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Titanium Dragon


TD writes and reviews pony fanfiction, and has a serious RariJack addiction. Send help and/or ponies.

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Rarity has traveled across the length of Equestria to reach the Pool of Dreams. Her goal? To finally find a stallion worthy of being her boyfriend.

The remains of those who used their wishes carelessly lie strewn around the pool. But Rarity is no fool. She knows exactly what she wants.

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Greki #1 · Feb 5th, 2016 · · 1 ·

Okay, this was hilarious.

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Hah, thanks. Glad I made you chuckle. :twilightsmile:

Wow, I loved the poetry in the story, that was really good. Gotta love Rarity's reaction about Twilight though, it made me laugh so thank you for that. Now if you will excuse me, I have to go put this on my favourites list now. Great story by the way!!!:pinkiehappy:

I didn't expect that ending at all! I expected something very, very different (I didn't see the comedy tag.) I enjoyed this quite a lot, though! 'Tis a wonderful story you've produced. :yay:

Ah yes, I remember this. How very Rarity, to focus on every little detail but miss an essential part of the big picture. I'm glad to see this on Fimfiction.

Oh I get it.

She got Twilight because of that last bit of the wish, asking to be a princess!

Clever High Moon - I mean, Titanium Dragon! You sneaky little bugger!

Y O U S N E A K Y L I T T L E B U G G E R I N D E E D!

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It has been a while since I last stretched my poetic muscles, and that was a very different sort of poetry. I'm glad the poems here worked for you as well; it was quite fun writing them (though rather time intensive; writing metered rhyming poetry is slow going compared to prose).

Thank you for reading; I'm glad you liked it so. :heart:

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Yeah, only took me six months to get it ready for here. Almost exactly six months, in fact. :trixieshiftright:

I added a fair bit of extra poetry to it, and I like it a lot better for it; it adds more of a sense of gravitas to the Pool of Dreams.

How very Rarity, to focus on every little detail but miss an essential part of the big picture.

Well, you know what they say, the devil's in the details. :raritydespair:

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You sneaky little bugger

Now, now, you're confusing me with Horizon.

I'm definitely not a changeling. :trixieshiftright:

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I'm glad you liked it, even if it wasn't quite what you were expecting. :heart:

Cute, but far too short. I appreciate that this isn't another bait-and-switch. I don't think I'd forgive you if it were.

6905309 Yeah, no links please. Horizon doesn't want me over there.

It's a long story and he'd get mad if you brought my name up.

I don't want to upset him...not after...the accident...with his...

He's been hurt enough as it is.

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Hoping that we'd get to see Rarity and Twilight go on that date? :heart:

I'm glad you thought it was cute.

And yes, not another bait-and-switch. I adore twists in general too much.

I think my next story won't include any major twists at all.

Of course, that's exactly what I'd say if I was planning to include one... :trixieshiftright:

6905337 Good story by the way if I didn't make it clear.

Tell Horizon I'm sorry for his loss.

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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

And don't worry. I'm sure whatever you broke will grow back.

Probably. :trixieshiftright:

6905366 That's rather insensitive, assuming you didn't know otherwise...

:moustache: Twilight how could you!
:twilightsmile: Wut?
:raritycry: Noooooooooooooooooooooooo! I should of wished for an improvement in sweeties cooking
:rainbowhuh: Spike's so mad
:fluttercry: some pony's in big trouble mister!
:pinkiesmile: fun fun fun fun
:applejackconfused: that was a pony of a different color
:derpytongue2: I just don't know what happened

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Don't worry, I have absolutely no idea whatsoever what we're talking about. :pinkiesmile:

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Poor Spike. :heart:

6905396 Death. We're talking about death here, you fool.

She was so close to out witting the pool. This a a great short story and funny.

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That isn't very nice; he's probably off collecting a wizard's soul somewhere. It isn't nice to talk about him behind his back.

Though I don't think he tends to hold a grudge.

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Basically. It's no secret that I'm hardcore Twi shipper, and Rarity's one of my favorite pairings for her.

haha, yessss. this is fantastic. I love it. Especially the poetry; I liked how much was conveyed through it.

6905418 Okay I'll just make this clearer to you.

Someone who knew him died.

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Oh. I thought we were doing a bit. :applejackconfused:

See, in my family, we just blurt that sort of thing out. Cuts down on the confusion and accidental dead parrot sketches.

6905431 If you want to know who it was that died...

It was this joke that died. I can piss about with people too, TD. Sleep tight, hard cheeks! Bwa ha ha ha!

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Breaking reality is hard work, man. Irony makes it easier; lets you wedge it in between the cracks. :ajsmug:

Glad you liked it!

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Thank you! Poetry is a really interesting thing; I really am fascinated by the flow of it, but it is quite difficult to craft properly. Took a fair bit of work (and some help from my editors making sure all the lines scanned correctly, with the proper meter and flow).

