equestria ever has to worry about issues with a weak monarch. 'Be nice or I drop the Sun on you', and all that... :trollestia:

I look forward to the next chapter!

6284015 What makes you say that? She's the bastion of sanity, and will cut anyone who disagrees. :pinkiecrazy:

Celestia's apparently forgotten the first tenet of ruling: might makes right. She should've burned Avidity down where she stood. :pinkiecrazy:

6358954 That may be important plot point in the future. :raritywink:

This caught my attention. I'll say I'm liking it so far, can't wait to see where this goes. :yay: Keep it up!

I really like how this story is going, especially when you add the historical notes at the end of each chapter. Please keep up the great work :)

Assassinating an ambassador? I think it's time to mare-up, round-file the laws, and purge the ranks of the nobility, Celestia. :facehoof:

Colour me interested! A very intriguing start!
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whats with the flying rainbow dash link?

It's at times like these that tyranny is exceptionally attractive...

Oookay, so even the neutral nobles voted for it? It's starting to stretch credibility that no one can even figure out what's going on when you have a conspiracy that large.

interested, but hopefully sensual references don't continue.

Hmm. I wonder how Celestia would say if she heard Avidity's reason for the invasion... and her rage against the Princess.

6526021 What link? If there is a URL link inside the story (not counting the links to my editors/Equestria Pervails in my description) I didn't intend for it to be there. If you can point it out to me, I will remove it immediately. :twilightsheepish:

6528610 Yes, those are going to decline once we are in the thick of things. :twilightsmile:

While I cannot promise they will completely disappear, I am only going to use them one it adds to the story and characters. This is not going to be like Game of Thrones in regards to sex. :twilightblush:

6526786 That is an entirely fair complaint, I have to admit. :applejackunsure:

I promise to rectify this next chapter. :ajsmug:

6529198

Everyone shifted their focus to the King. “I have taken your accounts into consideration, and have made my decision. Hywel, bring me paper and the dragon dust.”https://static.fimfiction.net/images/interactive_pony/dash/fly_rainbow_right.gif

just pops in there right at the end

6529293 :applejackconfused: No idea how that got there.

It's gone now. Thanks for the help.:yay:

I can agree with that last statement in the author's note. Too many assume otherwise.

But wow, Avidity has gone mad. An unnecessary war. Of course, greed and a lust for power have done much worse...

If I might be so bold (I re-read this chapter), might I ask what Avidity was so angry about during the meeting when Prace looked up at her, and what Fleur found out (or what Avidity thought she found out)?

Comment posted by bobby125 deleted Nov 4th, 2015

Not a bad chapter. Hope to see more soon :D

6801186 This one took a long time because of work and the holidays. I also rewrote most of the sections of this chapter multiple times. The next one should come far sooner.

Claws were rigid, paws were heavy.

There's vomit on his sweater already.

I'm so sorry.

6801374 hey are you going to do what war dose like show the fast ment of war time tech

people hate war becasue the lose of life and all but we be lying to ourself if if it didn't have a up side to it like advecnment in medcial tech and weapons and more

6560464 great and lust is one of many why war happen but war can happen when ideals are faceing off or food become low and so on

HOW DOES THIS NOT HAVE MORE READERS?!?!?!?! This is a probably the best war fic that came out last year! And it only has 405 readers!?! A crime I say!!!!!!

7144100 To be fair, I did edit the first and second chapter heavily after publishing. I made them more coherent and gave the characters clearer motivations for their actions.

I probably lost a lot of potential readers just by how confusing things were when I first published this story. :ajsleepy:

7152886 Actually, I read it back in September and I thought it was great. *pats you on the back* So cheer up okay! :pinkiehappy:

If Fancy Pants is evil in this story, does that mean that Prince Blueblood is good or at least nice?

Ah, geez, Celestia. You won't practice, you won't talk to your co-ruler, you jumped into a duel unprepared, and you didn't figure out any kind of contingency plan in case of disaster which, naturally, caused a disaster.

I feel really bad for Luna at this point. From her point of view, her sister has suddenly gone nuts and invaded another country for no reason. She's going to have to capitulate and trade the Griffins whatever they want to get her sister back just to find out what the heck is going on. Her only other option is to a jump ignorantly into command of a bloody half-lost war that she doesn't even know what it's about. I look forward to seeing what she has to say to her sister about this mess.

7156608 What makes you think Fancy Pants is evil?

7156628 There will be sisterly words all right... :raritywink:

7156795 Did Celestia get captured, or did those guards manage to save her? Or is she dead? I'm not sure from the text, so please excuse me curiosity.

7160468 I can tell what happened to Celestia, but it will spoil the next chapter. :raritywink:

7156608 Nice username sounds a bit familiar though :scootangel:

Wow. Did not see all of this coming. Though I do predict a very rapid exacting of vengence from Luna. Nevermind the light, it shall be the night they fear!

7156793 Well the plot synopsis mentions a power hungry noble, and there's a Fancy Pants tag, so I just assumed...

One or two spelling errors here but otherwise a good chapter!
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Yet, our deaths never came. A female griffon dressed in lighter armor with a distinct buckler, possible even one of the Griffonian generals, shouted for the pursuers to stop.

Here is the mistake that will cost a million lives. Celestia-as-hostage can be traded to put the province in question unambiguously under griffon control, extract weregild for the loss of royal life, pay for the war, and gain acquiescence for an investigation into the deaths of the king's daughter.

A Celestia back in Canterlot means that none of that happens and the war grinds on. There's going to be a lot more notches cut into spears.

7262031 I will gladly fix any that you have spotted.

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