It sucks that Celestia's magic is going to speed up the protagonists ungulation.

To be honest I think this is an even better improvement in your writing then last time, you really managed to nail a good atmosphere between the guy and Steve Magnet and their conversation, you made it clear that it might not have been sea serpent entirely, but I did like the question about why doesn't be seem more in a hurry to go back home and if everything might not have been planed/destined from the start; great job on that.

I though that Celestia's scheduled appearance at the end of the pilot episode was a little off, but I think it fit the situation well and showing that she was more worried about his well being then going to reunited with her defeated sister peaked volume of what she thinks of him, but it might also make her over confidant in how well things in the show should work out too. I wonder how further along in becoming a pony he will be when he gets up.

I think the scene with Twilight being beaten by NMM and having the guy questioning himself about getting involved or not interesting and adding the idea that he was suing hide his actual cowardices when things were dangerous, was a great idea and helped to show that he had to search deep within himself to set in and defend the Mane Six to show actual courage and not a cocky cutter scene that you would expect from lesser stories; great job on that. The confrontation went expectingly bad for him, but it wounds did help scares will prove that he can have the courage to fight for others in need.

I though that Twilight's persistent fear of the guy, despite her mentor's reassurances of the opposite, interesting and I wonder if there will be more reproductions to this later down the road.

I wonder if Luna is going to resent Celestia for leaving her behind for the human, or something else will sprung from that change in the show

While their might have been a few very minor dull parts to the chapter, it was over all excellent in the overall execution and open's up a lot of possibilities for later in the story. I am honestly surprised how you manage to go deeper in the quality of your writing in just a few chapters; great job of that and keep it up, you are an inspiration on that.

More please

Wow the quality of this story has really picked up since chapter 1

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Thank you for your comment. I'm in the process of reworking that chapter after it was brought to my attention earlier. I'm also going over the current chapters that I have yet to publish and checking for the same issue. If there is anything else please let me know so I can improve on it.

I want New chapter...
Now this story on my shi- i mean, tracking favorite list...

I honestly love this story too much, and i keep rereading it every so often. I LOVE most of the stories which start like this, the characters are lovable and feel real. I Cannot wait for a new chapter!!!

I’m enjoying the friendship between Sean and Celestia. Also “Sunny D“ is the best nickname for her I’ve ever seen. XD

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Oh. Don't worry I got more.

sort of.

So the EoH are indeed both deliberate and malicious. They sent Celestia to earth, had Sean pushed into the portal, and are turning him into a pony to force him to stay forever. Is this supposed to "help" him? Because it really isn't. It is a nebulous for deciding it lnows better rhan him and will take away his ability to choose his life by taking away everything he knew. Even if his life wasn't perfect that's no reason, because nobody has it perfect

Stupid transmogrifing curse the boy needs a cure and stat. Also he should treat Steven better his attitude seems a bit skewed

"bravery and stupidity"

“I’ll admit very few ponies, especially stallions, had the guts to even attack me.

huh.. sounds like it's a bit of RGRE equestria, or it's protect the stallions from danger to propagate the species?.
(let's read and find out 😊 (14 chapter published)).

edit: Yea, i hit the nail on the head with a sledgehammer on that one, read next chapter for why.

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Assuming it is the Elements of Harmony. The only thing we have to go on is the rainbow colored effects and a cryptically vague line of thought from Steven. Who or whatever is causing this might be something else entirely.

Heh, knew he wouldn't be capable of resisting.

And you need to go suck a dick.

I'm getting the distinct impression that Sean doesn't like Steve very much lol.

“YOU INSIFINGANT RODENT!!!”

Lol, I didn't know that rodents could be insifingant.

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Also, "insufferable" might be a better word here. Rodents are insignificant in general.