I'm happy that it worked for you. It was fun making it. :twilightsmile:

6905450 Speaking of poetry, I also really liked the rhymes to.

:rainbowlaugh: Even with the comedy tag, wasn't sure how badly Rarity's wish would turn out. She got off lightly. With the "born in Canterlot" bit, was almost hoping for Spike, was half expecting her to return home and find nothing different. That Canterlot bit probably also excludes the rest of the Princesses.

At least Rarity avoided some of the more obvious pitfalls with wish making, while still staying in character.

I read this story once and didn't get it. Then I read it again and realized I'm just a bad reader. Whoops. :derpytongue2:

Soon you shall see your wish is fulfilled.

But this bit tweaked my Grammar Nazi radar really hard for some reason. This is such a tiny, tiny issue, and no one is going to care about this but me, but . . . I don't know if that "is" should be a "be." Y'know, because the present subjunctive mood seems to fit better here. Seems like eventualities should go with subjunctive, even though I can't find any examples for this. I can't tell which version is correct. I don't think I've seen subjunctive used in this case before, but it just sounds better in this particular case. Gosh, this is annoying me.

Alternatively, you could omit the "is" entirely and not only circumvent this entire issue, but bring down this line to eight syllables (in line with the rest of the stanza).

. . . Told you no one cares. :fluttershyouch: I spent more time researching this than reading the story.

Honestly expected some kind of dark twist in which Rarity died or something.

Oh well, this was still a great read regardless. Twilight is perfect for Rarity! :twilightsmile:

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Fair enough! Admittedly RariLight is an idea which interests me, but sadly I don't really have any "proper" RariLight stories planned at the moment. I do plan to eventually cover all 15 mane 6 ships though with "proper" shipfics.

You know, between the overwhelming pile of RariJack I apparently want to produce. :trixieshiftright:

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Glad it amused you. :twilightsmile:

I don't know if you're familiar with the Xanth novels, but in one of them, there is a "wishing ring" that "grants wishes", but it never seems to really do anything. And yet, everything seems to work out right anyway, for completely unrelated reasons (for which the wing always claims victory). :trixieshiftright:

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Hehe, well you never know with wishes. Glad you approved of the outcome, even if Rarity didn't. :raritywink:

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Good idea. Fixed according to the last suggestion. Thank you! :twilightsmile:

>use "boyfriend" in description
>not "coltfriend"
> 0/10

nah, it was lit fam. Now you have to read Spoilers so you can revel in how much better your comedy is than mine.

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Hear me out with this idea, alright?

Rarity grudgingly agrees to go on that date. Twilight pours her heart out, gushing about how Rarity's such a sweetheart, she's always had such a beautiful heart, she's always been so generous and so caring and from the first moment they met, Rarity's treated her like nopony else has: with the care and grace she would expect from a princess.

Rarity's voice hitches. She can't just refuse Twilight's affections outright, not when that clearly came from the heart. In an effort to let her down easy, Rarity explains the wishing pool, how she asked for somepony who'd fulfill all these criteria. Twilight gets all teary eyed because she thinks Rarity believes that she (Twilight) is all of those things, and is just over the moon that Rarity feels the same way and loudly professes her undying love, promising that even if she lives forever, she would never, ever consider taking another lover because Rarity is just perfection incarnate.

THEN

Rarity wakes up in a cold sweat...

Cuddled up with Twilight, pictures of their marriage all around the room. She sighs again, but happily. She got her wish long ago and she's been living the dream ever since, no silly pool needed.

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That's some mighty fine cover art you've got there.

I'll have to take a look. :heart:

Well, you managed to fail to meet my expectations. For shame.

I was so sure you'd somehow make it Applejack.

6905435 ...I can't believe I fell for it. :facehoof:

Anyway, very nice story. :D

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I... I write about things other than RariJack!

Sometimes!

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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :heart:

6905629 not bad for 10 minutes with Microsoft Paint, eh? :ajsmug:

Well, that could've turned out worse.

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That story will see the light of day. Whether by my pen or TD's remains to be seen.

Hahaha, perfect! Totally perfect, Titanium!

I needed that to cheer me up today. Though admittedly, from the description on the story, I was expecting something dark, not a rom com.

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If you want to write it, go right ahead. There's nothing wrong with recursive fanfiction, or writing a story inspired by another story.

Heck, Horizon has a collection of nothing but such things.

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Thanks, Moose! I'm glad it cheered you up. That's always a great thing to hear. :pinkiesmile:

As far as the summary goes... I was trying to avoid putting the whole plot into the summary, but that made it kind of a bit tricky to write. At least the tags are there to give some warning. I hope. :trixieshiftright:

Well, for as much planning as she provided, she forgot to mention the one crucial detail that would have prevented the ending as it was :rainbowlaugh:
A nice amusing read, good job!

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You're welcome! I'm glad it made you smile. :twilightsmile:

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